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The Battle of Argo: The First Test of the War Dogs

Post by Jack McIntyre » 08 Sep 2016, 15:18

Battle of Argo:
The 2nd Battalion 7th Marines, given the name “War Dogs” by other units of the Colonial marines, had recently been reformed and refitted after the unit which had been decimated and then dismantled during the Tientsin conflict. A new commander, Bill Carson, is selected and the rest of the marines are taken from new recruits or other members from other marine divisions. They are soon given a mission to the outer rim world of Argo, a swampy planet that has been taken over by a renegade faction known as the Outer Rim Freedom Alliance, who believed the outer rims shouldn’t be governed by the earth government. This would be the unit’s first action fighting together as a unit. Only time would tell how it would end for the War Dogs of the 7th Marines.

Time: 0400 Location: USS Orion, Briefing Room

“Right, I’m tired of waiting, let’s get started. We are going to have the first wave of troops landing on the outskirts of Novis. Why anyone thought to put a name like that in a little shithole of a planet is beyond me, personally I would just bomb the hellhole off the planet, but it is the location of one of the gas refineries on this planet so we have to send in you. The squad leaders for the first wave will be Staff Sergant Dergens and Staff Sergant Winter. They will land and secure a beachhead and hold for the second wave to land and then push for the city.” Bill said to the squad leaders as they looked over a holographic map of the outskirts of the city. His uniform was neatly pressed and his boots had been neatly polished.

The room was dimly lit and smokey from a few of the squad leaders smoking cigarettes and cigars which caused Bill to sneer a bit considering them undisciplined grunts compared to some of the newer squad leaders who seemed to think his words were those from god himself. They were at the edge of their seats, clearly waiting for the mission to start so they could test their skills in combat. The men like Dergens though; they were patient, his cold brown eyes studying the map marking landmarks that would help his squad in combat. Winters seemed to be looking over the other squad leaders examining them, maybe looking for something that was not seen to the others like she had her own mission, which was unknown to everyone, but her.

The executive officer, Aleksi Ishumira, a new officer who had just graduated from the academy who was looking to prove herself in combat although she seemed to steal a few glances at Dergens, although he did not seem to know, or care for that matter. Her uniform was also neatly pressed and aligned as if she was getting ready for an inspection that could cost her to do some PT in case her uniform was messed up in anyway. She saw this battle has her chance to prove her worth as an executive officer to the rest of the marines under her command. The other bridge officers varied in experience, but they all studied the map carefully knowing they would be directing most of the traffic for their squads. One such man seemed to stand out from the bunch however, he was a older marine and was known by everyone in the room even the people getting out of the acamedy and boot. His name was Osalaa Wookie and as he stroked his neatly groomed beard, one of the reasons why he was so famous, he couldn't help, but feel some worry over seeing so many fresh and young squad leaders in the unit. He just hoped that they would be able to finish their mission with as few casualties as possible.

Winters finally raised her hand which gave Bill an annoyed face, but he nodded to her acknowledging her hand. “What sort of military strength are we suspected to be facing on this operation?” She directed seeming a bit frustrated with seeing the look Bill gave her.

“We believe it is a small garrison, something you grunts can handle, if not then I am going to have to talk to someone about the people they put under my command,” Bill retorted.

“Any defenses that we should be highly concerned about?” Dergens finally piped in although his tone was low still studying the map.

“I don’t know, nothing was reported, but why don’t you go see for yourself,” Bill grumbled waving his hand, “Now the briefing is over, so get out and brief your squads. We will begin landing at 0600.”

The squad leaders seem grumble as they were nudged out of the room by the bridge staff as Bill looked at the map once more before looking over at Aleski. “So I have some time to kill before I have to babysit these marines, why don’t you come to my quarters and I can get to know my executive officer a bit more.” Bill confidently asked as if thinking he knew the answer would be yes.

“I don’t think so commander; I am going to go and look over the scans and make sure everything is up to date before the landing. I would think you would need to report into high command and let them know we are about to start the operation,” Aleski growled back.

“I will get to that when I need to. Go look over your damn charts,” Bill demanded as he stormed out of the room. His grumbling could be heard for a military police man who stood by the door.

Time: 0600 Location: USS Orion Hanger

Six of the Orion’s dropships had been armed and prepared as the fire teams in Dergens and Winter’s squads boarded their respective dropships, the mixed reactions of the veterans with the recruits filed the air. One of the marines, who seemed particularly excited for his first mission he seemed to be twitching which certainly didn’t help his cause with his squad.

“Can you believe it, we are in the first wave, time to show these assholes what the War Dogs can do right guys?” Jim Sanders exclaimed loudly. The rest of the members of his fire team entering the bird didn’t seem to share his enthusiasm with one of the members Mike Hernadez, whose eye seemed to twitch hearing the young man’s voice. He shook his head as he loaded up on the bird. One of the other men boarding on the same ship sat in his seat as he twirled a knife in his right hand, as another member shook his head. “Adam, put the damn knife away before we drop or it might go in someone’s eye, ya pyscho” Bigby said shaking his head. Adam looked up and sighed sliding the blade into the sheath on his vest on his shoulder blade. The doors of the dropship slid shut as the other squads got ready.

