Oprayx73' Synthetic Application

[oprayx73]

Byond ID:
Oprayx73
Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Boris Bourbon
Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name):
Abraham
Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417)?
Yes. I read over them once or twice.
Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):
Abraham is a rather new replacement to a recent decomissioned synthetic, who was abruptly pulled from service. No one knows exactly why, but rumours
are that they had attempted to choke out a marine who questioned how human they really are. These rumours leave a bad taste for Abraham to enter into.


Dr Chandra had knowingly skimped on the uploading of USCM laws on the prior unit sent to the Almayer.
Having his practice and job threatened by USCM and the W-Y, he attempts to save his reputation as an AI Designer
with Abraham. Abraham is created to appear as average as can be, to help assimilation into crews.
He is of average height, average weight. He sports short dark hair and a pair of glasses he doesn't even need.
Despite this, there is still an air of oddness and an overall sense of being different that anyone could see on first sight.
A steadfast worker, the crew aboard the Almayer will notice his effectiveness, as well as his awkward disposition at times.
Due to the recent recalling of the previous synthetic being withheld from him, Abraham is often at a loss when
he doesn't know why he is treated as less of a crewman than the others.


How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?

Abraham is an incredibly benevolent and supportive synth. He masks his inner absence of real emotion by appearing proactive with a ready-to-help
attitude. This, in effect, makes him appear attached to his work. If there is anything he could ever dislike, it's when someone brash gets in the way
of his job.( In a sense, he is proud of his own abilities) Due to this, he will usually focus on jobs he alone can do,
Mostly Piloting, and being in the FOB treating wounded marines, like a Field Medic.

How familiar are you with support roles? (ie; Medical, MT, Science, SO)

I am incredibly familiar with playing as an MT, because i used to play it all the time on the sulaco.
I know the ins and outs of triage, but i will admit i have never performed any surgery.
I don't often play above the SL in the hierarchy of command, i'm much more oriented on
roleplaying with the ol boots on the ground.

Why should we whitelist you?
I've had great fun roleplaying on CM, especially as a survivor or with predators.
I love that experience and want to bring that to others, in a quirky, robotic, synthetic kind of way.
With my take on how a synthetic should operate under this character, i can guarantee it'll
be a unique experience for the other players aswell as myself.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?

No.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?

No, i am not banned on any other server.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?

I 100% understand that, and appreciate that. No one is above the rule of law in this server.

[Stripetail]

I have seen you around several times, you're a face that stands out to me now and again.

This app is solid enough, I will +1 it.

However, this is under extreme scrutiny as you have used the forbidden text of sans.

[yung bruh]

The application is pretty cool with the interface...but you used comic sans...fuck me. I made the same mistake as you in a way and left my Synth Application bland with not much of a personality. You should work on adding a personality or unique trait to Abraham. Other than that nice application.

[oprayx73]

The application is pretty cool with the interface...but you used comic sans...fuck me. I made the same mistake as you in a way and left my Synth Application bland with not much of a personality. You should work on adding a personality or unique trait to Abraham. Other than that nice application.

His unique little quirk is kind of his disdain for people who rudely butt into his job he's doing, since he's proud of his abilities and what he can do.
He always wants to prove himself to the crew and that he is worthy of their support and respect, and he feels those chances are taken away from him
when such events occur. It'd never lead him to do anything irrational, as he is a complete emotionless synthetic devoid of bias feelings,
but he would appear to be subtly displeased.

[yung bruh]

Alright, +1 from me. Maybe make your personality more apparent, I need to do that too. Nero's Synth has a recognizable personality, I would look at his application.

[oprayx73]

I appreciate all the +1's guys. thanks so much

[Wubs4Scrubs]

So, I guess I'll just point out something that I've seen a few applications do now.

(An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer)

I point this out because I've seen multiple applications now that focus heavily, or in your case entirely, on the synth's creation and deliverly to the Almayer instead of giving a description of an actual mission he was present on. The purpose of this to my knowledge is to give a rough outline of how your synth would act during an actual round by showing your synth interacting with marines in a story. Instead, by having a story which is solely about Abraham's creation and shipment to the Almayer it doens't provide me with hypothetical marine interactions or situations that show me how Abraham would act during a round, or show off his quirk in any way. Also, all the creation + shipment stories feel pretty much the same, I like in yours however you bring up how the doctor was riding on Abraham's success.

I think that you did something really cool with the whole fallout style monitor readout, however I think you could've put it to better use. I already stated my issues with the whole creation + shipment style writings so I think that you could do something great where the monitor screen you used was like post mission diagnostic, or maybe Abraham was injured in combat and the monitor was a representation of his unconsciousness, really neat stuff like that.

It's great you have plenty of engineering experience, if I had to give you the top two things I do most as a synth during rounds currently it would be helping out medical and doing work on the engines and helping out the POs. However, as a synth you should be familiar with the ins and outs of how every Alamyer position operates so before you get on the whitelist I'd highly recommend you get experience as a SO on the overwatch consoles and get familiar with how to perform surgery (especially that second one). Knowing how to be a competent SL is less important as a synth because you'll likely never be leading a squad of marines into combat, so getting familiar with the higher chain of command is very helpful.

Something in your app which really stood out as awesome to me was just the small little detail where Abraham wore glasses for no actual purpose but rather to just fit in more with the crew, and probably give him some relatability and percieved humanity. It was a small touch but I think that example you gave is a fantastic way of showing how W-Y would try and make a robot seem more human by tweaking small details to make it seem more human-like.

