Your backstory seemed rather simple, and poor I really would have enjoyed to see the edited version. Can't say I've RPed with you too recently so I don't have much to say. So just judging by the state of your app while I think it show potential in some areas I couldn't give you a +1. I do hope you make another one, hopefully a bit more well thought out.
I'll go neutral.
Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
Since no-one is providing feed-back that is a pred/CO/synth, especially since it has been 4 days and feweh himself has asked for more feedback, I feel as if I should say something, though I hope I don't get a warning for this.
I have noticed this guy in game (not just because of the name), but I notice that he RP's well, even in situations that would otherwise not be RP'ed, like a mutiny and/or a combat situation.
Because I am not a CO, Synth, or even a Pred I cannot +1 this application, but because of MY experience with you, if I WAS one of those, I would definitely give you a +1, though this does not really count since I am not one of those.
I have noticed this guy in game (not just because of the name), but I notice that he RP's well, even in situations that would otherwise not be RP'ed, like a mutiny and/or a combat situation.
Because I am not a CO, Synth, or even a Pred I cannot +1 this application, but because of MY experience with you, if I WAS one of those, I would definitely give you a +1, though this does not really count since I am not one of those.
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
Bruh it literally says anyone can give their opinion and vote... Read deh darn red box up above.mizolo wrote: ↑16 Oct 2017, 12:55Since no-one is providing feed-back that is a pred/CO/synth, especially since it has been 4 days and feweh himself has asked for more feedback, I feel as if I should say something, though I hope I don't get a warning for this.
I have noticed this guy in game (not just because of the name), but I notice that he RP's well, even in situations that would otherwise not be RP'ed, like a mutiny and/or a combat situation.
Because I am not a CO, Synth, or even a Pred I cannot +1 this application, but because of MY experience with you, if I WAS one of those, I would definitely give you a +1, though this does not really count since I am not one of those.
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
I've been warned by the board for +1'ing apps
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
If Feweh will let me to, I can put a fixed version, by the way.
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
So, taking it from the top.
I’ll start with your story. It seems fairly… Below average, to be quite honest. The story, to me, has always been a way to try and sell your predator to the audience- the reviewers. And while it’s not necessary a make-or-break situation, I’m afraid I just honestly don’t feel that this one is up to par, particularly when compared to other accepted applicants in the past. It’s dissonant. I can see the type of story that you’re trying to go for, but it just isn’t pulled off very well I’m afraid.
Your intended playstyle has some noble intent, of course, but it is also fairly barebones as well. You say that you’ll only hunt challenging prey, rather than those that are heavily wounded for example. This is not only a given, but it’s also fairly well mandatory to begin with. And despite your desire to play as an interesting predator, your application doesn’t really do anything to make your character stand out as, well, interesting.
You’ve mentioned the alternate versions of this app a few times, but as it stands I haven’t seen them, nor are they what’s being reviewed at the moment. Perhaps they’re better, perhaps they’re flawless, but I’m afraid in the here and now I can’t give this app my vote. -1.
I’ll start with your story. It seems fairly… Below average, to be quite honest. The story, to me, has always been a way to try and sell your predator to the audience- the reviewers. And while it’s not necessary a make-or-break situation, I’m afraid I just honestly don’t feel that this one is up to par, particularly when compared to other accepted applicants in the past. It’s dissonant. I can see the type of story that you’re trying to go for, but it just isn’t pulled off very well I’m afraid.
Your intended playstyle has some noble intent, of course, but it is also fairly barebones as well. You say that you’ll only hunt challenging prey, rather than those that are heavily wounded for example. This is not only a given, but it’s also fairly well mandatory to begin with. And despite your desire to play as an interesting predator, your application doesn’t really do anything to make your character stand out as, well, interesting.
You’ve mentioned the alternate versions of this app a few times, but as it stands I haven’t seen them, nor are they what’s being reviewed at the moment. Perhaps they’re better, perhaps they’re flawless, but I’m afraid in the here and now I can’t give this app my vote. -1.
The story of Edgardo and A Guy Named Squid. Good read. Greentext ahoy. - https://1d4chan.org/wiki/The_Ballad_of_Edgardo
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
Doktor is an honest player. While the app isn't the best out there, I feel he put effort behind it. That, and English isn't his first language, so I can cut him some slack (like he did when I failed my attempt at Russian). While I'd still say I want to be more neutral, I don't have any doubts about Doktor being a predator and he's done a lot of help during off-peak hours for modding so I feel like I can give him a +1 for his application. Best of luck to ya Dok.
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Re: Guan H'dlak (Doktor710)
Denied.
Application just isnt good.
Application just isnt good.