gahn'tha-cte halkrath (Ruthless Shadow)

[begad]

Byond ID:Zelcration

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Soloman Baker And I do play as alien alot.

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): gahn'tha-cte halkrath .

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes, I am familiar with code of honor.

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background): gahn'tha-cte halkrath (Ruthless Shadow), He came from far away tribe, He was never the kind of one that would interect with other Predators. He would always stay away in the shadows watching Everyone going on their hunts. until The A waited Day came to him And When he went on his first Hunt He remembered what the elder taught him yin'tekai(honor) And M-di H´chak (No mercy) and He went to prepare Himself.He only took a Glavier with him as a weapon of choice, Then he went off on his first hunt On one of the days of his Hunt,He found tracks of few softs meats going into a cave. He went after them lurking in the shadows watching them, Until he found the worthy one of them He waited until they splited But it never happened Until one day he decided to split them from each other Not causing damage to the other soft meats then he had an honorable duel with the Worthy one He gave him a weapon and disarmed him from all of the other weapons ,Then the Duel begun.The duel did Take a while. Until gahn'tha-cte halkrath Took him down With the last Hit And He said Worthy One before He killed him,Then he cloacked and took his trophy with him,When he finished His first Hunt He thanked His elder For teaching him everything But He said to his elder That He wouldn't be here Anymore That He would go away to far lands Looking For new hunts And the elder Said yes,Then He Prepared himself He took his gear with him And Before He left he told the elder,The words yin'tekai(honor) And M-di H´chak (No mercy) And he set off on his new journy looking for new worthy hunts in the far away lands.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)? I intend to play my predator As A predator Seeking honor in the shadows Waiting to find his perfect prey When he finds it he would follow it step by step until he finds the right time to strike

Why should we whitelist you? I am not the person everyone would know around the server But I have changed from A bad player before I was perma banned And Begun Changing into a Better Player in CM after the unban And I am sure I would be Good at being a predator since I started becoming active and learning how to become a predator.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? I don't really remember When I was Unbanned it was Probs 2 month ago I don't really know.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? No.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes.

[coolsurf6]

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The story seems short, unedited with little punctuation. I don't see much effort put into it. Where are your full stops?!
I'm sorry but i will -1 this. Look at some of the accepted suggestions and fix it up.

I've never seen you around at all.

[begad]

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The story seems short, unedited with little punctuation. I don't see much effort put into it. Where are your full stops?!
I'm sorry but i will -1 this. Look at some of the accepted suggestions and fix it up.

I've never seen you around at all.

I fixed some of the punctuation, From what I saw at least.

[northcote4]

Now, it's not really my place to say anything about predator apps, since I'm not whitelisted myself, but I'll throw out my two cents in this case.

I don't mean to be offensive, begad, but as coolsurf mentioned, the story doesn't really seem up to par. Between the spelling and grammatical mistakes to just a general lack of in-depth character development, I personally wouldn't be able to throw my own vote in favour of this.

And just from what I've seen with the other apps, two of the major things they're looking for seems to be clear intent regarding the 'How are you going to play your predator' section, and a lot of forum activity. Just something to consider.

[Feweh]

Denied, really not anywhere close to being on-par with other APPs.