Kjuhte Tarei'hsan (Void Scorpion)

[TheMaskedMan2]

Byond ID: TheMaskedMan2

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Karla Mikhaylova

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Kjuhte Tarei'hsan (Void Scorpion)

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes, I am.

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):
The cool and damp air, the noises of various wildlife echoed throughout the dto at one point, but now, silent. This was the moment she had been waiting for, the day she will become blooded. A serpent, the r'ka, she has spotted it. It was tearing into a small animal. She was amused. It was fascinating to her, the efficiency, yet brutality in the manner they killed, she knew this one would make a worthy prey, her head turning as it scampered into the dark jungle..

For as long as she could remember, Kjuhte Tarei'hsan has been training, the thrill of the hunt, the intoxicating aroma when a kill was achieved, it spoke to her, as it did all Yautja. All of her training so far has been gkei'moun, laughable even. Now though, she couldn't help but be nervous, a slight tremble of her hands as she grips her combistick, steeling her resolve.

She thought she had spotted it.
Fast. It was on her in a flash, hissing as it's tail whipped and cracked towards her head.

.....

Kjuhte Tarei'hsan, dripping with wounds and splattered with the sizzling blood of the r'ka. It had escaped, but she was exhilarated, the adrenaline of the hunt flowing through her very veins, she sought after the r'ka, pursuing it.

It was wounded, sizzling acid staining the jungle floor, she moved quickly, vantage point to vantage point. Then finally, there it was, vulnerable. She could kill it now, a single toss of her arm and the serpent would be impaled. Her arm is raised slowly, vision narrowing on her target. Not a moment later and a flick of the wrist, a piercing hiss rings out, the serpents claw had been impaled straight through! It's body reared up to face the stalker laughing behind it.

The jungle is filled with screeching and pained roars for hours on end.

She emerges from the jungle, covered in wounds, scars, and also.. the serpent, draped over her shoulder. The evidence and trophy of a long entertaining hunt indeed.

Now, she is on her way to a new hunt, blooded and eager to prove herself.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?:
Personally, I believe the intent of the Predator is to create an interesting round, it is not about yourself, but about impacting the round itself in a positive manner. More of an event character, than anything else.
As for a specific play-style, I intend to occasionally observe the round at first, taking in the battles happening, keeping an eye out for worthy Prey of course. I would like to be stealthy and ambient, stalking specific targets, tormenting them, and scarring them. I would like to not simply "Strike and kill" so soon usually. Instead preferring towards wounding my Prey and prolonging their lives out until the bitter end, watching them limp around with no arm while taunting and such, before she finally grows bored and ends the prey.

I would definitely like to be doing RP more than fighting, conversing with the other Predators or scaring the marine players. Jumping from one of my targets to the next, allowing that player to recuperate, while I torment another, making it seem as if I am everywhere, giving a more psychological edge. I would hope to make other players rounds interesting in the process, no killing anyone immediately as that isn't fun, if I can help it. I would be sure to not specifically target and attack the losing side, and to not needlessly take lives so quickly. I would love to be drawing blood, and making that character really feel hunted for a prolonged period of time beyond the initial engagement. Appearing later on right when they almost forgot about me and that lost foot was replaced. When I do kill in an honorable hunt, I would like to be able to taunt the player, and continue to RP to myself with the corpse as I retrieve the trophy. I already RP to myself when alone anyways, simply for my own enjoyment and making the character feel more real.

Why should we whitelist you?:
Now let me start with the elephant in the room here, recently staff. I am aware that this is a problem, and that I may get declined as a result. It is entirely not my intention to capitalize on my new status. I hope everyone ignores that moderator tag, and pretends I am just a normal player. I quite simply, just think it is better to apply now as I have been holding onto this application for quite some time. Funnily enough the day I planned on applying I was asked to become staff.
Onto other reasons, I simply wish to improve the round, and spice them up with something a little different. Through RP, creating spooky scenes of blood , ambiance, and so on. Might be able to make FOB duty marines have something to do. I do believe I am quite active within the community, forums, and decently well known in game. I have also spent many rounds simply observing Predators, watching what they do, learning how they act, and what I would do differently. So I believe I am rather well versed in what they do. I simply hope to make it fun for everyone.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? Nope, never.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? Not at all.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Of course I do.

[ShortTemperedLeprechaun]

As much as I'd LOVE to shoot this down with the ol A.A gun, it's actually pretty decent. The story kept me interested, and the playstyle is unique in it's own manner. While I personally can't see an issue, I've always been too nice. Either way, have a plus one from me, and wait for the rest to judge.

[Kerek]

I honestly loved reading this. I like how you recieved criticism from me and bolter awhile back and you changed the few things we pointed out (atleast what I did). Its a great app.

