Holy shit, I finally did it. I'm sorry for the long as fuck wait. I've just been like putting off for so long. So please I hope you enjoy it, and don't be discouraged by the google doc. It just looks better than white on black. Black on white looks a LOT easier to read. If you haven't read the last 2 chapters, please go read them before reading this one.
Introduction
Chapter I
Now here's the google document: The Lost Cemetary: Chapter II
I really hope you liked it guys. I worked for like a total of 12 hours on it, sooo ehhh. Anyway, please give your thoughts and opinion on it. In the section below....
The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
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The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
haha wee
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
Just as fun to read as the first chapter, lookin' good so far.
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Back in action.
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
I'm laughing at this and I don't know why. It's just so silly. Hopefully it means you like it.
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
yee haha wee
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Check out my mapping dumping grounds: http://www.colonial-marines.com/viewtop ... 14&t=14204 . It's where people share their mapping projects and ask for feedback. Check it out pls <3
Mentor: June 5th - September 1st
Check out my mapping dumping grounds: http://www.colonial-marines.com/viewtop ... 14&t=14204 . It's where people share their mapping projects and ask for feedback. Check it out pls <3
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Re: The Lost Cemetary - Chapter II
your writing style needs some work, Iv added some feedback to your document.
Good idea, nice concepts....dialogue needs some heavy work and your understanding of certain behaviours in certain contexts needs more thought.
Keep practicing.
Good idea, nice concepts....dialogue needs some heavy work and your understanding of certain behaviours in certain contexts needs more thought.
Keep practicing.