z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

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z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

Post by z a n e b o t » 06 May 2018, 02:31

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Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Randal 'Wilks' Wilkerson

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Sah'tin-Teer

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)? I intend to play my predator as a rather zealous individual. Putting myself at a great disadvantage during the hunt using only the bare necessity of tools and weapons, limiting the use of high-tech weaponry such as the plasma-caster and smart disk and using only basic weapons during the hunt. If the weapon is lost then I would resort to using my wrist blades. The main purpose of Sah'tin is to gain maximum thrill from the hunt, even if it means putting himself in near death situations. I'd usually try and go after the most dangerous prey I could to truly test myself. Of course certain situations would hinder this as every round is different from the last.

Why should we whitelist you? I've been playing CM for a quite a while and I'm always trying to create roleplay on the servers for others rather than myself. Having a role like this would greatly help me create roleplay, since predators are always the center of a lot of roleplay in-game. My main purpose is to create a better environment for everyone else to have fun in. I'm a big fan of predators in general and since I've been playing I've always wanted to try and apply for one.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? No.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? No.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes.

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Re: z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

Post by Karmac » 06 May 2018, 02:56

The backstory is acceptable and includes much personal information about your predator without him explicitly explaining himself and his actions.

Intended playstyle is nothing outstanding, but few people will admit they're going into a round to kill folks so it's good your making no mis-conceptions there, just make sure you aren't deciding every round that the queen is the most dangerous prey, you're there to keep the balance at best and not ruin it at worst.

I'll +1 this.
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Re: z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

Post by z a n e b o t » 06 May 2018, 03:04

Karmac wrote:
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The backstory is acceptable and includes much personal information about your predator without him explicitly explaining himself and his actions.

Intended playstyle is nothing outstanding, but few people will admit they're going into a round to kill folks so it's good your making no mis-conceptions there, just make sure you aren't deciding every round that the queen is the most dangerous prey, you're there to keep the balance at best and not ruin it at worst.

I'll +1 this.
Thanks, and I don't think I'm going to go after the queen much at all, unless it's late game and won't completely screw over the xeno's for the round. More looking for t3's to go after as dangerous prey since it wont have a massive impact if they die.

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Post by Karmac » 06 May 2018, 03:13

That's debatable, but good luck in any case.
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Post by edda » 06 May 2018, 04:50

Straightforward personality and clear concept, known competent MT, a mod to boot. +1
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Post by Avalanchee » 06 May 2018, 05:03

Fine story, good player.
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Post by Kavlo » 06 May 2018, 08:27

App overall looks good; well written backstory, unique enough playstyle though you better be atleast semi-robust unless you wanna get slammed on each predator round and to top it off they're an active player.
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Re: z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

Post by z a n e b o t » 06 May 2018, 16:17

edda wrote:
06 May 2018, 04:50
Straightforward personality and clear concept, known competent MT, a mod to boot. +1
Avalanchee wrote:
06 May 2018, 05:03
Fine story, good player.
+1
Kavlo wrote:
06 May 2018, 08:27
App overall looks good; well written backstory, unique enough playstyle though you better be atleast semi-robust unless you wanna get slammed on each predator round and to top it off they're an active player.
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Post by Drownie » 27 Jun 2018, 19:10

I liked how you described your character in the first sentences, giving a good information about him - I usually don't like when people explicitly describe their Predator in the third person, but this is just a small counterweight.
The story does not lack details, which for me is an important point to identify your Predator modus operandi and his coherence with the "How do you intend to play your predator" thing, also you're a good player and normally being in the Staff qualifies the player.
I'm going with a +1.
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Post by spartanbobby » 04 Jul 2018, 15:14

Can't say I've seen your character much but then again I don't plat shipside much anymore anyhow your app looks great. As someone who tries to not use their plasma caster much at all, I can say your playstyle while tricky when it comes to getting ganged up on is do-able. I thought the story was a good enjoyable read that wasn't a 5-page long google doc and your avatar isn't half bad so.

+1

(PS: how does your predator feel about cloaking just curious)
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Re: z a n e b o t's predator app- Sah'tin Dhari

Post by z a n e b o t » 04 Jul 2018, 15:18

spartanbobby wrote:
04 Jul 2018, 15:14
Can't say I've seen your character much but then again I don't plat shipside much anymore anyhow your app looks great. As someone who tries to not use their plasma caster much at all, I can say your playstyle while tricky when it comes to getting ganged up on is do-able. I thought the story was a good enjoyable read that wasn't a 5-page long google doc and your avatar isn't half bad so.

+1

(PS: how does your predator feel about cloaking just curious)
So the best way I can really explain how my pred feels about cloaking is to just be honest about it. My pred himself wouldn't really use cloaking all that much but lets be honest, there's gonna be rounds where I'll have to end up using it to avoid getting boinked by a million xenos or marines. Depending on how the round goes though I'll either just stick to my characters playstyle and die in the fight or just cloak out. It'll all just really depend but pertaining to my backstory he dislikes using it all that much if at all unless its for like scouting or something.

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Post by Enceri » 07 Jul 2018, 15:25

I enjoyed your story son, but your play style is a bit iffy to me, but if you say you'll try to do it, I believe you.

I'll drop my +1, good luck Zane.