+1

[shyshadow]

*Breaths in, Exhales* alright, so not gonna like, good app but I have a problem with it, in my opinion is that there is so evident "Backstory" it's describing your Predator's 1st hunt to become blooded. That's where I have a problem, of course the backstory can incorporate the hunt and that's fine. Me personally I feel as your Predator is a blood hungry hunter, they're a relentless hunter that likes to mock those whom are weaker then they. Correct me if I'm wrong I'm interpreting the way I see it, of course you can have a character like that. Where's the specialty? I feel there's not much of a story here and that's a big problem, of course you don't have to write a backstory but I want to feel the character, I want to know what makes them click what makes them different and unique. Of course you could've said you wanted to be just a Standard Predator and owned it (Sorry if I seem rude) and that would've been fine.

I feel though there's a definite lack of personality in your Predator's backstory, your play-style is similar to a standard predator with a bit more blood and I'd enjoy seeing those types of things occur though I feel it as if it's dishonorable just my personnel take on it, taunting your prey isn't against the code of honor but I digress. Though I feel this

Jumping from one of my targets to the next, allowing that player to recuperate, while I torment another, making it seem as if I am everywhere

is rather concerning. If I'm correct there's an honorable hunt, and there's an out-right just trying to kill a bunch of marines. You say you want to be an annoyance and hurt a bunch of marines, and that's just lack of enthusiasm.

When you answer on why you should be whitelisted I can't help but wonder why you chose to add about you being moderator. I feel as if it was extremely unnecessary, and if it was a concern of someone that stated maybe it should've been addressed. I still feel it wasn't a necessity I very much doubt becoming a moderator then applying for the Predator Whitelist would have any affect on whether or not you were to be accepted as I stated before if someone had a concern for this then it should be addressed but I really don't like that it was added. I still don't exactly remember your marine, I'm sure I've seen them once or twice, I know you play Xeno a lot more then marine am I correct? If so, it would be more positive if you were active as a marine or just a human in the upcoming days. So others can interact with you and see how you RP.

Anyway, sorry for being nit-picky I like very well versed and informative responses. Regardless I'm going to have to be Neutral for now.

[TheMaskedMan2]

*Breaths in, Exhales* alright, so not gonna like, good app but I have a problem with it, in my opinion is that there is so evident "Backstory" it's describing your Predator's 1st hunt to become blooded. That's where I have a problem, of course the backstory can incorporate the hunt and that's fine. Me personally I feel as your Predator is a blood hungry hunter, they're a relentless hunter that likes to mock those whom are weaker then they. Correct me if I'm wrong I'm interpreting the way I see it, of course you can have a character like that. Where's the specialty? I feel there's not much of a story here and that's a big problem, of course you don't have to write a backstory but I want to feel the character, I want to know what makes them click what makes them different and unique. Of course you could've said you wanted to be just a Standard Predator and owned it (Sorry if I seem rude) and that would've been fine.

I feel though there's a definite lack of personality in your Predator's backstory, your play-style is similar to a standard predator with a bit more blood and I'd enjoy seeing those types of things occur though I feel it as if it's dishonorable just my personnel take on it, taunting your prey isn't against the code of honor but I digress. Though I feel this is rather concerning. If I'm correct there's an honorable hunt, and there's an out-right just trying to kill a bunch of marines. You say you want to be an annoyance and hurt a bunch of marines, and that's just lack of enthusiasm.

When you answer on why you should be whitelisted I can't help but wonder why you chose to add about you being moderator. I feel as if it was extremely unnecessary, and if it was a concern of someone that stated maybe it should've been addressed. I still feel it wasn't a necessity I very much doubt becoming a moderator then applying for the Predator Whitelist would have any affect on whether or not you were to be accepted as I stated before if someone had a concern for this then it should be addressed but I really don't like that it was added. I still don't exactly remember your marine, I'm sure I've seen them once or twice, I know you play Xeno a lot more then marine am I correct? If so, it would be more positive if you were active as a marine or just a human in the upcoming days. So others can interact with you and see how you RP.

Anyway, sorry for being nit-picky I like very well versed and informative responses. Regardless I'm going to have to be Neutral for now.

Alright let me address all of your concerns one by one the best I can, I will preface that the backstory is definitely what I had the most trouble on, I am not a good writer when it comes to stories, it isn't an excuse, I'm just aware that it is the weakest part. I am more of an improviser. I also took notes from other Predator's backstories and tried to incorporate what made them good, and what they touched upon. I tend to, I have a habit of creating a base skeleton with a few quirks, and as I play they get fleshed upon more because of what happens and comes to my mind? I also noted it was asked to be "Very Brief". So I didn't want to ramble on and on about the little details.

