nracha-dte r'ka, or the Relentless fire

[Frans_Feiffer]

Byond ID: Breckon_Montague

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Frans ‘Phoenix’ Feiffer

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): nracha-dte r'ka

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?

Yes
Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
nracha-dte r'ka, Wanting nothing more then the ultimate hunt, seeks out prey worthy of bringing down, evetually running into Xenos and Humans, at first he tests them, curious as to their capabilities but eventually attacks head on. While young, This Yautja is still relentless, and will not stop the hunt until all prey is captured, or he dies honorably in combat. Whichever happens, he lives everyday for one thing and one thing only. The skull of the ultimate prey, a trophy showing the hunts of the past.
How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?

Why should we whitelist you? I believe I should be whitelisted for I do not seek to murder everything there is and anuse my OPness, but to carefully take out only those deemed worth, and to imploy stealth as my biggest advantage, killimg from the shadows, not from plaim sight. Although my account on this forum has not been a month old,
My Byond is, and thus I believe I should I be whitelisted.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
I have not once been banned
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
No
Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes

[FearTheBlackout]

What.

You realize you have to fill out EVERYTHING? There's literally no chance of you being whitelisted if you have no character background. I also would have held off on this until the suspension on whitelisting was lifted. I myself have a draft sitting until the time comes.

-1 from me.

[DefinitelyAlone0309]

very background, much wow

-1

Also this app isn't even valid, since your forum account has to be one month old at the very least

[Drownie]

?

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WHYYYY?? -1

[Shyguychizzy]

Beyond bland, merely posted application with day old account expecting nobody to notice. Yer reasoning because beyond is old, doesn't give a damn right forums age isn't accounted. How the hell are we suppose to know didn't make this which as it looks is solely for predator white list simplest of rules. Lack activity, doesn't seem ever do care of community just for pred white list thats somethin that's iffy on its own. Doesn't mean shit if your a damn oldie or old player everybody goes through good apps or bad apps many old players and new ones require good application even the good ones get denied even though they are oldies. Your logic becuase your old account seems silly and I have no idea who hell you are. Don't believe joining among this hunt is for you. Sorry but gonna hit yah with a hard -1.

[x31stOverlord]

-1

Reasoning: Look at the app

[Blazer]

-1

I didn't think this was possible but This was worse than my application for CO.

[Sambalu]

This is your only post on the forums as of now, your account is less than a month old, playstyle hasn't been filled out, reason you should be whitelisted is not convincing at all, and the story is not that good either.
And then there's also the fact that applications are currently suspended.
-1

[Frans_Feiffer]

Apologies for all of those that took the time to comment on this application. Honestly, I started the application after a friend and I had encountered a predator midgame and thought it was cool as hell. He and I both started drafting up an application, however halfway through he told me about a few things I missed, such as the suspension, and needing the account to be older then a month. I wrote it in, but after said friend and I were talking about it, realized we weren’t qualified, nor serious enough about trying to be Predators, and thus scrapped the applications. Or at least I thought I had scrapped it, but hopped on about 2 days ago and realized I had posted it instead. I’m not asking anyone to +1 me, for an application like the one I submitted was absolute garbage and doesn’t deserve the +1s, nor am I asking for pity. I just felt the need to apologize for the application and for not taking it seriously. Thank yo for reading/commenting and have a great day to any that do read this

[Kavlo]

Without even going into the mess that is the application yourself you don't even meet the requirements for making a application right now.

-1.

[Frans_Feiffer]

Without even going into the mess that is the application yourself you don't even meet the requirements for making a application right now.

-1.

I understand that, that’s why I commented above your reply what I did, lol. I appreciate it, but I already got denied for good reason, and have my eyes set on other things, rather then the failure of a Predator App that “thing” is.

[Imperator_Titan]

Bad backstory and the app itself is subpar. Take a look at thr accepted apps next time around, they allow you to see the requirements needed to pass.

-1

[Symbiosis]

Sorry bud. Poor overall application.

If you’re hungry to do this, look at past accepted applications and make something close to that.

