Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

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Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

Post by jason28161 » 18 Sep 2017, 05:28

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Jason28161
Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Jason 'Gunny' Fisher or Jacob 'Bismarck' Mueller
Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name):
Examples of acceptable names: James, Mason, Xavier, Felix, Otto, Allan, Jessica
Examples of unacceptable names: Obama, Jesus, King, Dragon, Godly, Snyper, Circuits

Monty
Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417)?
I have read the material, and all related materials linked to it that I could find.
Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission on-board the Almayer):

- Upon first arriving in a large Steel Shipping container, the unit came with a note from Weyland-Yutani taped to the top-
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-There is a photograph taped to the bottom of the note-
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-the unit after being unpacked also came with two video tapes in a box labelled 'The range of the prowess of the b4-a Monty'. the Tapes loaded to a console display two playback files-
//Weyland-Yutani Synthetic Model Series B4-a 'Monty' Unit-8 Video tape playback.//
//>Run Playback 'Kind Monty'?//
// y/n_ //
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//>Run Playback 'Monty Endures' ?//
// y/n_ //
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-The Monty unit locker has a power button, upon pressing it, it feeds the synthetic circulatory fluid through a tube in the container and activates the units battery, within moments Monty springs to life-
"Good day sir, names Monty, glad to be here. Where do you need me?"


How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?
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How familiar are you with support roles? (i.e.; Medical, MT, Science, SO)

I in my months of playing have become quite familiar with a good number of the supporting roles, often preferring them over the direct combat of the marines.
Medical: My favored profession among the branches. Initially learning the game to be a surgeon, the medical tree is the first I gained knowledge of and the one I have the most experience in
MT: honestly one of my least played roles, engineering doesn't specifically entice me compared to science or medicine, but if need be i can do basic work in here as best to my ability.
Science: My Second favorite position tied with Leadership, science has brought me long hours of joy, tinkering with various odds and ends and being quite drawn to making homemade explosives.
SO: Tied with Science for my second favorite role, I quite enjoy leadership and have a decent amount of experience running as an S.O. under a number of commanders including Bill Carson for a brief time, and outside of the more recent additions of content (c.a.s and such) i find i can be quite capable as a supporting officer to both the squad leaders, requisitions, and my commanding officers.
MP: In all honesty my least favored position even more so than engineering, not saying i haven't studied marine law though. While there are decent occasional RP scenarios involving the Mp's I've found them to be a hassle. Perhaps as a synth i might find a new and enjoyable angle to perform under.
Why should we whitelist you?
There are a few good reasons why I feel i should be white listed for this role.
1.Fun: I have in my many months (almost a year now i believe) of playing this game I have done a good number of jobs and tasks, and I find that the synthetic character would be a very interesting and enjoyable experience to revisit some of the prior ground i have covered as a basic human, not only whilst performing the job but interacting with the crew as a different type of character.
2.Efficiency: I have found whilst playing for the marines and aliens that often times many marines get caught in many a toxic cloud bath and left to die with no hope of survival. Being a Synth and immune to the poisons and other effects of environment (barring direct damages of course) I can see an extremely useful role as a retriever of injured marines and possibly one of the most efficient first response units in the game. Not to say over powered, but to perhaps give a few more rookie marines a chance to keep playing before they have to hope to join a response team, join the aliens, or wait for the end of the round to play again.
3.Enriching the role play: As I've mentioned in the first reason, the synthetic character would be interesting not only to play as, but to interact with people would also help incite more frequent and better opportunities to interact with characters than a word in passing whilst waiting to perform a task, and as such do a myriad of good for not only new players, but possibly even older players alike. Not just for complex views on mechanical life, but small talk to help bring out and introduce characters whom would typically be pushed into the background for not aesthetically standing out or being known for being chatty or loud.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
No bans that i am aware of.
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
I have no bans in any servers to my knowledge.
Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?
I fully understand and accept my privileges being revoked when applicable.

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Re: Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

Post by xywenx00 » 20 Sep 2017, 08:45

I have not read your story yet, only your quirk. From your quirk your character seems quite generic, though how do you associate your martyre complex quirk with envying humans and "wanting to be human"? I thought a person with martys complex or victim complex seeks out suffering and persecution. In my opinion you could've worked better with him "envying the humans" and instead of making it so he loves all humans and wants to be like them have a slight grudge against them or maybe look up to them but know he is not one of them. Wanting to be human seems quite generic for a synth in my opinion.

I saw that you put quite the effort into your story and I'm looking forward to read it once I have time. Then I'll "vote".
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Re: Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

Post by jason28161 » 21 Sep 2017, 00:23

xywenx00 wrote:
20 Sep 2017, 08:45
I have not read your story yet, only your quirk. From your quirk your character seems quite generic, though how do you associate your martyre complex quirk with envying humans and "wanting to be human"? I thought a person with martys complex or victim complex seeks out suffering and persecution. In my opinion you could've worked better with him "envying the humans" and instead of making it so he loves all humans and wants to be like them have a slight grudge against them or maybe look up to them but know he is not one of them. Wanting to be human seems quite generic for a synth in my opinion.

I saw that you put quite the effort into your story and I'm looking forward to read it once I have time. Then I'll "vote".
That's fine i suppose.. honestly i wrote this exhausted and sorta lost focus trying to get the entirety of the character together. I did take a good chunk of influence out of other characters while trying to figure out how to best convey this one. and as for the martyr complex i might have just mistyped what i meant.. If i can draw the closest comparison without turning this into a paragraph.. think the titan fall 2 mech with his protocol 3 actions, and comparing that complex of monty to save human life at all costs (barring direct orders from command) and it being analyzed as being seen both as the best for the success of the mission, and how he processes the duties of an officer or medic (depending on his role).

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Post by Feweh » 27 Sep 2017, 14:56

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Re: Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

Post by NethIafins » 28 Sep 2017, 15:52

The character looks good. While it might be generic for a story, right now for me it seems unique from the "database of synths" already present.
Until I got to the part about martyr syndrome...

Just drop it. If it will be omitted, then definite strong +1
Otherwise +0

Also, shiny text in spoiler section is hiiiiiideous... please spare my eyes
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Re: Synthetic Series B4-a 'Monty' Application by Jason28161

Post by Kiroking » 10 Oct 2017, 00:47

I haven't really looked at many synthetic apps so I am not sure how generic Monty is, but I do like your app and your explanation of Monty's quirk with the titan fall 2 protocol.

I'm going to stay undecided for now though.
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Post by Feweh » 14 Oct 2017, 21:31

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