Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

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Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Valkrae » 07 Jul 2018, 02:16

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Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Shiela 'Tank' Maldin

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name):
Jameson


Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417)?:
I am, indeed.

Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):
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How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?
I'd like to play Jameson as a sort of backwoods psychiatrist. What I mean by this; He's been programmed with hundreds, if not thousands of old Southern proverbs and sayings, and uses those in situations that he feels might benefit a crew member. He'd be very protective of his crewmates, sort of like a big brother to the crew. In terms of gameplay, Jameson would likely stick towards Cargo, FOB Construction, or Medical on the off-chance he's needed there. Jameson would sort of exude the 'good ol' boy' of the Southern USA.

With speaking, there are two ways I could do this. One way, which is the way that might get declined, is to have a permanent accent on his speech. He would speak with a distinctly southern twang, and finish a good number of his sentences with a proverb, or a southern saying. However, if this is not an acceptable manner of speech, I would just restrict it to the proverbs/sayings of the South, instead of the whole accent. Most of my RP would come from my speech, and less from /me's. If possible, I'd also have Jameson 'chew' tobacco, to appear more human to his shipmates, as well as carrying around a flask that he would 'drink' from at random points in time.

How familiar are you with support roles?:
- Medical: Very familiar
- Science: Familiar
- MT: Adequate
- The Rest: Adequate

Why should we whitelist you?:
Honestly, I think I can bring something interesting with my Synth. Sure, everyone has the 'i don't know human conversational ticks' Synth. But, not a lot of people have a Synth that takes such a personal care of his shipmates mental state and wellbeing.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?:
If I have, I've not been aware of it. But, I don't think so.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?:
I think I'm banned from /tg/ for when I was a shitter, and tried to make a fire in Toxins. It got out of hand, and they understandably banned me for it. I like to think I've moved passed that type of player.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?:
Yes.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Jakkkk » 07 Jul 2018, 17:31

This is a great -1 from me.

The story is cool, I like the dialogue between characters, but if you're going all in with the southern "yee yee brudder" quirk, you need to talk to Relend on how to do it better. It also seems like your synthetic is far too human for my tastes.

It makes no sense to me that a synth would pretend to be drinking whiskey from a flask and dipping. In all honesty, this sounds like a synth Bancrose or Cruz would make for the southern dipping meme.

On how to fix it:

Get rid of the consumption part, you can argue that it is unique and tries to emulate human actions, but synthetics don't emulate human actions like that because they are specifically restricted from doing so in the game. You would just be finding a /me away around it.

I personally don't like accent quirks because they get really annoying real quick, but if you want to stick with it that's cool.

THREE POSTS IS YOUR WORST ASPECT OF THIS APPLICATION , post more please.

And finally, I don't see your character much IC, so I can't attest to you RPing well.

EDIT: After thinking about booze, I just realized your character will be named after whiskey.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Valkrae » 09 Jul 2018, 05:06

Jakkkk wrote:
07 Jul 2018, 17:31
This is a great -1 from me.

The story is cool, I like the dialogue between characters, but if you're going all in with the southern "yee yee brudder" quirk, you need to talk to Relend on how to do it better. It also seems like your synthetic is far too human for my tastes.

It makes no sense to me that a synth would pretend to be drinking whiskey from a flask and dipping. In all honesty, this sounds like a synth Bancrose or Cruz would make for the southern dipping meme.

On how to fix it:

Get rid of the consumption part, you can argue that it is unique and tries to emulate human actions, but synthetics don't emulate human actions like that because they are specifically restricted from doing so in the game. You would just be finding a /me away around it.

I personally don't like accent quirks because they get really annoying real quick, but if you want to stick with it that's cool.

THREE POSTS IS YOUR WORST ASPECT OF THIS APPLICATION , post more please.

And finally, I don't see your character much IC, so I can't attest to you RPing well.

EDIT: After thinking about booze, I just realized your character will be named after whiskey.
These are all very valid points.

I'm definitely open to removing most of the 'human' aspects, as long as I can keep the core of the character. That being, spouting proverbs that have a general relevance to the situation. Even if that's not applicable, I'm definitely open to changing the character as a whole to suit what it needs.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Sargeantmuffinman » 09 Jul 2018, 07:17

Needs more feedback from the players.
Additionally, I don't mind the accent.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Valkrae » 14 Jul 2018, 02:49

Does anyone else have any feedback?

Like I said, I'm more than happy to make changes.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Kavlo » 01 Aug 2018, 16:20

As mentioned already one of your main problems was your activity both on the forums and ingame, yet after this application being made there has barely been an increase in both.
The building blocks for being accepted is knowing at least something about you as a person and basically if you were someone at least somewhat known you'd be fine since your app is decent enough to pass but without being active I can't judge if you would be good for RP or you would break the guidelines. You don't have to be on every day playing until you need to sleep but right now you've been extremely inactive and even beforehand you weren't very active.

Get more activity under your belt.

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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Karmac » 07 Aug 2018, 06:08

The application's pretty low-quality overall, mostly considering the quirk is 'speaks with a southern accent', the lack of activity other people are commenting on also leads me to give this a -1.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by awan » 15 Aug 2018, 06:13

This in my opinion is sitting open way to long without much feedback. I plan to spend more time commenting on whitelists.
You got told to post more on the forums and are still not doing so. This to me is quite a red flag. I would hope you show some action to improve what you get as feedback on your application. -1
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Sulaboy » 19 Aug 2018, 00:18

The story was well written. There are two problems with this application in it's current state. First I've got no idea how active you are because of your low forum post count.
The second problem is mainly your synthetic's quirk. It's good that they try to be emotionally supportive. The accent and proverbs seem to cause a problem in communication, or atleast they do in your story. -1
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Solarmare » 24 Aug 2018, 23:05

A synth causing communication issues with proverbs would be an issue in a military setting, you wouldn't really get something that just kept confusing you. They could take an opposite approach with explaining what should be done or what the situation is and then give a proverb after everything is actually explained to summarize the issue when they've explained the concept, rather than starting with it and confusing people. In general you should be active in the community in general if you would like a whitelist as well, people knowing who you are makes them willing to look over your app and consider it positively. There's also the mention of being genuinely pleased where it has to be stated that synths don't feel any emotions, they just display them. You'd need to cut down on the human aspect so to speak and make the proverbs more reasonable with the other criticisms given.

I'll go with a -1 for now, various ways you can improve this app with activity in general as a note.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Sleepy Retard » 19 Sep 2018, 19:00

The accent is fine...because, well, there actually isn't one besides your choice of words. The constant barrage of 'WISDOM' you've provided in the story would be detracting more than not. A synthetic isn't there to be quick on his feet, sharp with his tongue and witty. That isn't helping anyone with anything, that's just a waste of time.

Besides that, you're inactive. Last active on the forums over two months ago.

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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by MattAtlas » 25 Sep 2018, 05:24

Gonna have to be a -1 from me. Inactivity and the quirk are the main issues -- the latter would get in the way of communication very often.
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Omicega » 25 Sep 2018, 13:38

Last logged into the forums on the 14th of July.

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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by SovietKitty » 25 Sep 2018, 16:21

-1

Synthetics can't even eat food, it's mechanically restricted. Although, with creative me's and an empty backpack..
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Re: Jameson - Valkrae's Synthetic Application

Post by Emeraldblood » 25 Sep 2018, 17:43

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