Kjuhte Luar-ke (Void Moon)

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Ghostdex
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Re: Kjuhte Luar-ke (Void Moon)

Post by Ghostdex » 17 Sep 2017, 14:23

Sarah_U. wrote:
15 Sep 2017, 16:38
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I do admit It's possible I could have taken a bit longer on going over what I wrote but I took my time going over any spelling errors and a few other things, obviously not enough time as pointed out.

I have watched the AVP movies, read the AVP wiki a bit, and watched the Predator movies, so, i have general knowledge and as you pointed out, should expand my knowledge some, so that is something I probably do.

Thank you for the feedback.
Nubs wrote:
17 Sep 2017, 11:31
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The playstyle is something that was slightly skipped over when i went through, read and edited my application. I believe it was just the generic style and then I went "oh this will be great to add" or something, then well, it became a stand alone thing, if I was able to edit my app at this point, It would add to the style, not be its own. However I do understand your issue with it, hopefully this clears it up.

Thank you for the feedback.
John 'Fixer' Donable
Kara Walsh
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Part of the Yautja Council with SpartanBobby, Imperator_Titan, Sailor Dave and Symbiosis. Feel free to PM any of us with questions about Predator
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The story of Operative Delta: https://imgur.com/Go3VIhs https://imgur.com/4K8AqdA

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Re: Kjuhte Luar-ke (Void Moon)

Post by GoliathTheDespoiler » 24 Sep 2017, 09:15

No dount that Fixer is a good RPer and follows the rules very well. I can't recall any scenario he's been in the past 6 months I've known him where he's done something bad.

The story you've written seems to have taken inspiration from AvP. At least, I could draw alot of similarities between that and this. Personally, I don't believe it would matter, because it's still written very well. I would've preferred a bit more personality and maybe some clan backstory, but I'm still happy with how this was made.

The combat style is intentionally vague I think. I'd like for it to be a bit more fleshed out that 'oh I play ISpy until a robust opponent appears'. If you're worried that your playstyle defined in your app is going to be locked in as the only thing you can ever play, its not.

I'd love to have you on the pred team, Ghost. And I think you'll be a fine addition. +1
Commander Joseph 'Goliath' Clancy, occaisonal Charlie SL. Widowed father of three. Sufferer of PTSD and extremely Australian.
Corpswoman Judith 'Mèrci' Clancy, quiet, caring daughter looking out for her siblings.
Warrant Officer Emile Clancy, Strict ex-police chief, now a tired CMP.
Xenomorph Queen 'Pandinus' ruler of the Alpha Hive. "I want more children!"
'R'ka Us'Tribi' Serpent Trapper, hateful predator.

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Re: Kjuhte Luar-ke (Void Moon)

Post by Feweh » 27 Sep 2017, 14:59

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