Also I think you definitely misinterpreted me, I'm not attempting to be an "Annoyance" or "Standard". It is more, how do I say, I wanted my hunts to last a bit longer typically, to be different. I've played with a lot of Predators on other sides and observing and one thing I've noted is they tend to pick a target, and hunt them relentlessly. Now that isn't bad, and of course I want to kill and get trophies. I just want to try and make it interesting, and add more of a "Story" to the marine being hunted. As the way I am looking at it, I am part of their story, just as much they are a part of mine. Now you mention that it is "Dishonorable" to be say, taunting? I'm not sure, I feel it is less taunting, and more "toying" with your Prey. Even so I do not see how it is dishonorable. If your Prey is so weak that you can easily mess with it, my characters mindset would be they are deserving of it. It would be a "moment" of shock and surprise when someone gives a good fight, which is then more deserving of mutual respect.

You mention lack of enthusiasm, but I really don't see where, I still plan on maiming the decapitated corpses of marines and decorating the jungle with their limbs! I just don't want to pop in, slaughter someone, and run away just as fast. Usually. As I've seen that happen quite a few times.

Also about mentioning the moderator thing, I've been told repeatedly by other staff members and heads of staff that applying for Predator so soon after becoming staff is harder and likely to get you denied and others have been before, so I figured it would not hurt to bring up that I am aware that this would be an issue to some people.

As for Xeno/Marine play time. I definitely play as Marine 2/3 of the time on average. Sometimes I die at the beginning unluckily and rejoin as Xeno. Though I can say I play Marine more than I do Xeno. Suppose it is luck of the draw?


Anyways I think I got it all, sorry if I somewhat rambled, or missed a few points, I wanted to address it as soon as I can, and thanks for criticism, if this application doesn't make it through then, well I guess I will put into my notes, and take it into account for my next one. Thanks for taking the time to read through my application though. If I forgot to address anything just say so and I'll do my best to word my sentences better.

[shyshadow]

Thank you for your response, and I see a bit more where you're coming from. I see I came off a little confusing when I said dishonorable, I meant it personally if I were a Predator I wouldn't do that seeing personally that's dishonorable. It's not breaking any sort of rules or anything just my own personal opinion.
When I said lack of enthusiasm, I meant it felt like you didn't want to be a hunter stalking your prey. I felt as if you weren't enthused in killing your prey, your hunt you just wanted to run around and damage marines which I feel is that what separates the hunter to a killer.

Also my apologies about the whole Moderator thing, I wasn't aware of the circumstances of the how it worked. I didn't know other staff had said that was such a concept which I feel is rather odd but whatever. I enjoy your response and I feel you deserve a +1 because of your legit responses, though I feel you should put a bit more restraint on attacking different marines.

[TheMaskedMan2]

Thank you for your response, and I see a bit more where you're coming from. I see I came off a little confusing when I said dishonorable, I meant it personally if I were a Predator I wouldn't do that seeing personally that's dishonorable. It's not breaking any sort of rules or anything just my own personal opinion.
When I said lack of enthusiasm, I meant it felt like you didn't want to be a hunter stalking your prey. I felt as if you weren't enthused in killing your prey, your hunt you just wanted to run around and damage marines which I feel is that what separates the hunter to a killer.

Also my apologies about the whole Moderator thing, I wasn't aware of the circumstances of the how it worked. I didn't know other staff had said that was such a concept which I feel is rather odd but whatever. I enjoy your response and I feel you deserve a +1 because of your legit responses, though I feel you should put a bit more restraint on killing a bunch of marines.

Yeah I understand, thank you for listening, though my intent isn't really to kill a "bunch" of marines, especially if they are being destroyed, hunting xenos would be just as fun, I see how it goes, you know? Also I am quite interested in killing, I simply just didn't want to make it the "Focus" if you understand, or perhaps, I want the focus to be "killing with style" or fun. Anyways thank you for the +1. I'll be around to answer anymore questions others have.

The moderator thing is I presume some people attempt to become staff simply thinking it will boost their odds, I understand the hesitation some would have and judging them a bit more harshly, so I just wanted to clarify.

[Nubs]

I very much enjoyed the intro. +1

[Boltersam]

The story is good. Not great, but adequate material. It's just too damned short to actually tell us something about your Predator. What are their motives? Their beliefs? Their actual background, where they grew up, relations with others, etc. You show SOME skill as a writer, but you choose to downplay the story section instead of improve it into something great.

Your big, fancy, "How will you play your Predator" simply boils down to "I'm gonna stalk prey and do little things to scare and hurt them like EVERY PREDATOR DOES IN ADDITION TO THEIR OWN PLAYSTYLE, and I'm also going to taunt prey that I kill and RP taking trophies!" What's special? Where's the unique aspect to your Predator? Because currently, you don't have one.

