Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

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Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by Ttly » 07 Mar 2018, 05:57

Byond ID: Ttly
Marine Name: Stasiek Laker
Name of the character you want whitelisted: Sa'kel Ter

Are you familiar with the
Predator Code Of Honor?

Yes, don't bother with people that are busy with something else or non-combat roles.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):

It was one rainy morning on the jungle planet KA-307 as Sa'kel perches on a tree as he observe the marines march through the jungle, "Into their deaths." he thought, as he knew that the serpents were waiting for them in the clearing ahead.
To his surprise, the marines held the clearing longer than he thought, with their leader amongst them constantly shouting orders as the rest of the group and keeping them in line, as he heard that the serpents' mother charging, he immediately ordered their group to retreat.
Astounded by how the human leader leads his men Sa'kel thought "Hmm, the leader truly is a great warrior it seems." and with that he decided to kidnap the leader in the ensuing chaos of the marines' retreat. "GET BA-" The leader shouted as Sa'kel puts his hand on his mouth and dragged him into the jungle kicking and screaming.
Once he arrived on the riverside, he threw the squad leader onto the riverbed and clicked "Human, you have proven yourself as a worthy prey, and now you shall be my trophy." the man, not understanding what he just heard was still baffled at how after a hundred year of space exploration, humanity has never encountered another civilization until now said "What are you?!" as the translator on the biomask starts processing the word, the only reply he received was an odd laughter coming from the humanoid as he threw a sword on his feet and gets in a stance with his wrist blades extended four metres away from him.
Seeing this, the man immediately pulled a sidearm from his pouch and shoots the hunter, but missed as the hunter quickly reacts by moving towards him and kicked the gun off his hand. As the man recoils from the kick he rolled on to the sword and grabbed it, as the seven foot tall hunter lunged into his direction, the man thrust the sword into the yautja's right thigh, as the sword sticks in the wound, the hunter thrusts his wristblade on the man's lower abdomen, impaling him and swiftly after that slashed his neck, taking the head as a trophy.
Once the bloody battle has ended Sa'kel thought to himself
"Hmph, these humans, true that they might be weak on their own, but with leadership they can stand up to the serpents, perhaps there are still hope for them."
And with that in mind he starts treating the wound on his thigh and decides that the humans might be worth to hunt after all...

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?

I intend to watch how the battle plays out and kidnap xenos or marines a like that has been shown to be sufficiently robust on the frontlines once the battle has gone quiet and to challenge them on a duel somewhere lonely.

Why should we whitelist you?

Because from what I see, usually preds takes on squads, without giving them a lot of chance to roleplay, and I feel like I could offer something different.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
No

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
No, interestingly CM is the only server where I don't lag (though sometimes it does).

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
Certainly

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by Sheodir » 07 Mar 2018, 11:54

Typos and bad grammar in the short story, relatively unknown player, no real original offer (preds actually take on a lot of solo targets), underestimating how hard it is to get split players (specially after no general chat update), unreadable dark blue text, short answers.

Very low effort app. -1
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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by Ttly » 07 Mar 2018, 17:04

Sheodir wrote:
07 Mar 2018, 11:54
Typos and bad grammar in the short story, relatively unknown player, no real original offer (preds actually take on a lot of solo targets), underestimating how hard it is to get split players (specially after no general chat update), unreadable dark blue text, short answers.

Very low effort app. -1
I'm usually mostly on the discord, besides the timezone over here doesn't really let me get on at the crunch hour.
Bleh, writing ain't my strong point either. And the dark blue texts are the usual application texts that I feel like can be ignored.
Also I don't feel like it doesn't matter how short or long the answers to the questions such as "Have you ever been banned" are.

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by MauroVega » 07 Mar 2018, 17:08

I am sorry, but not only does the marine name not ring any bells, i never heard or seen you in the discord over these days im starting to get back into the banter

As Sheo mentioned, grammar and a good grip on the language helps too and the history is on the short side compared to approved Pred app's

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by AverageSpitter » 07 Mar 2018, 17:56

Ttly wrote:
07 Mar 2018, 17:04
I'm usually mostly on the discord, besides the timezone over here doesn't really let me get on at the crunch hour.
Bleh, writing ain't my strong point either. And the dark blue texts are the usual application texts that I feel like can be ignored.
Also I don't feel like it doesn't matter how short or long the answers to the questions such as "Have you ever been banned" are.
And that's the nail in the coffin dude, Story isn't nearly as convincing as the whitelisted pred ones. Did you ever read some of them? These can give you good examples of what you want your pred app to be.

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by Ttly » 07 Mar 2018, 23:09

AverageSpitter wrote:
07 Mar 2018, 17:56
And that's the nail in the coffin dude, Story isn't nearly as convincing as the whitelisted pred ones. Did you ever read some of them? These can give you good examples of what you want your pred app to be.

-1
Right, well I suppose it was a worthwhile attempt.
Well if it gets denied anyway, I can wait three months.

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by TheMusician321 » 08 Mar 2018, 17:56

Yeah, forum activity is low, your name doesn't ring any bells and your background doesn't really tell much of your predator, the background is supposed to give us a view on your pred's character, it could be about anything like his daily life, his adventures (or misadventures) or it could be him just talking to other yautja, as long as it tells us who your pred is, what he does and how he reacts to stuff.

All in all -1.
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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by AccointNaim » 12 Mar 2018, 20:55

I THINK I've seen you before, maybe once, maybe twice, but like everyone else is saying, bad whitelist reason, generic playstyle, low forum posts, also, the story doesn't have any spacing, which is really the nail in the coffin for me..

I'm going to vote a -1 for this.
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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by ArrancarX5 » 13 Mar 2018, 15:36

...Yeesh...I'm going to have to agree with everyone else here and -1 this piss-poor excuse of an application.

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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by Mvp777 » 18 Mar 2018, 11:12

Just from reading it myself and seeing everyone elses point i've gotta go with a -1
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Re: Ttly - Sa'kel Ter

Post by NGGJamie » 18 Mar 2018, 11:20

Denied, poor application.

Use your biography to flesh out your character foremost, your understanding of lore second, and show you can come up with a good narrative. Should you reapply in the future, be sure to keep those elements in mind.
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