Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te (Honor Wild) App.

[NescauComToddy]

Byond ID:NescauComToddy

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Pedro 'Stuck' Heering.

Name of the character you want to be whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name):Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):

Born In the adumbrations of the Jag'd'dja atoll, Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te was a young jehdin whose life and death was correlated with the ceremonial hunt of the D'yeka. His father disappeared in his prime ages, humbling his éclat of formerly, the descendant of the elder. From there and on, he began to occupy delusions of an eldritch creation, which he acknowledged as the "Fright of his kind."

Recognized as the Al'Nagara of the adjudicator, he was tasked to manage the honor in the fights over the ship, eliminating those whose cheated their worthy contenders. He would hunt the ones known as offenders to his house, without pity or compunction. After being isolated by the new elder from the "sports," he had to sustain an extraordinary degree of truthfulness related to they culture and antiquity.
After ages within his society, he managed to obtain the reputation of an efficient, proficient hunter. Overcoming duels with the aristocracies(Elites) whose labored to populate his clan, he would prove their worthiness with glory!
Unexpectedly and abruptly, his father wristband broadcasted a beacon to an old hunting ground, disregarded by the Committee of Elders. Now, his time had come.

He hastily clutched his combi-stick and his whip, adorning the plate armor his Father used as a young-blood. Bearing a breastplate with an opening to his chest, extremely durable due to It being made by distinct layers. Moreover, adequate against the serpents eroding hemoglobins(You read that completely right). Placing his med comp in his satchel, almost forgetting his smart disk.

On the planetary region the ornament data specified, Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te could hear the r'ka hissing through the platform of the forsake temple. The serpents were discreetly lurking upon him, preparing to launch a devastating counterattack to the hunter intrusion. Impressively, the traps he brought with him were enough to delay the Xenomorphs, "hanging" an insignificant "dragon" whose flesh was from an inadequate and shameful trophy. Being chased by the others, he threw the smart disk over the small hall he went through, incapacitating 2 of the seven vipers tracking him, before frightening them with his devastating, Ki'cti-pa.

After a continued pursuit from the R'kas; he found a peculiar artifact to his perceptions over a locked, dusty vault.
It had an old technology with "Ooman" glossaries on it. Still, he could blend them with the beliefs of the Fallen Gods.
Looking to It delicately, he did not discern anything familiar with it, until he found his clan mark on its top. Gazing on the glyphs on the walls, he commenced pondering his reality. The Yaut'ja, the Oomans, the R'kas, they were all equated, somehow. He would surreptitiously, find his interpretations, but not there, not promptly. He immediately initiates his bracer discharge sequence inside the core of the temple, Tele transporting himself back to the scoutship, watching the tremendous explosion In the atmosphere.

After the extensive investigation, Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te determined to seek for his answers, hunting, experiencing and learning. His reputation was remarkably unusual In his constellation by most clans, being a small peon In the Council's games, inquired and used by them. One day, he would find his purpose and his progenitor outcome, finishing his Father hunt and succeeding In extending His dynasty. With honesty, honor and eventually sacrifice, he would regain his family lost honor.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?
This Is something that has been forgotten by previous whitelists, wistfully(On my view).

I Pretend to be "Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te" as a Med-High RP character. Due to his seeking for his origins and associations to both other sides, I pretend to interact with them In particular ways. By disguising myself as a Marine and exploring the "Oomans" technology and culture by infiltrating they respective places(FoB), to witnessing the way the Hive employment as the supreme organism corresponding the Marines. About hunting, I would say I would perform dangerous tactical terrains with traps and defenses to modify the gameplay of both sides without directly intervening each round, increasing salt fun and entertainment for our player base. If I see a worthy contender, I will lure him to my sporting ground, where he would have to bypass my traps and naturally, evict being caught by me. I would make sure my IC rendezvous are not too aggressive towards the player, so the both of us can have fun. I may play as a "disabled" Yautja If the player Is damaged or incapable of behaving, giving each of my prey's a fair probability and opportunity of escaping Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te. If they do escape my presence, I would follow them, tracking and arranging for the right occasion to create another IC confrontation where I would each time be more antagonistic, generating tales of Marines withstanding a "Pyscho" predator hunting them the entire round, building the "anxiety" of being caught by my character and butchered by his wrist-blades. The fun thing is, I will let Marines propositionally win If I see there's a significant amount of RP involved, even If I need to make macros to ockly not attack them, like: "The Unknown figure hits the air/crate/wall!" One of the things I find completely enjoyable Is how you can antagonize another player anecdote, determining his fate most of the times. There are special cases where a Marine may steal technology's, capture a Yautja, etc, Where I would take individual's approaches to it. Naturally, a Predator must limit a Marine from receiving its technology by any means necessary. I Would take a riskier approach, making sure I am not confusing the person with another member to not cause Chaotic results. In the end, there are many ways I can play the game depending on the round circumstances and objectives, but as a basis, I would do as described here. I would certainly apply the Honor Code and our rules within each situation I may find. Also, keep In mind I will never murdebone anyone. I Will make sure to be monitoring myself while playing with my Moderator knowledge. I Will be also watching other apps to see If my playstyle Is becoming repetitive, changing It if necessary by speaking with a senior staff.