A man with a metal arm and engineering badge on his arm as he wrote into a small brown leather bound book when a man shouted to him from the crowd. “Lucas get your ass over here and board, the damn jokes can wait.” The man looked up and nodded running over to a shuttle to join the queue of men as they boarded into the shuttles. As the last of the men scurried onto their ships the alarms blared through the hanger as the hanger crew ran back as the floor below the ships opened slowly. The voice of Bill Carson booming inside the ships’ cabins as the marines waited for the drop.

“As you know this is our first mission together so I will just leave you with these words of advice, listen to your orders and you will make it through this…or you won’t, honestly I don’t care just don’t make me look bad.” The voice boomed before the microphone cut out and leaving the marines feeling a bit of mixed reactions which didn’t seem to matter in the moment anyway as the clamps released and the shuttles dropped to the planet below. The battle of Argo was about to begin and the War Dogs of the 7th Marines were about to get their first chance for battle.

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Post by Jack McIntyre » 08 Sep 2016, 15:22

Don't know if I will need it, but Reserved just to be on the safe side.

Right let me know what you folks think, and if your character wasn't included don't worry, the marines will have to take the planet so there is going to be a lot more people getting shown as the battle rages on. And for the folks asking events to happen to your characters I have already planned for it in this battle or the ones going to be following this one so just stay tuned.

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Post by northcote4 » 08 Sep 2016, 20:01

I like it. Plain and simple.

I find this to be an interesting way of developing the 'universe' of the CM server, and look forward to seeing more from you.

The only criticisms I might have -and I mean no disrespect by them- is that I reckon your grammar and descriptions could use a bit of work. At some points it kind of felt like you were force-dropping names for the sake of it, y'know? I understand why, however.
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Post by lucashunter608 » 08 Sep 2016, 21:04

You should make the text more colorful, can't wait for my character to start doing bad jokes on bad situations!

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Post by Martzin » 08 Sep 2016, 22:20

Im liking this. I really like it.
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Post by Jack McIntyre » 09 Sep 2016, 00:28

Yep I was just trying to toss in a few names, I am usually better about descriptions and such, but for the starting section I didn't want to bore too many people until I got you folks input on it, so other posts will be longer. As for grammar I know, always had that problem :p.

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Post by Xurphorus » 09 Sep 2016, 00:54

My advice to you, try to make them down into chapters, this being chapter 1. I like everything done so far, cant wait to see what happens next.

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Post by Desolane900 » 09 Sep 2016, 01:09

If you're going to add Saul, he's actually more of an introvert than he comes off as. Any dialogue would just be standoffish though, espescially towards Dergens, Sanders, and Carson. Farkas and him got along well though before Bigby died off. See my own series "Tales From the UPP Front" for reference.

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Post by Renomaki » 09 Sep 2016, 13:00

I look forward to seeing how you imagine Reno Story in your story.
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Post by MikeHdez97 » 09 Sep 2016, 15:33

I like it.
Just an advice, add few colors to dialogues and subtitles.
Can't wait to new chapter and see more of my favorite veterans <3
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Post by LordLoko » 10 Sep 2016, 19:43

MikeHdez97 wrote:I like it.
Just an advice, add few colors to dialogues and subtitles.
Can't wait to new chapter and see more of my favorite veterans <3
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Post by Jack McIntyre » 18 Oct 2016, 15:46

I apologize for not being around for a while, took a break from CM for a bit, new part should be up probably later tonight had part of it done before I sort of took my break, so be ready for that. Just be ready there may be a bit of a twist for some of the characters already involved :p

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Post by LiquidRecluse » 18 Oct 2016, 23:22

Sounds fun, maybe everyone's (least) favorite blonde bastard can make it in.
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Post by Martzin » 18 Oct 2016, 23:42

Jack McIntyre wrote:I apologize for not being around for a while, took a break from CM for a bit, new part should be up probably later tonight had part of it done before I sort of took my break, so be ready for that. Just be ready there may be a bit of a twist for some of the characters already involved :p
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Post by Renomaki » 20 Oct 2016, 00:05

OH MY FUCK, you still workin on it?

PLZ TELL ME RENO IS COMING UP SOON!!
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Post by Kavlo » 20 Oct 2016, 08:11

Many people have said it already but, keep making more of this, it's a nice read.
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Post by Jack McIntyre » 23 Oct 2016, 15:41

Sorry know I said it would be up couple nights ago, but battlefield 1 sort of distracted me :p I am actually working on it more, but yes I haven't quit on it, just been busy with real life crap, but should be up soon since wanted to add a bit more about your characters then the first part so takes a bit to make sure everyone has their own moments or a bit of a focus to them as the story progresses.

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