I won't give a rating at the moment, however if you want I could try and pitch you some scenarios where Abraham would interact with marines to further get a feel for how his quirk would manifest given that I felt your story could've used more of it.

[oprayx73]

So, I guess I'll just point out something that I've seen a few applications do now.

I point this out because I've seen multiple applications now that focus heavily, or in your case entirely, on the synth's creation and deliverly to the Almayer instead of giving a description of an actual mission he was present on. The purpose of this to my knowledge is to give a rough outline of how your synth would act during an actual round by showing your synth interacting with marines in a story. Instead, by having a story which is solely about Abraham's creation and shipment to the Almayer it doens't provide me with hypothetical marine interactions or situations that show me how Abraham would act during a round, or show off his quirk in any way. Also, all the creation + shipment stories feel pretty much the same, I like in yours however you bring up how the doctor was riding on Abraham's success.

I think that you did something really cool with the whole fallout style monitor readout, however I think you could've put it to better use. I already stated my issues with the whole creation + shipment style writings so I think that you could do something great where the monitor screen you used was like post mission diagnostic, or maybe Abraham was injured in combat and the monitor was a representation of his unconsciousness, really neat stuff like that.

It's great you have plenty of engineering experience, if I had to give you the top two things I do most as a synth during rounds currently it would be helping out medical and doing work on the engines and helping out the POs. However, as a synth you should be familiar with the ins and outs of how every Alamyer position operates so before you get on the whitelist I'd highly recommend you get experience as a SO on the overwatch consoles and get familiar with how to perform surgery (especially that second one). Knowing how to be a competent SL is less important as a synth because you'll likely never be leading a squad of marines into combat, so getting familiar with the higher chain of command is very helpful.

Something in your app which really stood out as awesome to me was just the small little detail where Abraham wore glasses for no actual purpose but rather to just fit in more with the crew, and probably give him some relatability and percieved humanity. It was a small touch but I think that example you gave is a fantastic way of showing how W-Y would try and make a robot seem more human by tweaking small details to make it seem more human-like.

I won't give a rating at the moment, however if you want I could try and pitch you some scenarios where Abraham would interact with marines to further get a feel for how his quirk would manifest given that I felt your story could've used more of it.

Thanks for all this input! i'll adress it in order;

I do agree now seeing my post after that i should start implementing some examples of Abraham's interactions aboard the Almayer, and with the crew he'll be shoulder to shoulder with.
Also, thanks for liking the style of it, it took a little bit of work to get that together smoothly
I do want to focus on Abraham's attempts to really blend into the crew, like you mentioned, him wearing glasses he does not even need.
I also agree that getting an all-round knowledge going is incredibly important, as synthetics are quite literally massive databases of skill. That's why recently, i've been hopping on as SO or XO to get a feel
for overwatch, the chain of command, etc.

My next post will include some situations that Abraham would behave uniquely in.

[oprayx73]

Here's a good example of Abraham's benevolence, interacting with his will to perform for his human counterparts and prove himself.

[Wubs4Scrubs]

Despite the use of comic sans in his original post

I think that the player has a clear and acceptable play-style in mind and I have confidence that they'd be able to fill the synthetic role nicely. Additionally, he addressed his lack of experience as an SO and has stated he has taken effort to play as both SO and XO to gain experience with the command structure of CM. Both of these instances to me illustrate that Oprayx is willing to put effort into learning how to effectively play a synthetic.

Provided you continue to flesh out things such as not having performed many surgeries (which I'm sure he'd do) I think he'd make a great synth.

+1

[BobatNight]

I often see Boris on the server and in the discord, great attitude on and off the server. I believe he'd bring some good RP with his Synth.

+1

[shyshadow]

I'm taking into account only the application itself not the addition you supplied. Anyway, (I'm on a phone btw so I'm keeping it short.) While yes it seems to have effort, personally I don't know who you are, nor is the backstory well thought out in my opinion. It feels clustered and random. The words by your synthetic are rather too robotic, even for a synthetic. And what your synthetic is suppose to be, it doesn't work too well.

In my opinion, you tried too hard to make the backstory flashy so you fell face in the mud. Instead of stepping over it.
Neutral

[oprayx73]

I'm taking into account only the application itself not the addition you supplied. Anyway, (I'm on a phone btw so I'm keeping it short.) While yes it seems to have effort, personally I don't know who you are, nor is the backstory well thought out in my opinion. It feels clustered and random. The words by your synthetic are rather too robotic, even for a synthetic. And what your synthetic is suppose to be, it doesn't work too well.

In my opinion, you tried too hard to make the backstory flashy so you fell face in the mud. Instead of stepping over it.
Neutral

I appreciate this critical look into my application.

Abraham's character is of a sort of struggle to fit in, and to prove his worthiness to his colleagues, the crew. It ties in with his quirk of 'kindness'.
That's why he does things like always opt and favour to do things for others, even if the other person is or is not capable of it. All the while still having that subtle robotic archetype.
I'll see if we can interact in game one of these days and you can get a feel for what kind of player I am. I am vocal on the discord often aswell, i often get run ins with players there

[Mark Wilson]

I had a great round with him today, honestly just a really cool guy, knows how to RP. Overall he is fit for the role. Solid app as well

[Feweh]

Accepted