Why should we whitelist you?

After much time participating our community, I believe I could try out some new sweet stuff, like acting as a Yautja. Having the self-assurance and strength of one with limits seems pleasureful to me for some reason. After all, I assume I have enough knowledge and maturity to be one. I Also have a fundamental and advanced understanding of the lore, making RPing as one comfortable to me. I thought to myself, "why not?" It may sound weak, but I am willing to make a part of such tiny group we have of role-players.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? Negative.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? Nope.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Unquestionably. Breaking our rules as a Predator can deliver a significant value of damage to a round. I Pretend to control my attitude and behaviors being one, reflecting about every move and action I take to unscrew It's weight upon the round/player.

I would like to add that I am currently inactive for larger amounts of time due to School, which Is less important than a 2d spess-man game, right? I will be working on improving it anyway, but for now, I need to git gud at that awful and torturous place. Any judgment and commentary will be supported by myself with a lenient and >"honored"< welcome. Sorry for the cringy, "Whose." My previous whitelist text was erased due to formatting my PC, so this one is just an idea I had currently up in mind. I Also pretend to continue his history In "The Hunt" thread with more details, If accepted. Peace, everyone.

“Only the cruelest hunters set their traps with terror and quivering.”

[Katsukai]

I find your character rather odd. He has no drive for glory or seeking trophies to tell stories, he beats elites that some are basically clan leaders and usually they do not even bother to fight yautja that are not of equal status, you have an world leader assigning you specifically to law enforce, which is rather unheard of, and you say he is still an peon to council of ancients, huh? Finishing father's hunt, didn't the place just get nuked? What honor did he lose exactly? And the way you describe your character, he seems more of an philosopher than an warrior in heart. These are some issues I have with your background story.

Your playstyle also isn't really anything new, outside being this curious yautja that seeks the truth, hence why I say you're more of an philosopher than a warrior.

[NescauComToddy]

I find your character rather odd. He has no drive for glory or seeking trophies to tell stories, he beats elites that some are basically clan leaders and usually they do not even bother to fight yautja that are not of equal status, you have a world leader assigning you specifically to law enforce, which is rather unheard of, and you say he is still a peon to council of ancients, huh? Finishing father's hunt, didn't the place just get nuked? What honor did he lose exactly? And the way you describe your character, he seems more of a philosopher than a warrior in the heart. These are some issues I have with your background story.

Your playstyle also isn't really anything new, outside being this curious yautja that seeks the truth, hence why I say you're more of a philosopher than a warrior.

Firstly, thank you. Your feedback Is extremely important to my person. Now, let's start with this.

The background I made for Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te had the purpose to intrigue the reader. I want the person revising the application to be interested in my app. I made up a history of approximately 3.000+ words, which describes my Yautja perfectly as one in his society, discovering the truth and making his name known again. He is indeed seeking for glory while tracking his Father steps, eventually to become the perfect hunter, hunting the ultimate prey.

Sadly, I cannot put It here due to it being a full tale and also, because of It's Gigantic texts. To explain my Predator skills, I made a special narrative about a conflict Yin'tekai Kha'bj-te clan had with an unknown Bad-Blood clan, It also explains with details how he ascended to become a servant of the adjudicator and the shield of his kin. Pretty "Comical", by the way.

About my repetitive Play-style, I'd change It If I discover It's becoming a serious issue. Sincerely, I was being generic only In the part where I wanted to explain his basis. Other than that, I never saw a Predator hiding among the Marine force by curiosity. If It impacts the reviews heavily, I may change It to a better one.

I look forward to expanding his lore with time over the "The Hunt" thread, being greatly concerned how the narrative Is accomplished each tale.