If I choose to ignore that you recently became a Mod, then I'll say that you need to go back and work on this. You have the skill as a writer to make a GOOD background, and you've set the foundations for a good character. Mix the two, add a dash of actual information on them, and you're golden. If I do take in the fact that you've recently become a mod, then I'm of the opinion that it's too soon, and you need to go back and do your best, instead of what you gave.

[TheMaskedMan2]

The story is good. Not great, but adequate material. It's just too damned short to actually tell us something about your Predator. What are their motives? Their beliefs? Their actual background, where they grew up, relations with others, etc. You show SOME skill as a writer, but you choose to downplay the story section instead of improve it into something great.

Your big, fancy, "How will you play your Predator" simply boils down to "I'm gonna stalk prey and do little things to scare and hurt them like EVERY PREDATOR DOES IN ADDITION TO THEIR OWN PLAYSTYLE, and I'm also going to taunt prey that I kill and RP taking trophies!" What's special? Where's the unique aspect to your Predator? Because currently, you don't have one.

If I choose to ignore that you recently became a Mod, then I'll say that you need to go back and work on this. You have the skill as a writer to make a GOOD background, and you've set the foundations for a good character. Mix the two, add a dash of actual information on them, and you're golden. If I do take in the fact that you've recently become a mod, then I'm of the opinion that it's too soon, and you need to go back and do your best, instead of what you gave.

Alright, thanks for the feedback, I do appreciate it. I'll try and address your concerns as best I can as well.

So let's start with the story, I honestly have little excuse for the complaints you have, as you're right, those things didn't occur to me, and perhaps I worried slightly if I made it too long, or went on a lot, my weakness as a writer would show even more, but you are honestly right, I should have put more effort into the background, even if it was mediocre. Maybe my logic was the "Very Brief" part, though I see now a backstory can be very important, giving your character thins to talk about and a.. life, I suppose, I guess I simply planned on letting it come naturally to me through game play. My paranoia and fear of being "bad" I suppose overcame me, nonetheless, that is not an excuse, and if this application doesn't make its way through I'll definitely focus on fleshing out the story. As a matter of fact I may just flesh it out now anyways and post it, not that it "counts", for I have submitted it already as is, but simply because it couldn't hurt.

Onto "How will you play your Predator", I am going to be entirely honest, I tend to create my "unique" and "special" characters, through in game improvisation. For example, my marine character, she started off just being mostly generic and sarcastic, and as I play more and improvise when people ask me questions, things tend to stick, and it all adds up to an odd backstory sort of thing! I see that most Predators in game act, well to be honest most act very similarly, I suppose my mindset is to avoid "gimmicks", and just say how I would play a Predator, attempt to make it slightly unique and my own, and yet in doing so I perhaps showed a lack of imagination. I just wanted to be realistic. My goal is just to show how I would play a Predator in general. My general mindset when it would come to encounters, and I hoped my own "style" would evolve to itself out of my game play, out of this skeleton, as I learn how it works, and build upon it. I suppose the unique aspect would be "Sort of a sadist, likes to toy with her prey". I suppose that may apply to every Predator though. Nonetheless I'm confident I can turn it into something special over time.

As for the Moderator section, once again I have little to say about this besides I completely and 100% understand I may be denied solely due to the fact that it's so sudden to be given all these permissions and rights, the fear of me just fizzling out after a month, abusing the system, etc. There is little else for me to say besides that this is not my intention at all, I do not plan on leaving CM anytime soon, and that I had planned to apply for Predator long before being a Moderator had even occurred to me. I suppose all that can be done here would be taking my word for it, which I can understand not being enough, but there is little else I can say on that matter, besides I am aware that it will be an issue.

Once again, thanks for the feedback, it really helps.

[Nicboone]

+1, regardless of role, have only ever had a good time with this player. They would make a good pred and put effort into writing this.

[Xurphorus]

I enjoyed the story, and I know who the player is. Never had a probelm with them in-game as a marine, and is as competent as they come.

+1 from me, hope to see you as a predator.

[forwardslashN]

As a few others have pointed out, the app is pretty decent, but the backstory is lacking when it comes to describing who your character is. Describing a Hunt is fine, but the only two things I can really get from the story is that she likes stalking prey and takes pleasure from watching it suffer. But it's not really clear and isn't entirely unique. What makes her interesting or unique though? You could have stated that her training has been especially grueling, instead of easy, and watching the prey suffer reminded her of the harsh lessons of the overseers, giving her pleasure in reversing the role. Or some such. I like you as a player, and I like the way you understand the predator role, but I'm not sure I should upvote you on that alone.

