Byond ID: MisterLayne
Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Katyusha 'Steel' Layne (I almost always play Xeno, though).
Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Ungrateful Hunt
Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Read over the entire thing twice.
Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
Lar'ja Luar-ke is a Blooded Predator aspiring to become one of the Elite. They have only, to this time, killed three Xenomorphs. Their first kill was a drone, albeit, but they have progressed skill-wise from there. Lar'ja Luar-ke is passionate about the hunt, and adores honorable battles. They find no pride in even noticing dishonorables, and avoid them as much as possible, but will take them down if they become a problem.
How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?: My Predator wishes to increase their status and become one of the elites- Therefore they may focus more on duels with the Xenomorphs. They will be no short shy of communication the ones they find worthy, and respect viable rivals. They will have no mercy on filth that interrupt their hunt, though.
Why should we whitelist you?: Because I think I would make a pretty okay Predator. I play on the server at least once a day, too.
Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?: Nope. Never been banned!
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?: Nope.
Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?: Of course. Good thing I wouldn't disobey the Code of Honor.
Lar'ja Luar-ke
- MisterLayne
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- Thatnewguy1
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
So, here we go
1.The story is lackluster, needs more stuff. Read the accepted application stories and you will see what I mean
2.This is only you're second post, get that forum activity up
3.No idea who you are in-game(Xeno note explains it)
Needs a lot more work if you want this accepted
1.The story is lackluster, needs more stuff. Read the accepted application stories and you will see what I mean
2.This is only you're second post, get that forum activity up
3.No idea who you are in-game(Xeno note explains it)
Needs a lot more work if you want this accepted
Delta boys for life
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
1. True that. Not the best at story telling, but I'll work on that.Thatnewguy1 wrote: ↑20 Dec 2017, 14:25So, here we go
1.The story is lackluster, needs more stuff. Read the accepted application stories and you will see what I mean
2.This is only you're second post, get that forum activity up
3.No idea who you are in-game(Xeno note explains it)
Needs a lot more work if you want this accepted
2.I have no idea how to be active on the forums- My knowledge is not good enough to provide input to anyone.
3. Yeah. Never play Marine, basically.
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
I predict you're gonna have a bad time.
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- MisterLayne
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
I am not going to have a bad time if I don't get whitelisted B)
- Ghostdex
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
Extremely short backstory, pretty lacking overall and I dont think any predator would have a drone as its first hunt, considering drones are not exactly honorable prey. No clue who you are. Also check the accepted apps and then check your clan name.
Overall, -1 from me, this app is not up to par at all.
Overall, -1 from me, this app is not up to par at all.
John 'Fixer' Donable
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The story of Operative Delta: https://imgur.com/Go3VIhs https://imgur.com/4K8AqdA
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Something a bit funny: http://i.imgur.com/lKfpvwd.png
The story of Operative Delta: https://imgur.com/Go3VIhs https://imgur.com/4K8AqdA
- TehSpoderman
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
My review:
Story: Shows little effort. Look at accepted apps and look at yours.
Playstyle: Completely unoriginal, but its pretty hard to create an original one.
Reason for whitelist: Not gonna lie, its pretty bad. Atleast you say you are active.
Forum activity: Extremely lacking. Be more active in the community.
Player activity: Never seen them before, but I barely go on CM these days due to school and life.
Verdict: -1. You must put in more effort if you are gonna be whitelisted. Be more active in-game and on the forums.
Story: Shows little effort. Look at accepted apps and look at yours.
Playstyle: Completely unoriginal, but its pretty hard to create an original one.
Reason for whitelist: Not gonna lie, its pretty bad. Atleast you say you are active.
Forum activity: Extremely lacking. Be more active in the community.
Player activity: Never seen them before, but I barely go on CM these days due to school and life.
Verdict: -1. You must put in more effort if you are gonna be whitelisted. Be more active in-game and on the forums.
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Mentor: June 5th - September 1st
Check out my mapping dumping grounds: http://www.colonial-marines.com/viewtop ... 14&t=14204 . It's where people share their mapping projects and ask for feedback. Check it out pls <3
- TheMusician321
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
Yeah, you're gonna need to work on your story my man, playstyle is unoriginal but it is hard to make an original one, forum activity and player activity is extremely lacking, I've absolutely no idea who you are and your reason for whitelist is pretty bad my man.
All in all, take a look at the accepted apps, be more active and play marine more so we can get a feel for how you are OOCly and ICly in role play situations as Pred is a high roleplay role where if you make a little mistake you could get booted out.
All in all, take a look at the accepted apps, be more active and play marine more so we can get a feel for how you are OOCly and ICly in role play situations as Pred is a high roleplay role where if you make a little mistake you could get booted out.
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Re: Lar'ja Luar-ke
Bad application.
Denied
Denied