Other than that, I hope To acquire your trust and confidence about my character, thanks for the review.

[Imperator_Titan]

Only issue I have is that predator is a high-RP role and english isn't your native language which might make the already hard to understand predator cipher language almost impossible to make sense as a marine.

[NescauComToddy]

Only issue I have is that predator is a high-RP role and English* isn't your native language which might make the already hard to understand predator cipher language almost impossible to make sense as a marine.

About my morphology, It Is being accomplished and mayhap adjusted In many ways. If I progress to be accepted, I would adapt my slow-pace gameplay to improve any Structure mistakes that I may make while playing. Similar how I always do while supervising the server.

Sadly, I cannot check It due to not having time at the moment. Which Is sizeable dangerous for an application.

PS: Thanks for "putting this on the table." I Already RPed with predators and even admins in particular events. I think the player interpretation won't fail If I stay unadventurous while transcribing. Again, thanks for pointing that out.

[northcote4]

Giving this a look over, I can confidently say that I very much like what I see.

While what Imperator is said is true (English not being your native language does indeed present an issue), from looking at this app I can see that you're definitely willing to go the extra mile and put that extra effort in (I particularly like the phrase 'corrosive hemoglobins).

While admittedly I haven't interacted with Nescau a great deal, even in spite of being a fellow moderator, this application just rubs me in all the right ways. In particular the responses he's made to Imperator's posts, further reinforcing the level of effort Nescau is willing to put in.

Giving this a big fat +1.

[Katsukai]

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I am indeed intrigued, tho you maybe made the story a bit too much to digest for an app post. Since you haven't really explained how this particular Yautja managed to do such feats. But on overall I like your willingness of taking critic and always striving to improve yourself. So I give this an +1, even tho my vote probly doesn't matter much.

[forwardslashN]

The backstory was a little hard to follow, and there is a definite language barrier still present. So I'll refrain from commenting further on that. I think you've shown a lot of improvement when it comes to language fluidity, and you've been a fairly present as well, but you did just make staff. Also, given playing a pred also requires some language proficiency, I don't think it's time to whitelist you right now. -1

[NescauComToddy]

The backstory was a little hard to follow, and there is a definite language barrier still present. So I'll refrain from commenting further on that. I think you've shown a lot of improvement when it comes to language fluidity, and you've been a fairly present as well, but you did just make staff. Also, given playing a pred also requires some language proficiency, I don't think it's time to whitelist you right now. -1

Hello,

I'd like to acknowledge you for the analysis. It Is of a remarkable attention to have your evaluation here. Like you said, we have a "supposed " language-barrier, preventing me from being accommodated to your semantics, which is English, I assume. And honestly, I agree completely with your points. Thankfully, you already discerned my struggles to develop my spelling, that is definitely prominent to me. Thank you!
And yes, I totally concede that a Yautja demands adeptness and efficiency In the letters segment, and I will offer It being one or not. Trust and confidence signify something particularly valuable and serious, but I am begging you to present me with such. I will give my greatest to outdo and exceed your expectations and beliefs, all I will need Is a plausibility. I will have responsibility and liability for my steps In any cases.

I am confident that the language barrier won't be an issue, but I can distinguish myself with your deductions, that are totally and completely right.

Again, appreciate you for the feedback, It means a lot to me. Especially the one I consider the most important to our community and game. About being the time, or not, this Is genuinely up to you. I can't deny this was close to my staff application, and I know how uncomfortable It can be to approve a player who was just accepted. Peace.

About the supporters, I am grateful to have your ideas and thoughts here, If you have any other doubts, please, PM me or ask It here so It can be simplified.

[XenonDragneel]

Good player, not toxic, kinda-good-but-need-little-improvement-on-engrish, a staff, active, and a friendly player! I was about to say something fimilar above... but I'll remain +0.5. I really enjoy playing with you my favorite Brazilian man.

[NescauComToddy]

I was about to say something similar above. But I'll persist neutral for now.

Alright, take your time, there's no need to be agile In addressing your thought.

[XenonDragneel]

Alright, take your time, there's no need to be agile In addressing your thought.

I mean the app for this is interesting... I haven't play for awhile and I can't remember good enough if you are quick in action.

