I’ll start out by saying I don't feel this application is quite up to par, and I’ll be giving it a -1.
However I don’t mean to do so out of malice, so I’ll try to be as constructive as I can. This may get to be a bulky post.
The first thing I’ll address is who you are. I can’t say I’ve ever seen you in-game or out. Ordinarily this isn’t an issue, as after all we’re not omnipresent and I’m willing to take your word for it that you’ve been fairly active in-game. There’s no reason to doubt that. But there’s a problem when no one else seems to have, either. Whitelisted fates are entrusted with both power and responsibility. Be it a CO or a Predator, you have the power to completely derail the round -intentionally or not-, so in being a name that people recognise, they can have some measure of trust and faith in you. If people don’t know who you are, you’re basically asking them to take a potentially dangerous leap of faith.
ShattForte wrote: ↑24 Oct 2017, 22:17
The requirements say nothing about amount of posts, only that my account needs to be a month old.
You
are right about this. While I can’t seem to find it at the moment, in the past the necessity of forum activity was more clearly written. Specifically that making an application as your first forum post was grounds for automatic denial. While I can’t find it, so perhaps that’s changed, forum activity still plays an important part. It denotes out of game presence. A willingness to give something back to the community beyond a hail of bullets or acid spit. Traditionally I’ve always been one for leniency in regard to forum posts, as it’s something I completely understand. But it necessitates the need for something to make up for it, be that the rest of the application or an incredibly well-known in-game persona. It’s not about forum cred so much as it is about ensuring the people that are accepted are actually worth the gamble.
Moving into the story- it has potential. I understand what you’re writing and what you’re trying to convey. But the problem is it’s just not quite enough. It only tells us the basics of Dekna. It describes him, but it doesn’t really tell us who he is, if that makes sense. All we can really gather is that he was a not-quite-top fighter, is somewhat prideful and wants to find a worthwhile human to fight. That’s really not a whole lot to go on, and especially isn’t something that would distinguish him from any other John Doe predator, y’know? What he does have going for him is the fascination with eyeballs. That’s unique. That’s something I’ve never seen before. But it’s only mentioned the one time in the background (though you go into a bit more detail in the ‘How you intent to play’ section).
Like Karmac suggested, taking a look at the other accepted applications is often a great way to go. Many of the characters have strengths, flaws, desires and weaknesses. It breathes life into the character, which at the end of the day is what we all want in a roleplaying position.
Your intended playstyle is fairly dandy, I don’t have terribly much to say there, aside from our unfortunate inability to get eyeballs as an item.
But yeah. Putting it into D&D perspective, for example, is like giving a guy access to an extra powerful character on the condition that he not make an ass of himself and abuse it. When you don’t really know much about the person or the character they plan to play, it’s hard to make that call.
So yeah. Hopefully I said at least one thing slightly helpful. I’m certainly not the greatest roleplayer of all time and my thoughts tend to meander, so maybe I was just blowing smoke out my ass for the whole time. The gist of it is: Be someone people recognise. Be someone people are willing to trust potentially round-derailing power to.
