Synth App - Xavier

[Foxynick]

Byond ID:

Foxynick

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):

Paul 'Gamma' Rayet

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name):

Xavier

Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (http://www.colonial-marines.com/viewtop ... 57&t=14417)?

I read the Synth Programming and Guidelines intensely and deeply. I thought long before doing this application. I rethought all my roleplay concepts.

Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):

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In a medium-sized room with a chair in its center and tables around the chair with mechanical accoutrements, a voice echoes.

"Xavier."

The synthetic in the chair opens his eyes. And with a cold and sharp look he looks at the roboticist who was in front of him. Making the roboticist take a step back.

"Your name is Xavier." The roboticist says in a firm voice.

The synthetic looks around and looks a little further behind the roboticist. A man was there, with a commander's gait and a beige looking clothing.

"My name is Xavier, what's your name?" - Xavier says looking back at the roboticist.

"We do not have time for this, I have to start the shipment, take care of him there ..." - The man in beige clothes leaves the room with arms crossed.

"I wonder omiswhy the sion of information." - Xavier says looking down.

"You'll have enough time to meet him, aboard the USS Almayer, Xavier." - The roboticist approaches, kneeling and leaning in the chair, thus, looking at Xavier and smiling.

Xavier looks back at him. Then the roboticist gets up and walks to the exit door of the room, saying.

"Come Xavier, you have to get on board."

Xavier follows the scientist through corridors until he leaves for a large hangar, with a large ominous nave, from the roof of the hangar one can see the land and moon far away, the ship had large white letters writing on the side "U.S.S ALMAYER". Xavier looks curiously to the side, seeing a large line of men laughing and making jokes, some serious, however, all preparing to enter the ship.

"You've been scheduled to work with these Marines on the USS Almayer, so it's going to be a long mission for years to come.

Xavier stares at the USS Almayer.

"I'll do my thing, I'm curious about my new experiences."

Xavier smiles and looks at the scientist.
An announcement echoes through Hangar:

"All the riders for the USS Almayer crew are to hurry to the boarding line. The launch sequence will begin in approximately 1 hour and 15 minutes."

How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)?

Questioner, Sociable, Curious, Calm and Unpredictable.

How familiar are you with support roles? (ie; Medical, MT, Science, SO)

I'm well acquainted with the roles of medical, sci, and Command Roles.

Why should we whitelist you?

I would like to further expand my playable role grid, as well as being another Synth to help the Marines. I've been playing CM weekly for almost 2 years and I believe that being approved as Synthetic would be a trigger for improving my gameplay.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?

Nope

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?

Nope

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?

Yes, I understand, after all, being a synth requires a great ability of interpretation, what's more, a synthetic must carry the responsibility of following all guidelines and rules so that we have more realistic synthetics and a quality RP without anti-rp .

[ThesoldierLLJK]

What time zone do you play?

[Sleepy Retard]

Are you a native English speaker? This story has some oddities such as:

"I wonder omiswhy the sion of information." - Xavier says looking down.

Really, the entire app...is very weirdly worded.

[MattAtlas]

There are a lot of... odd things here. For example, the grammar in your app is really weird but grammatically alright... yet your flavour text is this: "Paul Rayet have one Athletic body, with green chamative eyes and one Great Green Hair, Have 1,80 meters and is so Carismatic. One little bit ancious on battles."


And you said this as a Queen in dsay, after you spoke brazilian in hivemind: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/ ... nknown.png

Can you explain these and how you wrote this app?

[Foxynick]

Well, I am Brazilian, I'm sorry for the grammar errors in my app. I do not write English very well so, I used google translator in the hope that help me at least a little while writing a readable application, but, i fail hahaha.
But, i guess, if I had not used the google translator, the app would have got worse, and, worse... Well. This is it...

[ThesoldierLLJK]

Well, I am Brazilian, I'm sorry for the grammar errors in my app. I do not write English very well so, I used google translator in the hope that help me at least a little while writing a readable application, but, i fail hahaha.
But, i guess, if I had not used the google translator, the app would have got worse, and, worse... Well. This is it...

Synth is a very high RP role, and honestly if you struggle with English, how can we expect you on the fly to properly roleplay as synth.

[Sleepy Retard]

-1, can't speak english without google translate

[Pedroca2lucas]

Mate, I'm brazilian as well, you did say something bad as queen, but as Sleepy said, you need to speak english properly to play this role and mostly because of that agressive behavior in dchat, that's a -1 for me. Also, I don't even know who you are.

[Foxynick]

Sure, i understand.
To Mallik: Everything i said in portuguese, i said to be funny, just to show i'm not american (I know, it was not so fun).
To everyone: I really did this app just for a test, i know in many ways i would not be propritious to be a synth. and i understand your voting. I have some fails, some things to improve in myself, and, above all, i need mature so much, in many aspects.
Thanks the critics. I'll wait now the veredict.

[Awesomesauce935]

I concur with concerns that have already been voiced, Synthetics need to be on the top of their game with regards to grammar and sentence structure, and if you're not a confident English speaker (or typer) i can't recommend you for the role.

Additionally, your story showed very little of the character or capabilities of your synth. You need to speak more about the actions of the synth aboard the ship, so we can understand their character, and thus how they will be played. Include more personal interactions and perhaps loosely reference things that a synth may be seen doing in-game in the next story.

Plus i've seen a lot of applications being chucked - including one of my own - for insufficient immersion in the community (usually discord and forum presence). I'd recommend engaging with other players more as well.

-1

[MattAtlas]

-1, can't speak english without google translate

-1

[Solarmare]

You'll need a good grasp of english to actually be functional as a synthetic.

[ThesoldierLLJK]

Sorry but your level of English requiring google translate means you unfortunately won’t be able to properly roleplay. And as this is a primarily based English speaking server gonna have to -1 this

[Jakkkk]

-1.

Your English is going to get better over time friend, other than that everything was pretty good. For now, focus on getting stronger in English and playing more support roles. I look forward to your next application.

[Avalanchee]

Quirk: Being Gabopwn

-1 sorry chief

[Frans_Feiffer]

Quirk: Being Gabopwn

-1 sorry chief

Stole my rl name, didn’t do it justice. I could repeat what others have said, but I find the points have been made. That’ll be a -1 from me as well chief. Just because this fails though, don’t give up. Try again when your 2 months is over, practice your english, and come up with an overall decent story that shows your Synths quirk and how he reacts to the world around him. We have a whitelist-help channel on discord, so we’re here if you need the help. But by taking the time to google translate your story to English, you’ve shown me at least some effort, so you’re on the right track.

Until then though, -1.

[Emeraldblood]

Ultimately, this is a High Role Player required role and a Synth is expected to speak and understand English well. This doesn't mean you're unable to roleplay, but these are requirements to playing a role like this.

Resolved - Denied