[Shyguychizzy]

Gonna have to go with a -1, your character background well choice of bright white sorta a bit too flashy for my taste making it a bit hard to read at times. Some parts I be a bit iffy on for instance, " The fun thing is, I will let Marines propositionally win If I see there's a significant amount of RP involved, even If I need to make macros to ockly not attack them," I do believe you said this is from the your intent bit, I mean we don't necessarily award them for any RP. Marines with RP even tend to be fun to hunt, sorta goes against because they RP don't have to go to it however, I am trying to see what or attempting to get at. I reckon, you'd make a great predator, however, I'd wait a bit longer and clean a bit or edit this app, I do know its not common language but eh could use a bit of a clean up.

[Jroinc1]

I actually like this a LOT, enough to comment on it.
Your English has improved greatly, and you look to be actually invested in RP.
Like the story too.
+1

[NescauComToddy]

Gonna have to go with a -1, your character background well choice of bright white sorta a bit too flashy for my taste making it a bit hard to read at times. Some parts I be a bit iffy on for instance, " The fun thing is, I will let Marines propositionally win If I see there's a significant amount of RP involved, even If I need to make macros to ockly not attack them," I do believe you said this is your intent bit, I mean we don't necessarily award them for any RP. Marines with RP even tend to be fun to hunt, sort of goes against because they RP don't have to go to it. However, I am trying to see what or attempting to get at. I reckon you'd make a great predator. However, I'd wait a bit longer and clean a bit or edit this app; I do know it not a common language but eh could use a bit of a cleanup.

Understood. Review out my preview If you consider this background as insufficient. I made It vigorously to read to discard these Grammar precepts statutes that some may have about my semantics capability, which I find orderly, formal and standard when demanded. For instance, In your support, you also presented some morphology slips over the "From the your Intent"/ From your intent* In the last "Its"/ It*, etc. Still, you're an exceptional, predator, and wasn't and won't be concluded and judged for your syntax Structure(Compare the one I quoted to the one you wrote to see the opposition). This proves you that your reasoning Is completely dissipated, but I still can discern your circumstances, Which I'd rudely say It's Hypocrisy of yours. About compensating RP, that Is my aim here. I Believe In the notion of formulating a storyline through the round to make It an unparalleled adventure to our player-base. As you may know, most of our community Is not responsive In RP, and that's why I am remunerating our Players for It. In the end, our primary aspiration Is not to hunt for players simply but to afford amusing practices for them. If you cannot decrease your activity for others pleasure, you do not realize how a Hunter Is deemed to operate. I want people to see how RP Is the principal entertainment part of CM so that they can produce pleasure for each other In the end. I'm Sorry If I sound bitter here, but I need to simplify things that are being used upon me multiple times.

Thank you for the feedback. I Acknowledge It with reception.

EDIT: I am studying for the final tests of the first two months of the year so that I can be less careful In the next ones. My Activity was extremely low due to It, but I pretend to fulfill my moderator application operating time over the Saturday's and the Sundays. Mostly, 10 hours each day so I can make sure I'm satisfactory In doing this fantastic hobby. So please, do not judge It. I'm trying to give my best to open a day where I can stress out and frequently work while prevailing dynamic In school and CM. Still, I need to arrange a complicated timeline that can accommodate gaming, education and moderating.

[NescauComToddy]

I like this a LOT, enough to comment on it.
Your English has improved significantly, and you look to be invested in RP.
Like the story too.
+1

Firstly, thank you for the feedback.

I Find delightful to presence people who can see my amendments over my efficiency and proficiency In expressing English. About the memoir, It was reckoned to be more of a portrait of my Hunter, but If you determined It was stirring, I should embrace your conclusion even further adequately. Again, thanks.

[NoahKirchner]

Going to have to agree with jroinc about your english, it's gotten a lot better. Not perfect but a lot better. That + The story + Good answers = +1.

[NescauComToddy]

Going to have to agree with jroinc about your English, it is gotten a lot better. Not perfect but a lot better. That + The story + Good answers = +1.

Thanks for the feedback.

If you could designate to me the English concerns associated with my writing aptitude and ability, please, do so. I am endeavoring for fulfillment and perfection, and I will exceedingly greet any guidance you may offer with a sympathetic, welcome.

Again, appreciate your support and feedback.

[NoahKirchner]

Thanks for the feedback.

If you could designate to me the English concerns associated with my writing aptitude and ability, please, do so. I am endeavoring for fulfillment and perfection, and I will exceedingly greet any guidance you may offer with a sympathetic, welcome.

Again, appreciate your support and feedback.

