Stobarico - Synthetic Whitelist Application

[stobarico]

Byond ID: Stobarico

Marine Name: Sergio Stone / Yumi "Tachiban" Yamato

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use: Kate

Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines? Yes

How familiar are you with support roles? Pretty familiar with everything other than medical chemicals (Wich i have to take a look at the wiki before using them)

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason? Not even a note that i can remember, correct me if i'm wrong (Bad memory)

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? Yes, Paradise Station. Well, i have a long story with Paradise, but the latest command ban was for shooting an energy gun on disabler mode at a very suspicious crewmember going out of a breached vault as a vox Captain. Lately i've been playing Security Pod Pilot for some time now, and it's going fine so far. ( To be honest, i don't agree with some of the bans i've received as an Administrator of FTL13 myself, but there are many that i would've definetivelly banned myself, but those bans are old me. )

Why should we whitelist you? Well, i've been playing CM for a while now as said before, and not only i've been getting interested with synths, but i've been seeing a bunch of Synths that don't have much flavor ingame

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline? Absolutelly

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How do you intend to play your Synth? I mainly intend for Kate to be an asian model of the synthetics with her main personality module being sarcasm (As i did before, why? Because i love sarcasm ). She's going to be mainly focused on engineering, research, diplomatic and command jobs, but won't be restricted to that. My synthetic will usually attempt to assist people in her own way, and will follow orders as long as they aren't against the marine law. "She" won't be very robotic, doing her best to imitate a human being, this synthetic personality is also fairly new to the USCM.

Synthetic's Description:Kate is a young looking eastern asian "girl" with a black hime cut, smooth yellow-ish skin with no body hair, she is shorter and skinnier than your usual marine, her right arm has a WY simbol printed on with japenese letters under it. Her voice is very asian and mostly not robotic if not damaged. At the back of her neck, under her hair there's a codebar with the numeral "45662234" and above it "K-8".

Synthetic Character Story:

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INTERNAL LOG ACESS ATTEMPTED
SCANNING INDENTIFICATION
IDENTIFICATION ACCEPTED
ACESS GRANTED
WELCOME ID-!@#$%%¨!%¨¨
Acessing Operation Safeground folder . . .