[TheMaskedMan2]

As a few others have pointed out, the app is pretty decent, but the backstory is lacking when it comes to describing who your character is. Describing a Hunt is fine, but the only two things I can really get from the story is that she likes stalking prey and takes pleasure from watching it suffer. But it's not really clear and isn't entirely unique. What makes her interesting or unique though? You could have stated that her training has been especially grueling, instead of easy, and watching the prey suffer reminded her of the harsh lessons of the overseers, giving her pleasure in reversing the role. Or some such. I like you as a player, and I like the way you understand the predator role, but I'm not sure I should upvote you on that alone.

Alright, thanks for the feedback, and those are good ideas, I have understood for a while that my backstory is the weakest part. I am going to rewrite and perhaps add on to the backstory later tonight. I understand editing is closed and it perhaps would not count, or because you essentially told me what to do, but I figure that it couldn't hurt, and I can prove my mettle as a writer. I also rather enjoy that idea and it could give the application the slight spice it needs to make it pop. Perhaps I was suffering somewhat from paranoia, that if I detailed too much it would be taken as overindulging in say, an ego? Though it can arguably be seen as a flaw, and flaws make characters more interesting. Anyways! Yeah, thanks for the compliments, and I see I could have detailed early life a bit more, and I will.

Expect something else posted here soon.

Edit: Actually not sure if that is allowed. Perhaps don't mind it.

[TheMaskedMan2]

Somewhat of a backstory redo/addition. As that is the most criticized part of my application. The center section remains relatively the same, with a few minor details adjusted. I am aware this may not count considering it is late after my original application, and was even taking into account recent feedback. Though I figured it couldn't hurt, and at the very least shows that I'm taking criticism to heart and I really want to dedicate myself to this on making it perfect.

Part 1: Training
Kjuhte Tarei'hsan thought she was prepared, once a starry eyed youngling, eager to the harsh realities of the training was almost more than she could bare.

The hult'ah, or overseer, barked at her, faster, stronger, harder, every moment. It was never enough for them.

Kicked, her side ached, the mud and dirt of her home sticking to her. From the moment the lessons had begun, she had been treated like nothing, worthless, she wasn't as strong, she wasn't as fast, she wasn't as big as the others. Though she did have one thing, persistence, and an imagination.

She imagined the hult'ah on the ground, reeling in agony, cuts lining him, her mandibles clicked rapidly in amusement, delivering a swift kick...

Suddenly thrown to the ground with the full force of a superior, a brutal landing on the hard surface.. "s'yuit-de!" He clicked, his lower mandibles flared. This would bruise, training would be painful. Another of the trainees had fallen, they would not be getting back up. She hoped to be different.

Her head and eyes lowered, she stood up, and continued the tasks set before her, imagining the day. The day she could hold that power over others, the day she can be blooded, the day of her hunt. Her persistence continued, despite the harsh wounds inflicted upon her, she continued, again, and again.

Part 2: The Hunt
The cool and damp air, the noises of various wildlife echoed throughout the dto at one point, but now, silent. This was the moment she had been waiting for, the day she will become blooded. A serpent, the r'ka, she has spotted it. It was tearing into a small animal. She was amused. It was fascinating to her, the efficiency, yet brutality in the manner they killed, she knew this one would make a worthy prey, her head turning as it scampered into the dark jungle..

For as long as she could remember, Kjuhte Tarei'hsan has been training, the thrill of the hunt, the intoxicating aroma when a kill was achieved, it spoke to her, as it did all Yautja. All of her training so far has been setg'in, she would not show mercy. Now though, despite her eagerness, she couldn't help but be nervous, what if she failed? A slight tremble of her hands as she grips her combistick, steeling her resolve. A simple shake of her head, as she imagined her future kill, a rapid clicking unable to be helped.

She thought she would be the first to spot it, but it heard her.
Fast. It was on her in a flash, hissing as it's tail whipped and cracked towards her head.

.....

Kjuhte Tarei'hsan, dripping with wounds and splattered with the sizzling blood of the r'ka. It had escaped, but she was exhilarated, the adrenaline of the hunt flowing through her very veins, she sought after the r'ka, pursuing it.

It was wounded, sizzling acid staining the jungle floor, she moved quickly, vantage point to vantage point. Then finally, there it was, vulnerable. She could kill it now, a single toss of her arm and the serpent would be impaled. Her arm is raised slowly, vision narrowing on her target. Not a moment later and a flick of the wrist, a piercing hiss rings out, the serpents claw had been impaled straight through! It's body reared up to face the stalker laughing behind it.

The jungle is filled with screeching and pained roars for hours on end.

m-di h'chak.

She emerges from the jungle, covered in wounds, scars, and also.. the serpent, draped over her shoulder. The evidence and trophy of a long entertaining hunt indeed.

