Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

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Mizari
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Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 18 Dec 2018, 13:35

Byond ID:

Mizari

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):

Myles 'Rogue' Jenson (Xeno Mainly)

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name):

Datuin Luar-ke

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?

I am familiar, yes.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?:

Datuin believes in honor above everything else and honoring the dead who have proven worthy so with that being said he strives to bring honor to his clan in the means of worthy trophies. He carefully selects his targets based on their threat level and if it would bring honor. I'd like to Roleplay a bit more with other Predator's, trying to show them his worth especially to those more well known for their honor. He is from a dwindling clan and the more honor he can bring, the more his clan will grow at least in his mind. I want to create interesting roleplay engagements with both Marines and Xeno's alike, placing Datuin in situation's that would allow him to show his worth to other Yautja.

Why should we whitelist you?

Having played on Colonial Marines since 2015, I've watched throughout the years as the server has grown to the implemention of Predators. I am familiar with the Code and I believe I can really bring some interesting roleplay engagements and also promote more roleplay between Predators.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?

No.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?

No

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?

Yes.

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by x31stOverlord » 18 Dec 2018, 13:45

Alright, firstly the story was well written, it has good pacing with good grammar and no real major issues. Good read, engaging.

The playstyle, whilst not unique, may open opportunity for RP with the other preds with his clan being smaller/dwindling, although hopefully tempered to refrain from an over-imbalancing of rounds by hunting too much (something I'm not concerned about as Mizari is a respected player on the server and has been for quite some time)

Mizari is someone I can definitely say will not abuse the powers of the Pred, and, whilst he does not play Marine all too much, the times I have seen him play Marine and event roles in Admin ran events he has shown himself able to provide a high level of RP to those around him.

+1
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by ThesoldierLLJK » 18 Dec 2018, 13:54

Don't you mean Datuin Lunar-Teer?

Memeing aside, story was good, the play style is fine by me.
Also the player is one of our better queens, is a senior mod, and he won't screw it up

Big +1

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by BobatNight » 18 Dec 2018, 15:12

Great Queen to have, doesn't use the role to be an ass to the hive and generally willing to communicate.

+1 Stop gibbin' me when I'm CO pls
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Avalanchee » 18 Dec 2018, 15:22

+1 please don't ban me


Story is fine to me, playstyle is average - nothing wrong about that.
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 18 Dec 2018, 16:55

Thank you for the support folks!

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Karmac » 18 Dec 2018, 17:27

The story was well written but did a terrible job of conveying both the personality and play style of the predator. You mention a couple times that his Elders told him this hunt would be his downfall due to how eager he is, yet you didn't show this trait at all, in fact I'm unsure why you mentioned this because it was the Elders that sent you here in the first place. Additionally you mentioned paying extra attention to respecting the dead, but yout pred pretty much just sets the bracers of all 3 dead predators he comes across and walks off, nor does he mention anything about the xenomorphs he kills after taking the tail he cut off as a trophy.

All in all it's a well written story about a hunt, accompanied by a complete lack of information regarding your predator, and the intended playstyle is about as uncreative as you can get "will bring honor to clan". It's a -1 from me.
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 18 Dec 2018, 17:49

I think you've misunderstood the part about the elders as I've stated that it was his eagerness that would be his downfall, not that the hunt would be his downfall. The part about the hunt either making or breaking him wasn't directed from the elders.

In my eyes, Datuin did portray respect for the fallen dead albeit he did indeed set their bracers off but you also must remember that having to transport in total 3 Predators alone whilst possibly having to face off more Xeno's in the long run he made the choice to set their bracers off or face dying there. He prides himself in being honorable but after seeing the corpse of the original dead Yautja and what the Xenomorphs did to it, he chose to not let it happen again and thus the bracers were set off.

It wasn't Datuin that took the tail of the xenomorph also that was Thwago who was killed. I don't believe you've read the whole story as you'd notice I have briefly brought it back into the story during Datuin's final fight after Thwago dies. The playstyle may be normal to other Predators however trying to bring honor back to his clan and roleplaying with other Predators than what usually happens is not often seen. Either way I respect your vote and will take your other notes into consideration.

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Karmac » 18 Dec 2018, 18:13

I would consider your points, but you didn't actually provide any counterarguments to my issues. Simply telling me he is eager, telling me he portrayed respect, and telling me you're going to role-play is not enough for me I'm afraid. I did in fact go back and re-read the last two paragraphs, and I'm not impressed, the only relevant thing I could find were a line where you said "Have I brought honor back?" to no one in particular, mentioned nodding at the dead predator and secured the xenomorphs head as a trophy. I may have misread part of the story but it does not appear that I missed anything important.
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 18 Dec 2018, 20:04

Well thank you for your criticism in any regard, I'll take it into consideration for my writing in future.

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Ghostdex » 19 Dec 2018, 11:25

As Karmac said the story was well written and while it did leave me lacking for more of a character it was good none the less. Playstyle is generic so not much to say about that.

Good conduct ICly and OOCly so I can support this app, +1 from me.
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 20 Dec 2018, 07:56

Appreciate the support Ghostdex, Yes I am starting to see I could of perhaps put more work into the character itself but if accepted at least I'll be able to portray it more there.

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Symbiosis » 28 Dec 2018, 19:29

While I can't speak for his last couple months, I can speak for his years on the server.

Story was a bit lackluster in regards to the Predator backstory... Karmac is normally hitting the nail on the head.

That being said, his past has definitely earned him a +1 from me considering there's nothing glaringly horrible about the app.
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by spartanbobby » 29 Dec 2018, 04:26

Symbiosis wrote:
28 Dec 2018, 19:29
While I can't speak for his last couple months, I can speak for his years on the server.

Story was a bit lackluster in regards to the Predator backstory... Karmac is normally hitting the nail on the head.

That being said, his past has definitely earned him a +1 from me considering there's nothing glaringly horrible about the app.
You're pretty active, I can't say I've ever really seen you as a marine so I can't speak for that. I'm going to trust my fellow council boys and give you a +1
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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Mizari » 29 Dec 2018, 05:45

I appreciate the support folks, Yeah I'll admit going over the story now I should have put more of a personality into Datuin but its something I plan on building with him. My lack of Marine play is simply due to me wishing to play Xeno's as they are more enjoyable for me however in saying that when I do go Marine its usually either as the CO or as a Doctor which is a rather odd combination.

Thanks for the support lads!

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Re: Datuin Luar-Ke - Predator Application

Post by Emeraldblood » 29 Dec 2018, 20:15

Final app of the old forums.

Resolved - Accepted
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