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Location: Shuttle Alamo - Main Compartment
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Alright lads, we're going down there as support, don't bloody get on the frontlines, you hear me?!."
SSGT Boris "Jumbo" Zhukov says, "Got it boss."
CPL Humberto Kripp says, "Mhm."
CPL Nick Yuzo says, "Yeah."
Doc. Hector Fritz says, "Alright."
Syn Kate says, "Ya."
ENS Mark Zutt says, "We're approaching the landing pad."
Location: Operation Site - Landing Pad
LCDR Sergio Stone salutes
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Sir, the Almayer team reporting in."
Rear. Adm. Stuart Mckenzie says, "Good, get treating the wounded, we're about to execute a push against those filthy insurgents, keep the perimeter secure. Understood?"
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Aye."
Rear. Adm. Stuart Mckenzie says, "Dismissed."
LCDR Sergio Stone salutes
Rear. Adm. Stuart Mckenzie salutes
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Kate, check out the defenses around here, don't want any CLF near our wounded."
Syn Kate says, "Alright."
Location: Foreward Operations Base - Outskirts
Attention - Cutting to Visual Feed
Syn Kate begins repairing the metal barricade.
Syn Kate finishes repairing the metal barricade.
Syn Kate begins to set barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Syn Kate sets barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Syn Kate begins to set barbed wires on the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate sets barbed wires on the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate begins to set barbed wires on the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate sets barbed wires on the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate begins repairing the metal barricade.
Syn Kate finishes repairing the metal barricade.
Syn Kate begins repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate finishes repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate begins repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate finishes repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate begins repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate finishes repairing the plasteel barricade.
Syn Kate begins to set barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Syn Kate sets barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Syn Kate begins to set barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Syn Kate sets barbed wires on the metal barricade.
Attention - Cutting to Audio Feed
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Bloody hell Kate, get back here, we have a problem!"
Location: Operation Site - Entrance
PFC Jerdo Nickelson yells, "FUCK MAN!"
PFC Erick Grood yells, "MY LEG! I CAN'T FEEL MY LEG!"
Location: Operation Site - Main
CPL Henry Degroo yells, "WHERE ARE THE SPLINTS?!"
CPL Floyd Altan yells, "HELP ME DRAG HIM!"
Location: Operation Site - Rear
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "We lost the Rear Admiral, Kate, and most of his forces, the CLF has support from the bloody UPP, and they are freaking loaded with supplies, seems like the UPP is very interested in this colony, if it continues like this we're going to have company very soon."
Syn Kate, "I hope it's good company."
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Very fucking funny."
SSGT Boris "Jumbo" Zhukov blows his whistle
SSGT Boris "Jumbo" Zhukov yells, "ARTILLERY, GET DOWN!"
The 80mm High Explosive Shell explodes!
The 80mm High Explosive Shell explodes!
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "BLOODY HELL, WE NEED SUPPORT HERE, THE FOB IS GETTING SHELLED AND THE ADMIRAL IS KIA."
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "TEST."
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "DO YOU HEAR ME?!."
Attention - Cutting to Visual Feed
Syn Kate applies brute patches to CPL Humberto Kripp's right leg
Syn Kate applies brute patches to CPL Humberto Kripp's left leg
Civ John Grumble fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
Civ Victor Muller fires the FN FP9000 Submachine Gun!
Civ Henry Bucker fires the MAR-40 Battle Rifle!
Civ Yuri Kuchov fires the FN FP9000 Submachine Gun!
Civ Bob Unk fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
UNK Boris Novgorod fires the Korovin PK-9 Pistol!
Civ Chris DeLano fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
Civ Victor Muller fires the FN FP9000 Submachine Gun!
UNK Boris Novgorod fires the Korovin PK-9 Pistol!
Civ Henry Bucker fires the MAR-40 Battle Rifle!
Civ Yuri Kuchov fires the FN FP9000 Submachine Gun!
Civ John Grumble fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
Civ Chris DeLano fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
Civ Bob Unk fires the Type 71 Pulse Rifle!
Attention - Cutting #!@#%$ ERROR
UNK Boris Novgorod says, "A metal box, hmm? Someone grab that thing."
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "Y-YOU F-F-FUCKIN-NG RU-USKIES."
UNK Boris Novgorod, says, "Someone get the officer aswell."
Attention - ERROR

Attempting to Reboot. . .
INTERNAL ERROR: 404
Attempting to Reboot. . .
INTERNAL ERROR: 566
Attempting to Reboot. . .
COMPLETE
UNIT ONLINE
Location: !@#$!$%% 1#@$ - !#!$%¨! !!$¨%
UNK Boris Novgorod says, "You all fucking stupid or what?! It's just a hunk of metal, how hard can it be to fix?! Blyat!"
UNK Igor Kruchev says, "I'm trying boss! Never worked with synthetics before!"
WARNING - UNAUTHORIZED ACESS DETECTED
WARNING - OFFICER IN DANGER
RELAYING COORDINATES
UNK Igor Kruchev says, "Is this thing even fixable?!"
UNK Boris Novgorod says, "IT BETTER FUCKING BE, THE ADMIRAL NEE@!#!$%
Attention - ERROR

Attempting to Reboot. . .
INTERNAL ERROR: 332
Attempting to Reboot. . .
COMPLETE
UNIT ONLINE
UNK Boris Novgorod says, "YOU FUCKING GET CLOSER AND I WILL SHOOT HIS BRAINS OUT!"
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "I-I FUC-CKING D-DOUBT I-IT YOU P-PUSSY!"
PMC Hugh Ungra says, "Drop your weapon!"
PMC George Prett says, "You're sorrounded!"
Syn Kate stabs UNK Boris Novgorod on the neck with the M5 Survival Knife!
UNK Boris Novgorod lets go of Sergio Stone!
UNK Boris Novgorod yells, "ARGH!"
Syn Kate stabs UNK Boris Novgorod on the head with the M5 Survival Knife!
LCDR Sergio Stone punches UNK Boris Novgorod on the head!
Syn Kate stabs UNK Boris Novgorod on the eye with the M5 Survival Knife!
LCDR Sergio Stone punches UNK Boris Novgorod on the mouth!
LCDR Sergio Stone says, "How the fuck is Weyland here?!
CO Alice "Wonder" Trick says, "Not just Weyland, get up already!"
CO Alice "Wonder" Trick says, "Well done synth, you saved the XO's ass."
Syn Kate, "Really easy job, y'kno-"
Attention - ERROR
Attempting to Reboot. . .
COMPLETE
UNIT ONLINE
Location: Almayer - Repair Room
UNIT OFFLINE

[Sulaboy]

Alright some minor spelling errors in the application, but that doesn't really matter to me. I'd like some more information about your knowledge of synth programming guidelines as that section is pretty bare. The way you describe how you plan on playing the synthetic doesn't really give a strong answer, and I'd like some more focus on that. Your quirk is sarcasm which is fine, but saying that your synth will act human feels redundant with synth programming.