Part 3: Blooded

Her mask and face marked with her kill, the sizzling blood stinging. It felt good. The adrenaline. Blooded.

Finally.

An tarei hsan, the hult'ah would make she thought. Not even worthy of her blade or challenge. The challenge, the overcoming of an opponent that is strong, and confident, and being able to make it fear her. It brought more pleasure than she could imagine.

...

She stood before the Clan Leader, dropping the hard meat unceremoniously. It's mandibles clicked together once in recognition. She withdraws her ceremonial knife, bringing it to the serpents skin, the pressurized blood erupting from the sizzling corpse as she began her work.

...

That was her first hunt, a mere single specimen of the hard meats, more will come, and the oomans she has heard prove amusing. Newly blooded, yet blooded all the same, her prey will wish they never crossed paths. Some have described her hunting methods as h'ulij-bpe, or being kha'bj-te. Naivety, a lack of imagination she sees in them. The hunt allows her to prove her dominance to her Prey, in all aspects.

[shyshadow]

Oh, alright.

[TheMaskedMan2]

Yeah, alright, I'll ask when I have the chance. I'll delete it until further notice. I may have misinterpreted it but better safe than sorry. Also you already casted your opinion on this so no harm done if it's a bad and I'm just a big dummy.

Edit: Clarified with forwardslashn, editing only applies to the original post so I was just being paranoid, if anyone wants to see my updated background I restored the original post. Right up there.

[Shyguychizzy]

Didn't have the time nor chance to overlook this app, will do tomorrow. I'll give my two cents on this app on another note. Just overall doesn't look bad but I'll thoroughly review it on another day.

[Boltersam]

Yeah, alright, I'll ask when I have the chance. I'll delete it until further notice. I may have misinterpreted it but better safe than sorry. Also you already casted your opinion on this so no harm done if it's a bad and I'm just a big dummy.

It's not allowed to add more to your app after the edit lock is applied. As staff, you can bypass the lock, but you shouldn't.

[TheMaskedMan2]

It's not allowed to add more to your app after the edit lock is applied. As staff, you can bypass the lock, but you shouldn't.

Yeah I wasn't really attempting to edit the application, I was moreso posting another updated background just trying to show I was taking the critisiscm in.

All in all I blame being half asleep and over eagerness. I deleted that post like fifteen minutes after with some hindsight so hopefully no harm done.

Edit: Clarified with forwardslashn, editing only applies to the original post so I was just being paranoid, if anyone wants to see my updated background I restored the original post. Right up there.

[Shyguychizzy]

After reading such app, I tend to agree with others have stated being this is in my opinion better than decent however it is decent in hindsight. The part what got me the most would be this part. "As for a specific play-style, I intend to occasionally observe the round at first, taking in the battles happening, keeping an eye out for worthy Prey of course. I would like to be stealthy and ambient, stalking specific targets, tormenting them, and scarring them. I would like to not simply "Strike and kill" so soon usually. Instead preferring towards wounding my Prey and prolonging their lives out until the bitter end, watching them limp around with no arm while taunting and such, before she finally grows bored and ends the prey. " To many others not so, however in how I would imagine, a predator stalking a lone marine, without noticing a cloaked hunter behind them. Suddenly, the hunter uncloaks to reveal them-self. Either a leg or arm falls, the marine runs with fear. You stalk it a bit more, then it sees you as you cut if off, dragging it. That's how I imagine it, it does lack a bit of yer background character however, I would like to see how you hunt in general, regardless of the app it also depends how you would hunt ingame. I would love to see how you would hunt, your in game character I enjoy the little rps and moments, quite competent medic and preferred medic in my book. Though, you are staff, in my eyes your status doesn't matter, however seem and deem worthy or least give it a try sort. I'll sit at a +1 for time being.

[TheMaskedMan2]

After reading such app, I tend to agree with others have stated being this is in my opinion better than decent however it is decent in hindsight. The part what got me the most would be this part. "As for a specific play-style, I intend to occasionally observe the round at first, taking in the battles happening, keeping an eye out for worthy Prey of course. I would like to be stealthy and ambient, stalking specific targets, tormenting them, and scarring them. I would like to not simply "Strike and kill" so soon usually. Instead preferring towards wounding my Prey and prolonging their lives out until the bitter end, watching them limp around with no arm while taunting and such, before she finally grows bored and ends the prey. " To many others not so, however in how I would imagine, a predator stalking a lone marine, without noticing a cloaked hunter behind them. Suddenly, the hunter uncloaks to reveal them-self. Either a leg or arm falls, the marine runs with fear. You stalk it a bit more, then it sees you as you cut if off, dragging it. That's how I imagine it, it does lack a bit of yer background character however, I would like to see how you hunt in general, regardless of the app it also depends how you would hunt ingame. I would love to see how you would hunt, your in game character I enjoy the little rps and moments, quite competent medic and preferred medic in my book. Though, you are staff, in my eyes your status doesn't matter, however seem and deem worthy or least give it a try sort. I'll sit at a +1 for time being.

