nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

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Re: nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

Post by ThePiachu » 13 Jul 2018, 14:57

The story is too short and it's not even a story. Doesn't show that you understand the lore too much, or much nuance in the Honour Code.

The name is leaning more on the complicated side - will you be able to memorise it and type it from memory, or will you have to copy-paste it?

Killing from shadows is a bit of a boring way to play a predator, especially since you would be de-cloaking before confronting your prey (as per Honour Code).

You should fill in the whole application, you can't skip any fields.

I do recall seeing you in the game though and not leaving a bad impression, so that's a positive.

Use the following two/three months polishing up your application and keeping a good in-game activity and the response will be better.

-1 for now.
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Re: nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

Post by Frans_Feiffer » 13 Jul 2018, 16:01

ThePiachu wrote:
13 Jul 2018, 14:57
The story is too short and it's not even a story. Doesn't show that you understand the lore too much, or much nuance in the Honour Code.

The name is leaning more on the complicated side - will you be able to memorise it and type it from memory, or will you have to copy-paste it?

Killing from shadows is a bit of a boring way to play a predator, especially since you would be de-cloaking before confronting your prey (as per Honour Code).

You should fill in the whole application, you can't skip any fields.

I do recall seeing you in the game though and not leaving a bad impression, so that's a positive.

Use the following two/three months polishing up your application and keeping a good in-game activity and the response will be better.

-1 for now.
Honestly when I started making this I really didn’t understand the honor code, much less how to make a good app. That’s why as I described in an above comment, I went to scrap it only to then find I posted it about a week or so after. Phone interface is weird. But either way it’s not an excuse for how ridiculous the App is, more just me trying to explain I’d rather this app not be a thing, lol. Or at least denied so I could move on hah. Aside from that though, thank you for your criticism and i’ll defintely take the next 3 months or more to think about it. Personally I have other plans before trying again for Predator for even now I don’t think I fully grasp Predators honor code. And as I recall, i’ve seen you in game a few times, and they’ve all been quite nice, even if we didn't directly communicate.
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Re: nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

Post by Aceluke123 » 13 Jul 2018, 16:49

Sorry but -1 for this application.
It’s been beat and as you have said you wanted it closed a long time ago.

Sorry about all the criticism as it makes sense and I do like your responses as many seem to enjoy it too.
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Re: nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

Post by Frans_Feiffer » 15 Jul 2018, 17:10

Aceluke123 wrote:
13 Jul 2018, 16:49
Sorry but -1 for this application.
It’s been beat and as you have said you wanted it closed a long time ago.

Sorry about all the criticism as it makes sense and I do like your responses as many seem to enjoy it too.
No worries, I appreciate the criticism and agree with you. And thank you, I’ve tried to be as honest as I can in regards to replies thus far. Now to get this closed, haha.
“Your Friendly Neighborhood Commodore, Frans ‘Friendly’ Feiffer. Survivor of Space Vietnam, Austrian Kommodore vith ze vorst accent, and Loving Caretaker of the Ungas Aboard the USS Almayer.” Frans Feiffer's Promotion to Commander - viewtopic.php?f=142&t=18008
The Day I sold my Soul to Titan - viewtopic.php?f=69&t=18263
Yeyin R'ka Joins the Ranks of Blooded - viewtopic.php?f=125&t=18549
Darwin is Booted up and Assigned to the USS Almayer - viewtopic.php?f=149&t=18897
Commander Council term 1, Alongside the Men, the Myths, the Legends, Bancrose, Lumdor, Dr. Lance, and Taketheshot56. - viewtopic.php?f=137&t=18907
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Re: nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

Post by Emeraldblood » 15 Jul 2018, 19:04

Resolved - Denied; Given your explanation on June 16th, you can apply two months after that date, the date this would have been asked if you wish to withdraw this. You can post a new App on 8-16. As a tip, being active on the forums will help give you a leg up when making a pred application.
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