To be perfectly honest, a lot of it appears to be using inappropriate (grammatically and contextually as opposed to socially) words, like [quote ="NescauComToddy"] I Find delightful to presence people who can see my efficiency and proficiency in expressing english[/quote]
In that sentence you misused efficiency and presence, all you needed would be proficiency in the former, and the later doesn't make much sense, but I think understand what you're trying to say and presence would be the wrong word, perhaps present was what you were looking for?

Anyways a lot of roleplay speak and such in CM will be short and on the fly, and generally relies a lot more on what's happening in the situation, atmosphere, and circumstances as opposed to eloquent typing, and as such I think you meet the standards pretty well.

Good luck on your app!

[NescauComToddy]

Appreciate that A lot. That happens because of my "BR" pattern, which I adapt to suit English. I will enhance my knowledge of expressions that may sound unfamiliar to the reader, which Is more of a cultural matter than an accidence one. In the case you suggested, culturally It would be to offer a gift to a person. There, I related "To witness."

About "proficiency and efficiency," It was made to affirm an affirmation to "Impact" the sentence composition. Still, I will attempt not to make the same blunder again. In any cases, PM me.

Once again, thanks for the valuable feedback.

[Imperator_Titan]

Your English sure has greatly improved from my past response. Along with the fact that I know you're interested in RP.

+1

[Kerek]

I like your character, I haven't noticed a problem whenever we talk and we have had some decent RP. Backstory is kinda strange, but I like it. Hope to see you on the hunt.

+1

[NescauComToddy]

Your English sure has greatly improved from my past response. Along with the fact that I know you're interested in RP.

+1

I like your character, I haven't noticed a problem whenever we talk, and we have had some decent RP. The backstory is quite strange, but I like it. Hope to see you on the hunt.

+1

Grateful for your feedback, fellows. As mentioned earlier, any analyses are received with pleasure here, If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to post It. I will be looking forward to answering you all by any means needed.

Let me know If you want more knowledge about my application.

Peace.

[Boltersam]

Nescau, I'll put this in before the review starts. You're well-intentioned, but you need to make up for the drawbacks that your non-English background shoves at you at every turn. Specifically, your grammar and sometimes spelling make your posts hard to read, and that will affect interactions ingame as well.

I'll start with the story. After making it through the eye-burningly white glowing text and constant confusing use of "Predator" words at the start, I read the story and have more than a little criticism on it.

First of all, your Predator is essentially a mental patient. He's having visions of some weird "Eldritch", as you put it, monster. This eliminates him immediately because he'd likely be constantly in the care of the healers because of this. Next, the Adjudicator, the leader of the ENTIRE clan, makes a MENTAL PATIENT, the job of managing honour fights. There's just a BIT of a problem there, especially that it seems your character is unblooded/blooded. Not only this, while randomly having visions, your character's able to beat Elites in duels all the time. Yautja class systems are based on strength and skill. An elite will kick your ass because he's simply far more skilled and has the experience of exterminating an entire hive of Xenos. Then, his father sends out a beacon, at least from what I could decipher. Okay. You have your father's gear, which a predator would never go hunting without, and you find Xenos, who you delay with traps, and you kill possibly a Runner. Inside a vault, you find an artifact. Then, you activate YOUR bracer to self destruct.

And you teleport back to the ship.

While the bracer on your arm is about to explode.

Granted, this could've been the temple's own self destruct sequence, but you specifically said bracer. Your bracer. You then teleport back to the ship and presumably blow it to kingdom come.

Now, for your "How you will play your Predator", you say that you'll act as a crazy predator who interacts with Marines. If they walk away, you hunt them. Before that, you say you want to preserve enjoyment for the both of you. How does hunting them because they don't want to interact with a Predator make it a fun experience for them? People who don't want to interact with Predators, generally don't have fun doing so. You also say here that you will

I By disguising myself as a Marine and exploring the "Oomans" technology and culture by infiltrating they respective places(FoB),

This, invalidates your entire app for me. This is NOT behaviour ANY predator should undertake, simply because it is the most un-Predator behaviour possible besides walking up to humans and asking them to do surgery on you.

-1. Besides language barriers, and recently becoming staff, I don't think at all that you understand Predators enough to be whitelisted. However much of a good guy you are, this app isn't up to my standards.

[Mister Jeether]

As fowardslash sayed,the story was a little hard to follow ,but the play syle seems unique and original,you've been improving your english lastly,you seem to know how to roleplay and is that friendly guy that the server needs.


+1

It would be nice to see you as a pred.