Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

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Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by Lyiat » 14 Apr 2018, 13:59

Byond ID: Lyiat

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Chris 'Warlock' Williams

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Anki'Lo

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?
Yes

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
https://pastebin.com/YQatyzcN - I enjoyed writing this, I hope you enjoy reading it.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?
Anki'Lo is a predator struggling to redeem himself for his past failures. His rashness and pride resulted in the death of an Elite, and he has sworn to never allow such a thing to happen again. Though his hot-blooded nature has been tempered somewhat, he is still eager to regain his former honor and glory, and he has a special hatred for Serpents. He will defer to the judgement of other predators due to his status, and he will never hesitate to take the trophy of a xenomorph if he finds one worthy to hunt.

Regarding humans, Anki'Lo has little experience with them. He prefers to silently observe them, curious as to their actions, and thinks their over reliance on group tactics a weakness. When hunting humans, Anki'Lo prefers a game of harassment and cat-and-mouse until he can spring a trap upon them in a vicious surprise attack, preferably using another injured human as bait. More than one trophy in his scout-ship came from such a tactic.

Why should we whitelist you?
Because I will use this position to it's full potential. A Yautja is quite a capable creature to have out there, and can cause havoc in the hands of a player who is only interested in their own fun. I'm an experienced dungeon master for D&D and I've helped run several RP communities across different platforms, so I quite understand the responsibility of making a story not only for yourself to enjoy, but for others. I'm capable of weaving a narrative even with non-verbal characters, and am in fact responsible for the developer of CC developing an entirely new system for non-verbal communication after I played a mute character for a month.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
Once, for incidentally shooting myself post-round. I didn't bother contesting it or anything because I had to leave and it was just three hours, and I *had* technically done EROG, so whatever.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
No, I actually am a head admin for another BYOND game, 'Curtain Call'.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
Yes
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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by DrPng » 14 Apr 2018, 14:16

Edited for detail:

I think I've might have seen your character ONCE. I don't know, my memory is foggy. I can't really judge your RP capabilities or dedication to the server.
Your pred name has a ring to it, which is nice.

The backstory:
Basically, your predator was high born and had everything available to him on day one. He was widely remarked as a successful yautja who hunted some weird alien fauna the size of a ravager and claimed a trophy thus making him blooded.
Next he was paired with an elite to cleanse a hive and ignored every bit of advice the elite gave him because he though he was the shit and ended up getting the elite killed and himself exiled.

Then at the end, you say your character remains cocky and hot tempered even though you witnessed first hand what his cockiness got him. Your pred did not change at all. That's not a problem though, since hot headed individuals tend not to change their ways.

Grammar wise this wasn't the best back story.
Lore wise, it was accurate from my understanding of the lore.
Original? Maybe. It showed your pred suffering from the consequences of his actions though he didn't change much if at all ( aside from a "strong warning to his gut reactions" ) Which means your pred is doomed to repeat his mistakes again.

How you intend to play:
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I can see your predator focusing solely on serpents and getting himself killed a lot because of it. You do realize that you are gonna get SWARMED by the benos for the reason that they want to infect you or get you off the radar.
The way you intend to hunt marines won't work out as well, solely due to how people think and act. You aren't as badass as you may think, you are just as fleshy as any creature, only with some tough hide and armor and some Freddy Krueger claws. The marines will either group up on you and mow you down with AP or engage in RP if you are lucky. And that's going by what I've seen.

Why should you be white listed?
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So pretty much you are saying you are extremely experienced in not talking which is why you should be selected to white list. Not very convincing especially since you created this app ONE month after you opened your forum account and have only 6 posts.

As others have said many many apps ago, you have to be well known for something other than shittery to get accepted and I have no idea who you are.

My final verdict? -1, I have no idea who you are, reason for white list isn't too good, intention to play is generic ( though play styles are hard to follow in a game as meta as SS13) but your back story was okay.
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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by Sambalu » 14 Apr 2018, 14:18

While your story is orginial, it has spelling mistakes in it, but overall seems nice.
One major criticism, though a yautja that fails his hunt would usually self destruct as failing one's hunt is a great shame. In yautja society, he would probably be killed by an arbitrator if the AVP wiki is anything to go by.

Your playstyle also seems pretty generic, as most predators harass marines for quite a while. The part about being eager to regain his glory is interesting though. Might be better if your pred's fall from glory wasn't as drastic, but eh.

The biggest criticism I have about your app is that you have very low forum activity. Generally Predator players are required to be very active.

I also haven't seen you in-game, so I can't comment on wether you're a good RPer or not, I don't want to be too harsh here, so I'll give you the benefit of the doubt.

Still, for all the reasons mentioned above, I'm going to stick with a -1.

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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by Lyiat » 14 Apr 2018, 14:21

While I do have low forum activity I'm very active on the discord and in game. I'm kinda bemused that we see this as a reason not to approve people.
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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by MauroVega » 14 Apr 2018, 14:43

Lyiat wrote:
14 Apr 2018, 14:21
While I do have low forum activity I'm very active on the discord and in game. I'm kinda bemused that we see this as a reason not to approve people.

It is the whole reason, a player must be known all across for us to be able to tell if you are capable of the Hrp the Pred role has, and the responsabilty not to abuse it

Also -1 as mentioned above
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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by Xenomobia » 14 Apr 2018, 14:53

You didn't even read the story he has been writing down and you went directly for -1 justified poorely under his ONE month activity on the forum when he could be active in game since months or years like others.
The server is more than under its centralisation, so I don't see how for you both could be important being "active" on the forum. Due of the centralisation there's no high risk of "abuse" as everything is under a tight grip too.
Regarding the broken English it's not a primary language for everyone here, so it looks more than legit to have a medium-low level since the interactions and RP itself doesn't require that developed and deep structure here...

The story is nice, I like it. I saw him in game, beside the other kids, he has a good behaviour and a good level and decent standard of RP to be considered like a Predator. +1

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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by TheMusician321 » 14 Apr 2018, 21:43

I admit, that your backstory was pretty neat and unique as it showed your pred having the consequences of his actions and it actually shows his personality and his traits rather well, he's hot headed and arrogant which ended up getting the Elite killed and himself exiled, however my main problem is that I've never seen you in game and your forum activity is really low as well, along with that your forum account was literally made 1 month ago.

I've also been around asking people if anyone knew who you were and unsurprisingly, nobody did in Ckey or in Marine name. Playstyle is also very generic, it's pretty much what most of the preds do save for the one or two aggressive players that rush entire squads and manage to get out alive with their target's head. All in all I have to go with a -1 as I have no idea who you are and I can't trust you with this role.
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Re: Lyiat's Pred App - Anki'Lo

Post by NGGJamie » 17 Apr 2018, 08:33

Denied

While I didn't really notice many huge grammar mistakes, "Yautja" is consistently misspelled throughout the entire backstory. Moreover, the way your predator is dishonored in the story, and his consequences, do not line up. If he were to be the cause of an Elite in his clan dying, especially by facehugger, then he would certainly need to commit suicide to retain any semblance of honor. Exile would not be sufficient.
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