Thanks for the response, I think I understand now that certain parts of my playstyle, and backstory don't link up that much, and aren't very clear, I think I'm going to make a little post in an attempt to give some clarifications in what I believe my intent is, as I believe I tend to ramble when typing, and I can talk forever without really getting anywhere, hehe. Anyways, thanks for the feedback and the +1.

[TheMaskedMan2]

Responses to criticism and various clarifications.
I believe I need to be more clear in my intent, my backstory, and how it all links up into a sizable character. I've been thinking about this a lot recently, and I believe I have a hit a bit of an epiphany, and now the ideas just keep flowing. I think I understand now that while some of these things made sense and linked up well in my mind, in the application they come off slightly as leaps of logic. So I just want to clear up my thought process a bit.

What makes it unique?
In response to this, my application had "As for a specific play-style, I intend to occasionally observe the round at first, taking in the battles happening, keeping an eye out for worthy Prey of course. I would like to be stealthy and ambient, stalking specific targets, tormenting them, and scarring them. I would like to not simply "Strike and kill" so soon usually. Instead preferring towards wounding my Prey and prolonging their lives out until the bitter end, watching them limp around with no arm while taunting and such, before she finally grows bored and ends the prey. "

This sounds, incredibly generic when put onto paper. It sounds just like any other Predator, does it not? I realize this now, but it really was not my intention. Since I seem to have trouble putting it into words, I would like to detail various scenarios I commonly see Predators deal with, and how I would handle them differently, to show the uniqueness of mine.

1. Predators seem hesitant, and passive.
From my personal experience observing rounds, being a Xeno, and being a Marine, Predators always come across as "Cowards" as my marine character would say. They decloak around you, make some scary noises, and then if you approach them or attack they fuck off into invisibility and vanish. You hardly see them do much that would strike "fear" or impact the round in anyway, besides occasionally appearing, and sometimes hunting some marines. Now this links up to my character in the manner that she likes to make her Prey fear her, be scared, be tormented. A lot of that is psychological. You want them to fear you as an unstoppable monster, not a weak thing that pops out, takes a cheap shot, and drags the dead body off. That isn't scary, just annoying.

So my response to this being, it may just be a pet peeve of mine, but I do not want to use the invisibility that much. I want to make a "scene". If I need to run away? I just want to run away, Predators are fast as hell! I've seen them run. They do not need to use invisibility every 10 seconds, because that to me feels like a cop out, an easy way to get in and out of a battle with no repercussions. As well as cutting current roleplay off. Just "Oh, well, it turned invisible and it's gone, okay.".

Now to me invisibility is more of a "Means to scare" as opposed a "Quick way in and out of combat!". I want to use my invisibility to appear infront of some marine or Xeno, and drop the trophy I have of it's friend/sister. Watch the fear as I pursue them, occasionally popping in to cut them, remove a foot. Vanish. Come back ten minutes later, remove a hand. Vanish. Torment them. Laugh. Until the final killing blow is delivered, that is what I want it to be like for my target, for them to feel hunted, scared, paranoid, and everyone around them in danger.

2. Predators aren't seen enough.
This somewhat sounds like my invisibility complaint up above, but this is more aimed at something else. Predators are supposed to essentially boil down to event characters, no? Then why does it seem a lot of the time, I see Predators doing things that effect nobody but themselves? Now I do not mean RP'ing alone and just relaxing. I mean collecting trophies, the lodge, etc.
Let me be more clear, for example, a Predator just secured a kill, say a marine, or a xeno. They drag it off to an obscure corner in the dark, and do the trophy collecting thing. Now for me, I don't want to do that, since my goal is to create a gruesome terrifying field of limbs and pain, I am going to kill that marine, make sure more marines SEE as I butcher Daves head off, toss his limbs and bloody corpse at them and around my surroundings, and walk off into the darkness. Now THAT is scary. What makes it even better? Ignoring the bullets. They are going to shoot you, just ignoring them and continuing your thing before long will make the players go "Oh god it's invincible!" and so on.
Essentially I want what I'm doing to actually be seen by the Players playing the round, to create nice rp moments.

3. Predators avoid a show of force too often.
Now I do NOT mean high power plasma cast'ing a squad of marines, that isn't fun for anybody. What I do mean, is someone does everything they can to provoke a Predator, and it does nothing. Essentially this boils down to some marines thinking they can be buddy buddy with me? Or Xenos thinking they are immune to me because the Queen ordered not to attack? Yeah, no. They expect me to only roar and turn invisible? I'm removing a hand from that marine that keeps touching me, or beating that dancing Prae into crit and tossing it onto weeds. People get too comfortable around Predators.