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Post by z a n e b o t » 07 Jul 2018, 16:02

Enceri wrote:
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I enjoyed your story son, but your play style is a bit iffy to me, but if you say you'll try to do it, I believe you.

I'll drop my +1, good luck Zane.
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Post by Ghostdex » 07 Jul 2018, 17:42

The story is fine but like it was stated before, the playstyle is nothing new, but I feel like I can trust you with the role so I'll stay neutral. Good luck
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Post by NoahKirchner » 08 Jul 2018, 06:02

The story was informative, the only issue I really saw with it was you repeated your pred's name a lot, which towards the ending of the fight especially started to get a bit strange. However, the actual contents of the story said a fair bit about your predator and I can certainly appreciate the effort putting into trying to make his beliefs/fighting style present in the story without it being explicitly stated. Playing predator can certainly be difficult with marines trying to kill you constantly so this playstyle will certainly be a difficult one I'm sure. If you can manage to pull it off, though, I think that dueling with marines when it's possible could bring a lot more enjoyment to both sides and result in some tense battles that highten the quality of roleplay on the server.

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Post by DriedMilk » 08 Jul 2018, 14:45

Zane is a good lad and the app is nice

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Post by Kerek » 08 Jul 2018, 14:47

Good rper, good story, yuhhhhhhhhhh

+1 g’luck
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Post by TheMaskedMan2 » 08 Jul 2018, 15:49

I'm generally pretty easygoing but you seem to understand the basics of Predator, story decent, so on and so forth.

Don't really have any major complaints so i'll give this my +1
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Post by Imperator_Titan » 08 Jul 2018, 16:58

Alright. Time to begin my process reviewing. The story was generic as is the playstyle. This isn't worth -1ing on its own imo as an original playstyle is fairly hard. You seem like a decent enough guy that knows the lore well enough. Don't have any issues besides for the fact that I don't know you well ICly but I'm on vacation so I'll give the benefit of doubt, I'd like to give you a chance.

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Post by z a n e b o t » 08 Jul 2018, 17:53

NoahKirchner wrote:
08 Jul 2018, 06:02
The story was informative, the only issue I really saw with it was you repeated your pred's name a lot, which towards the ending of the fight especially started to get a bit strange. However, the actual contents of the story said a fair bit about your predator and I can certainly appreciate the effort putting into trying to make his beliefs/fighting style present in the story without it being explicitly stated. Playing predator can certainly be difficult with marines trying to kill you constantly so this playstyle will certainly be a difficult one I'm sure. If you can manage to pull it off, though, I think that dueling with marines when it's possible could bring a lot more enjoyment to both sides and result in some tense battles that highten the quality of roleplay on the server.

+1
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08 Jul 2018, 14:45
Zane is a good lad and the app is nice

+1
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08 Jul 2018, 14:47
Good rper, good story, yuhhhhhhhhhh

+1 g’luck
TheMaskedMan2 wrote:
08 Jul 2018, 15:49
I'm generally pretty easygoing but you seem to understand the basics of Predator, story decent, so on and so forth.

Don't really have any major complaints so i'll give this my +1
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08 Jul 2018, 16:58
Alright. Time to begin my process reviewing. The story was generic as is the playstyle. This isn't worth -1ing on its own imo as an original playstyle is fairly hard. You seem like a decent enough guy that knows the lore well enough. Don't have any issues besides for the fact that I don't know you well ICly but I'm on vacation so I'll give the benefit of doubt, I'd like to give you a chance.

+1
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The story is fine but like it was stated before, the playstyle is nothing new, but I feel like I can trust you with the role so I'll stay neutral. Good luck
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Post by Symbiosis » 09 Jul 2018, 08:30

+1 - using the Smart discs is a common tactic when the Hive swarms you. I’d encourage you to keep some in your pack when you’re accepted... seeing as this App is solid and the community thinks highly of you, I don’t see why it wouldn’t be.
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Post by z a n e b o t » 09 Jul 2018, 16:29

Symbiosis wrote:
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+1 - using the Smart discs is a common tactic when the Hive swarms you. I’d encourage you to keep some in your pack when you’re accepted... seeing as this App is solid and the community thinks highly of you, I don’t see why it wouldn’t be.
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Post by Aceluke123 » 12 Jul 2018, 19:36

Okay, since a lot has been said about you already yet your story isn't completely critiqued I'll give a bit of that to you.

While you did decently to describe the scene you probably spent too much time repeating yourself too often. The word serpent is used 19 times in your block of text of a story. Something quite bad when it comes to trying to make a story flow smoothly while reading. With that said I don't hate it, as you did your best to describe the entirety of what went on with your fight. The spacing of the story is one which I dislike as reading a large block of text is hard for the eyes and causes discomfort for the reader. Though describing your predator is nice as it shows to the reader how you want them to look. I'd suggest for any fighting scene to not overly detail it, but leave some of what goes on to the reader's imagination.

Clearly, an effort was at least put into the story and application as a whole but writing stories isn't everyone's forte so as what Imperator said, it isn't new nor is the style new. Though it has quality and effort put into it that I like.

I know you as a player and a moderator seem very thoughtful and don't seem like one to lose his cool if given an antagonist position like a predator. So I'll give you a +1
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Post by VortexGaming » 14 Jul 2018, 18:08

Everythings here to give you a +1
I like the story, and the personality of your pred sounds interesting, but it might restrict you in the long run.
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