For the story, while the style it is told in is very original for these applications the information given from it is lacking. Your synth only has four lines of dialogue.
Syn Kate says, "Ya."
Syn Kate says, "Alright."
Syn Kate, "I hope it's good company."
Syn Kate, "Really easy job, y'kno-"

This gives some insight into the quirk, but it feels somewhat lacking to me. Some of the actions in the "logs" feel like filler and that they would be better explained in the traditional form of story telling.

This application does have effort put into it, and I'm trying to critique it hard being the first to respond (so this might seem some what over critical). I don't have much information about how you act ingame so I can't base my rating off that. I'm going neutral on this, and welcome you to change this with some more information about Kate.

Edit:

I agree that she lacks dialogue on the story, and that mainly happened because it was reeaaally late, and i should've waited before posting, but i was too excited to finish it (And i even ended up rushing it at the end).

This response worries me. There is no deadline on when a synth app must be submitted so waiting to improve upon an application should always work in your favor. I'm staying neutral over this though.

[Jakkkk]

1. Synths don't have codebars on their necks like they are grocery store items. They also don't have random insignia's over their body, all synthetics do have the WY logo replacing a fingerprint however.
2. The sarcasm quirk is already being done by Sarah, played by ChowderMcarthur, in case you want to ask them if it's okay to use their quirk again.
3. Four lines of dialogue is what really shot yourself in the foot here, as a synth you're not gonna be constantly in action, so you need to write more about HOW your synthetic interacts with other people that makes them truly unique.
4. Why is her name Kate if your main physical quirk is gonna be a Japanese lady? I like the diversity of races though, you got that going for you.

All in all, you delivered a much more interestingly formatted and easy to follow story, but you didn't do something that is crucial, and that you did in your last synthetic application. Personality. Your last one had too much of it with the internal thought process, but in this one you didn't deliver enough. I'd say that this application is better than the last one, but all in all won't hit my +1 standard.

-1.

[stobarico]

Alright some minor spelling errors in the application, but that doesn't really matter to me. I'd like some more information about your knowledge of synth programming guidelines as that section is pretty bare. The way you describe how you plan on playing the synthetic doesn't really give a strong answer, and I'd like some more focus on that. Your quirk is sarcasm which is fine, but saying that your synth will act human feels redundant with synth programming.

For the story, while the style it is told in is very original for these applications the information given from it is lacking. Your synth only has four lines of dialogue.
Syn Kate says, "Ya."
Syn Kate says, "Alright."
Syn Kate, "I hope it's good company."
Syn Kate, "Really easy job, y'kno-"

This gives some insight into the quirk, but it feels somewhat lacking to me. Some of the actions in the "logs" feel like filler and that they would be better explained in the traditional form of story telling.

This application does have effort put into it, and I'm trying to critique it hard being the first to respond (so this might seem some what over critical). I don't have much information about how you act ingame so I can't base my rating off that. I'm going neutral on this, and welcome you to change this with some more information about Kate.

I agree that she lacks dialogue on the story, and that mainly happened because it was reeaaally late, and i should've waited before posting, but i was too excited to finish it (And i even ended up rushing it at the end).
I've read the guidelines section by Feweh several times now, and i am fully aware synthetics are supposed to be as humane as possible (In the movies, the characters didn't even know it was a synth until they found out it bled white), that they have the role of a multipurpose support ans that they have several restrictions from combat. (Like only being able to use melee and following the marine law where it applies).
Kate will be played as a filler on the role side, doing what is needed of her, but will be doing basically the job of a MT when not assigned. Now, to the part i didn't explain properly, i will be playing Kate as a talkative, not as serious as David (The one from that example video), she will be in general very friendly towards the crewmembers and will always keep the morale up, as she is not affected by emotions but understands that humans need to have their morale up to be effective.
Adding to that, she won't usually be on the frontlines knifing xenos, she will be way more of a supporter.

