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Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by awan » 26 Dec 2018, 14:37

Byond ID: Awan

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Awan Oostveen

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): En'dchi

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes, read and understood.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?
In general I would prefer to stalk my prey. And after I see how they fight and what they try I will try to enage them with a weapon of my chosing.
An example being I would observe a lurker and how they jump marines. I am going to try and see if I can see a pattern in their movement.
After that when I engage them I am going to make full use off that.
The idea being that by observing and knowing my enemy I will be able to fight them better.
Seeing that my enemy always forgets to reload when almost through his clip I will engage him the moment I know he has almost not bullets left.
if my foe prefers to keep the shadows I will force them out into the light.
The goal is not to render my foe powerless just to force him to make a mistake.
They should always feel as if they could have won the battle when in reality they never stood a chance.

Why should we whitelist you? I have played on cm for 9 months now and I am an active community member. I do my best to bring funs to rounds and to have fun. In general I am not going to abuse the whitelist and the whitelists were only intended as a small barrier. In general this will be a positive change.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
Yes, I have an appealed ban for a larva suicide that was not true.
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
Not, Afaik.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes, this also is so for the other whitelists.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - Mral'fan

Post by ThesoldierLLJK » 26 Dec 2018, 14:43

Ok I have a serious question.
Are you intending to get this whitelist so you can play predator and see what needs to be fixed as a developer. Or are you intending to play Predator seriously like your CO whitelist and not as a developer.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - Mral'fan

Post by awan » 26 Dec 2018, 14:43

ThesoldierLLJK wrote:
26 Dec 2018, 14:43
typo or what?
It did not fully save the edit. I added it back in.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - Mral'fan

Post by carlarc » 26 Dec 2018, 16:02

I have literally never seen you RP. Not once. Not even as Commander/Captain.

The application itself is the definition of barebones. The playstyle is generic, the story is tiny. And what it tells me is basically, that your predator is generic. He strives to be a good hunter, and that's kind of it.

So yeah. There's not much to say because outside of the game you're active, but inside you just kind of blend into the background, much like your predator is, and if you get accepted I doubt this is going to change. -1


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Re: Awan - Predator Application - Mral'fan

Post by Sleepy Retard » 26 Dec 2018, 17:19

It seems like any spare effort you have went straight to Dev work, nothing was spared for this app. It's generic, looks like you put 3 minutes into each section, and just gives me nothing of value.

I'm not a mral'fan of the name either.

Next time, just spend more time on it. Get someone else to read it. Get a couple more people to read it. Improvement is best with others reviewing your work, you should know this.

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Re: Awan - Predator Application - Mral'fan

Post by awan » 26 Dec 2018, 17:25

I have already asked 2 more people to review it. I kinda got a bit of conflicting advice the first time around.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by Imperator_Titan » 26 Dec 2018, 17:44

Obviously you got the wrong people.

Weak story, tells me little to nothing about your pred personality and overall generic, short being a cause of that.

Playstyle is the good ol generic hunt and die honourably.

The only thing really going is your Dev status but a subpar application like this is by no means justification for getting through.

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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by awan » 26 Dec 2018, 18:04

Ill withdraw ill open it up on the new forums.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by Kineem » 26 Dec 2018, 18:11

the "quirk" section is basically you just saying that you will be a predator. "i will examine prey before i hunt" is literally what predators do. a quirk, preferably, should add something meaningful to your predator's interactions with other people whether in hunting or in RP and serve as a means to differentiate you and other predators, and this "quirk" is the complete antithesis of what a quirk is supposed to be.

the story isn't even a story. it's just you talking about your predator and their thoughts. despite this overt and direct approach to character backstory, you fail to share any hint of character or personality.

it's good that you're withdrawing the app. whoever was helping you out with this app genuinely fucked you over if they were saying this was good. better luck next time chief.
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by Karmac » 27 Dec 2018, 01:00

There's not much I can say that hasn't already been said, one thing I really want you to improve on is the sentence structure and just your writing in general. I understand you live in a clog and maybe they don't teach people English inside clogs, but this is something that can seriously damage the perception of your story due to the fact it reads more like a powerpoint presentation than a background.

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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by ThesoldierLLJK » 27 Dec 2018, 01:35

I'm just going to add on, whoever "helped" you did a pretty bad job about it.
If you needed help Awan, next time you could always ask Karmac, Me, MattAtlas, Imperator, any of the other whitelisted staff members. Had you shown me your original work, I would have been more than happy to help you.

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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by simonset55 » 27 Dec 2018, 09:52

Did you use your forum powers to change the name after the one hour editing period had expired.
I play "Mudder Plantagenet" and that's it, no fancy quotes or anything.
I'm also a click clacker
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by NethIafins » 27 Dec 2018, 11:41

simonset55 wrote:
27 Dec 2018, 09:52
Did you use your forum powers to change the name after the one hour editing period had expired.
devs (even me) don't have ANY forum powers. We can't even see deleted posts or close convos.

Just FYI


As for app... I don't like it Awan... dunno why you rushed it
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Re: Awan - Predator Application - En'dchi

Post by Emeraldblood » 27 Dec 2018, 14:46

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