Having trouble making a decent flavor text anyone mind helping me out?

[notasyndie]

So recently I've decided to make a serious character for CM instead of just using memey characters for 10 rounds then changing. I have backstory and appearance finished and I just need a flavor text. The issue is all of mine have been horrible so far and that is why I have come here. Anyway, ive been trying to model my character around a hockey player named Dustin Byfuglien.


Here is his wiki page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dustin_Byfuglien


Here is also a badass video of the guy: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7U_WX14BPV4

Anyway you get the picture he is a 6'5 265 lb monster, again gladly appreciate any help guys

EDIT: Found a before and after picture of him if that helps https://s17.postimg.org/rwg2u3f4v/Photo ... 070749.jpg

[Rustarus]

I got you man, work off of this.

Dustin Byfuglien has black eyes, a nice well trimmed beard and a serious face, most of the time. He is serious and strong, and seems like the kind of guy who has been in the marines for a long time. Completely fit, he decided to join the marines ever since he was young, fantasizing saving the worlds one by one. Yet... he never expected this type of operation... 6'5 and 265 he does as he is told, and makes sure he serves the best he can. Hopefully, all goes well.

[notasyndie]

I got you man, work off of this.

Dustin Byfuglien has black eyes, a nice well trimmed beard and a serious face, most of the time. He is serious and strong, and seems like the kind of guy who has been in the marines for a long time. Completely fit, he decided to join the marines ever since he was young, fantasizing saving the worlds one by one. Yet... he never expected this type of operation... 6'5 and 265 he does as he is told, and makes sure he serves the best he can. Hopefully, all goes well.

Thanks man really appreciate it

[danmax67]

when Dustin Byfuglien his home colony was atacked my a lot of aliens so he kiled them all of fthem. but then after he kiled al of them tjhey were al dead so the uscm adoptid him bcos his dady abd momy were dead. he ws so good h e becam new president of americansa and then was leader good. but then 1 day when more aliens were discovred he was arive and atack enemies bcos he 1nce kiled 4 quens wwith 1 snipper rifle

[notasyndie]

when Dustin Byfuglien his home colony was atacked my a lot of aliens so he kiled them all of fthem. but then after he kiled al of them tjhey were al dead so the uscm adoptid him bcos his dady abd momy were dead. he ws so good h e becam new president of americansa and then was leader good. but then 1 day when more aliens were discovred he was arive and atack enemies bcos he 1nce kiled 4 quens wwith 1 snipper rifle

It was actually a pistol good sir