-1

[coroneljones]

First post on the forums is this app, if im reading it right.
Didnt fill everything out, and the Backstory is...too short and a bit bland, in my own opinion, it doesnt have an interesting characterization of the hunter.

That and its not been one month since you made your account, your reasoning that your Byond account is older is not enough, I would say.
-1

[freemysoul]

-1 Sorry mate, this isn't a good Application, Story is way too short and very common, Additionally, this is your very first post while it isn't a requirement, you would be better off getting known in the community first as well as reading through the Approved Applications beforehand.

[Frans_Feiffer]

Bad backstory and the app itself is subpar. Take a look at thr accepted apps next time around, they allow you to see the requirements needed to pass.

-1

Aye, it really is. I mentioned it in an above comment the reasoning for the app being what it is, but either way it doesn’t change the fact that it still is a really bad app. At least now people have an app to look at if they want to know what NOT to do on one of these apps, haha.

[Imperator_Titan]

Don't worry brother. For the next time around, I recommend reading through the predator wiki in depth. It's quite informative and gives you a rough idea of how they lived, their culture, weaponry and etc. Use that information alongside general strengths of other accepted apps and get your name tossed out there ICly for positive things and I have no doubt you'll be able to make it.

[Symbiosis]

You’ve got the perfect attitude when faced with criticism. Spend the next couple months putting a solid app together... and keep playing XO! (Maybe even CO, eh?)

[Frans_Feiffer]

Sorry bud. Poor overall application.

If you’re hungry to do this, look at past accepted applications and make something close to that.

-1

It’s all good, chubs. Honestly at this point I just want this app to be denied so I can say it’s in the past, hah. No way in hell it could be accepted, and upon playing the game more, Predator isn’t really what i’m going for. Thank you though for your input, and if I do ever apply again i’ll definitely do so. The pred apps that do get accepted are truly respectable things as those people poured a lot of time into em’.

[Frans_Feiffer]

You’ve got the perfect attitude when faced with criticism. Spend the next couple months putting a solid app together... and keep playing XO! (Maybe even CO, eh?)

I truly do appreciate it, my man. We’ll just have to see what comes next in the future, but for now being the CO’s coffeeboy is a pretty comfortable spot for me...having my own coffeboy though..Eh, give it about a month or so haha

[Frans_Feiffer]

Don't worry brother. For the next time around, I recommend reading through the predator wiki in depth. It's quite informative and gives you a rough idea of how they lived, their culture, weaponry and etc. Use that information alongside general strengths of other accepted apps and get your name tossed out there ICly for positive things and I have no doubt you'll be able to make it.

I really do appreciate it, man. The wiki really is helpful, and paired with the accepted apps thus far, it really shows just how much effort is put in to having an application accepted. Somethimg that in my eyes is really respectable.

[Imperator_Titan]

Good luck next time brother, you've earned my respect regardless. You're responding to criticism extremely well. Like I said, get your name out there! I'd extremely enjoy roleplaying with you. Best of luck on your next app though. Hopefully it can live up to the expections.

[Ghostdex]

Just wanna add that from what I’ve seen the player is generally a generally good lad on the server and that I like from what I’ve read in the responses

[TheMaskedMan2]

You don't seem like a bad person but this app really isn't up to par. Don't get discouraged though, even my first app was denied.

I would recommend reading up on Predator lore, the AvP wiki is a good source. Check out the previously denied/accepted apps and find out what they did right or wrong. Add more story, more.... substance, and maybe you'll do better next time, but as is I can't really give this any confident vote.

-1

[Frans_Feiffer]

You don't seem like a bad person but this app really isn't up to par. Don't get discouraged though, even my first app was denied.

I would recommend reading up on Predator lore, the AvP wiki is a good source. Check out the previously denied/accepted apps and find out what they did right or wrong. Add more story, more.... substance, and maybe you'll do better next time, but as is I can't really give this any confident vote.

-1

Aye, I agree with ya. Thank you for your criticism, it really helps man. I have other plans rather then to make another Predator App when I’m next able, however if I ever do, i’ll definitely make sure to take yours and everyone elses advice to heart. But right now, i’m just waiting it out, hah. If possible, i’d just like to have this denied so I can move on.