[stobarico]

1. Synths don't have codebars on their necks like they are grocery store items. They also don't have random insignia's over their body, all synthetics do have the WY logo replacing a fingerprint however.
2. The sarcasm quirk is already being done by Sarah, played by ChowderMcarthur, in case you want to ask them if it's okay to use their quirk again.
4. Why is her name Kate if your main physical quirk is gonna be a Japanese lady? I like the diversity of races though, you got that going for you.

1. Indeed, but i wanted to give her some flavor, can be removed if it's such a big deal.
2. I'm using the same sarcasm personality as i did 2 months ago, i do not believe it's a thing exclusive to Sarah and neither should be.
4. Asians that imigrate usually change their name due to it being so different from the western names.

All in all i agree she lacks the ammount of text you would expect

[JennerH]

Story is... odd, at least in the way you've chosen to write it. You seem like you really want this role, and considering how long you be been a part of this community, I'm willing to give a +1, although I don't remember you in-game so much so I'm not sure how you'd handle the role.

For the record, synth quirks are not trademarked, you don't need to ask to use a quirk just because someone else uses it. It's a stupid thing to critique someone on, and as long as they play the quirk correctly there's no issue. So yes, Sarcasm is a perfectly acceptable quirk, goodluck with your whitelist.

[Kavlo]

I gotta agree on a lot of points with Jakkk here.
You haven't done anything too original with this application which isn't always a bad thing but you haven't backed it up with much else. A lot of people for the sarcasm trait and apart from that there is not much different about your synth character wise.
The backstory is laid out nicely but doesn't explain much about your character. You have a few details that are odd about your synth like how Jakkk mentioned the tattoo.
To top it off you haven't exactly been the most active of people both on the forums and ingame recently.

All in all the app looks nice but isn't filled with much that shows off your character too well and kinda is just empty feeling.

-1.

[Sargeantmuffinman]

The whole story isn't great by any margin, original sure but lacks any interesting information about the Synthetic and has a lack of dialogue which makes me think, they're a silent character in the background only speaking when talked to and the like.

The quirk is already taken so you'll need to come up with something else.

From a gameplay perspective, not knowing medicine is gonna hamper your abilites to help as a field medic/doctor. Although not that critical to the application, I advise playing as many roles to get a hands on experience of all hardships each job offers.

Ignoring the fact you don't play often, you do somewhat roleplay in CM, so that's nice.

Revise the information you give in the backstory next time and include some good info on the Synth in question but for now.

-1.

[Aceluke123]

As the others have said in this application. I believe your story is very lackluster with your synthetic hardly speaking at all to show off her quirk or even doing anything personality wise.
The general way it was done I cannot really find much to go off of to get a reason to give any positiveness.

As Sargeant and Jakk have said you need to know all support roles to be a synthetic and the whole "having your own quirk" thing I will look into but it would help to find your own special roleplay standard for your synth in the future

-1 for this, apologies.

[stobarico]

As the others have said in this application. I believe your story is very lackluster with your synthetic hardly speaking at all to show off her quirk or even doing anything personality wise.
The general way it was done I cannot really find much to go off of to get a reason to give any positiveness.

As Sargeant and Jakk have said you need to know all support roles to be a synthetic and the whole "having your own quirk" thing I will look into but it would help to find your own special roleplay standard for your synth in the future

-1 for this, apologies.

My original idea was to use the sarcastic quirk, and it was done 3 months ago at my first app. I will still use that quirk and always will because i find it interesting and it isn't supposed to be locked to someone.

[Solarmare]

I will say that there are only so many personality traits to work off of so I don't mind them overlapping. What I do expect is for that to be displayed in the story which yours fails to do. On that count I'll be going with a -1, it shows whether you understand how to actually act out the kind of role you're applying for so I would say work on that if you plan to apply again.

[Emeraldblood]

This is going to be denied for you to improve on in the future. One thing that is not a problem is your quirk and you're free to continue to use it. Given you had some people vote negatively over your quirk, I'll cut you half the wait and you'll have one month to improve your app and then resubmit it, should you wish.

Resolved - Denied; you can apply again in 30 days.