Now I believe I'm sorta drifting off track here, this seems like complaints on Predators, it really isn't, it is just what I would like to do differently, so let me talk about my specifically intended playstyle, and the mindset I had when creating it. Let me give an example, I play Xeno a decent amount, as a Xeno, I like to delimb marines. Quite simply, and then let them live. Why? Because that makes a good RP moment up on the Sulaco, and greatly improves that players round to be more interesting. As a Predator, I essentially want to be "Sadistic.", using this to wound and maim marines, without so completely and utterly ending their rounds. I would love for my "target" to be the one I seek to kill, but it's allies? Around it? I want the marines to feel in danger just by being around this marine. I find marines feel "safe" when they know they aren't the target. I want marines to get to the point that they actually want to throw their best friend out the door, because just by being around them people are getting maimed and tormented.
The only one that I actually want "Dead". Is my target, the rest is collateral damage. Say for example, my target decided to hide in the highly fortified FOB. How would I get them? Scare everyone else, make it obvious I want that one marine, and if they don't give them up, start to put random marines on the borders into crit. Slowly amp up the intensity, until I get to the point where I charge in, taunt them for being so weak, pick up my target by the head, brutally maim them, leave with my trophy.
Is this scenario specifically possible? Perhaps, perhaps not, but essentially my "Sadism" and making "Prey suffer" and be "taunted". To me all leads to more interesting rp, as opposed to a silent killer.

This all being believed to originate from my backstory, a history of being made worthless and shunned infront of her peers. She wants to simply cause the exact same pain onto others. She knows how it feels to be made powerless, watched over, and made a disgrace to everyone around her. It's time to reverse that role. It all say, links up to the backstory, and I'll admit I'm really into my revamped backstory, and as I said I think of it more as.... a base, a building block, that is built upon through gameplay and conversations. Someone asks where I'm from in game? I give that, it builds, and it builds, up into a massive encyclopedia, but besides that, currently, I just want my gameplay to be unique, and I hope the examples help put it into image more what I am imagining.



Ahem, anyways, I somewhat rambled there to be honest, my train of thought is all over the place.

Please, if you have any questions, concerns, or inconsistencies you wish to point out, please do so.

Thanks for taking the time to read this.

Edit: I didn't touch on the backstory much I realized; because I sorta revamp'd it in a post above, but to give a TL:DR. I essentially want her to feel sort of vindictive, and the harsh trials of growing up and training has caused her to be fascinated with pain and suffering, and turning it on those in power, reversing the roles. Taking strong and powerful and confident targets and making them whine and beg for death from their stalker and hunter. THAT is what I want.

[Swagile]

To be honest, the only criteria that should really be looked at when choosing a Predator player is:

1) Ban / Note History
2) Activity
3) RP ability (through either a static name or from administration taking notice of their roleplay)
4) Combat ability

All in that order.

I have yet to see anyone actually play via the playstyle they describe, nor does the backstory ever come into play when ive watched Predators do their thing, so I don't really see how that is relevant at all.

+ 1 since they are active, they are a mod (so they passed number 2), they try to RP when they can, and they are robust in the few times ive seen them in the Engineer / SL role.

[TheMaskedMan2]

To be honest, the only criteria that should really be looked at when choosing a Predator player is:

1) Ban / Note History
2) Activity
3) RP ability (through either a static name or from administration taking notice of their roleplay)
4) Combat ability

All in that order.

I have yet to see anyone actually play via the playstyle they describe, nor does the backstory ever come into play when ive watched Predators do their thing, so I don't really see how that is relevant at all.

+ 1 since they are active, they are a mod (so they passed number 2), they try to RP when they can, and they are robust in the few times ive seen them in the Engineer / SL role.

Thanks for the +1 but I actually slightly disagree that those are the only things needed, the playstyle is good to get a taste for how the player wishes to play, the imagination, and how they can use the role themselves, furthermore how dedicated they truly are to being a "Proper" Predator. Anyone who plays the game a lot can fill those criteria, but only a few are truly dedicated to try and think and act like a real Predator, otherwise people just think of it as a role to get "Cool equipment".

Essentially I want to play as a Predator, taking a more active "Seen" stance. Avoiding use invisibility extensively and so on. I want to be an actual "Part" of the round, as opposed to a mini thing that sorta showed up now and again. Not impacting it too heavily, but when people think of the events of the round, they will think "Yeah and there was that Predator lurking around being a creepy fuck, that was fun!". Really number one priority is enjoyment for all parties, and some nice character development with other Predators on the prowl with me.