Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

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Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Epic_Charger » 04 Jul 2018, 18:31

Byond ID:
Epic_Charger

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Lexis 'Boat' Saylor

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name):
Jacob

Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417)?
Of course!

Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):
► Show Spoiler
How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?
Quirk: Comedic
Medical will likely be my main role focus, as I like keeping people in the round and I tend to roll medic a lot. I will not shy away from other tasks such as OB loading, FOB construction, Req assisting, and many more, I'm experienced with most all support roles.

How familiar are you with support roles? (ie; Medical, MT, Science, SO)
I have played every support role at least once, including MP roles (Less often for those), I'm CO whitelisted, so the command structure I know well, and have handled various portions of command tasks. I've played doctor and medic many times, and know medical like the back of my hand. Having been Squad Engineer and plain MT before, I know basically all of engineering, from FOB construction, to hacking and power control.

Why should we whitelist you?
I've been with the community for quite awhile, while I admit my work and general life activities meant I couldn't stick to a moderator role, I like to think my short time as one helped prove my understanding of rules. The times I do play, I tend to prefer support roles, as I typically have more fun doing those, and have more experience with them.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
Nope.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
Not that I know of!

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?
I understand completely.
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Jakkkk » 04 Jul 2018, 19:24

Minor grammatical errors, the story is good but it is just a PHAT block of text. Also, on how you'll play your synthetic, you just have one word.

What you have going for you is a nice and explainative story, good dialogue, and I know your characters in game.

I don't think this has by +1, but I wouldn't feel like it would be an injustice to accept it.

On ways how to fix it:

You need to add more to how you explain HOW your synthetic acts. "Comedic" is a very vague and used quirk, you can use robot comedy, dry humor, dark humor, many ways on how to do it. I can tell your quirk pretty well through your story, but it is important to include it in the application.

On other ways how to format the application, look at mine for example. I bolded whenever people spoke, and I split it into two separate parts. One before the operation, one during the operation.
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Epic_Charger » 04 Jul 2018, 19:51

Ah, thank you for the input! And yeah, looking back on it I could have done that a bit better for the way I intend to play my synthetic. I unfortunately cannot change stuff to the application now. But to clarify a bit more on my intent of play style. Obedient as per law regulations. Sorta styled to try and make the best out of a bad situation. Sorta like the person that adds on, "Well, at least its not raining?" Mixed in with joking typically whenever he can if it still pairs well during work. Obviously making fun of someone who lost a whole leg is a bit much, synths are styled to have an understanding of how emotions work. Instead of a joke during the problem, perhaps after to make the best out of a bad situation, such as after a prothetic is administered, suggesting how good they'd be at soccer now.

Thank you for the tips on how to fix it, constructive criticism is appreciated!
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Sargeantmuffinman » 09 Jul 2018, 06:19

Reading it made me think everyone else in the story besides the synth was quite dull.
You did include the comedic side of your synthetic into the story.

Also to include what Jakkk said, one big block of text, wew, gotta make a cup of tea to read through all of that.

I've not see you around in game much but that could be just me.

For now this needs more feedback.
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by ThePiachu » 15 Jul 2018, 23:12

I do remember you from some rounds, and not in a bad way.

I think we have a few synths focused on humour, like Alan or Sarah, but that shouldn't be much of a problem.

So overall, I'd give a weak +1 as per the points mentioned already.
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Survivor » 22 Jul 2018, 23:32

A great player all around. Every round I see them, I know its going to be a fun one

I trust that they will be competent in any role they are assigned to as a synth, as I have seen them play most of them myself.

A +1 for me, surely. I hope to see you in the future
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Epic_Charger » 29 Jul 2018, 15:14

I'm going to take this application down to actually put more effort into a new one, and create a different character idea entirely.
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Re: Synthetic Application - Jacob (Epic_Charger)

Post by Emeraldblood » 29 Jul 2018, 15:40

At the request of the app poster, we'll be withdrawing this. You'll be able to post a new synth app in 30 days.
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