Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

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Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Rspikes10 » 08 Mar 2017, 02:00

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Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Mari Thyme and I also play as Crusher and Hunter

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):
A sight of thermal vision switches on
Scorpion is swinging from tree to tree, branch from branch, he stops when he spots a big black creature.
Scorpion stops and takes a quick look at the creature noticing that it is ramming into a wall constantly from greater distances each time. Scorpion leaps out in front of the creature then turns off his cloak, the creature charges at him. He turns on his cloak and jumps out of the creatures way, it hits the wall and sits there for ten seconds although he is still cloaked the creature still looks directly at him. He does this again but this time is closer to the wall and does not cloak. the creature stays for ten seconds again. He does this again but instead of jumping out of the way to the side this time, he chooses to jump on top of the wall with his cloak off. The creature hits the wall and a quiet sound appears blades coming off of Scorpions wrists. As the creature regains stability, Scorpion jumps onto the creatures back blades first avoiding the head, he wouldn't want to ruin the trophy now would he. The creature roars, four little red creatures run out from the bushes, Scorpion hisses at them and shoots his Plasmacaster on the ground in front of the creatures. The creatures run into the bushes as Scorpion jumps off the Creatures back, then slides under it slicing the creatures stomach, its roars then stomps aggressively, pushing Scorpion to the ground. The creature's leg goes above Scorpion's face, Scorpion rolls to the left as the creature stomps, he then runs onto the creatures huge bony and strong wall like head and goes behind the head, Scorpion digs his blades into the creature's back, then the creature lifts its upper body into the air causing Scorpion to slide down, his blades cutting straight down its back ending the creature's life. Scorpion cuts around the creature's head, putting it on his back he leaps back into the trees and cloaks fading into the shadows of the night, to bring the head back to his clan's elders as a shield. A hissing is heard in the distance along with slicing, Scorpion's sarcophagus opens. Scorpion walks out of his sarcophagus to find one of the creatures much bigger than the one he first fought, tearing his mother and clan elders apart besides one. Scorpion hurried out to find his father fighting off two of the creatures, Scorpion wanted to help but he did not what to break the code, his father finished off the creatures and Scorpion made sure the huge creature met the same fate as the first creature. Scorpion now wanders the planet returning to his father, with different trophies, sometimes coming back to see that he too is collecting trophies.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)? At round start my character will always scout the area and try to scout as much as he can, he will also only attack elite and ancient T2 and T3 Xeno wise, and will only go for marines who are strong, have a visible weapon and have been visibly honored by other marines. If someone like a marine is winning against Scorpion he will most definitely show a positive expression in some sort of way whether it be giving him a trophy or sparing his or her life in the future depending on the enjoyment of the battle and how honorable it was. He will start a battle carefully making sure his prey is strong and worthy, he will stalk his prey for ranging from ten minutes to possibly even days to study how they look, move, think, and most importantly fight. how Scorpion's prey fights is how Scorpion will fight his prey, most of the time he will cloak and uncloak to tire out his prey then he will strike with medium to full force. When Scorpion's prey is on the ground and is visibly in pain unable to do anything about it after a duel with him, he will give them a quick silent death so he does not have to feel anymore pain, but Scorpion will only do this if his target is not able to call for help nor help himself. Scorpion will deal with xenos in a whole different way, he starts by finding the Hive and then waiting for when they are outside and not too close to the hive, Scorpion will then deal with the xeno how he feels is most honorable.

Why should we whitelist you? I think i should be whitelisted because not much RP takes place with most people that play as Predator when i first encountered a Predator all i saw was a strange creature coming out of thin air that then tries to kill the Spec. I want to change that to where it isnt just a encounter i want to make it more of a RP experience and not just a xeno that is told to slash.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? No I have not.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? I only remember being banned on one server when i was really new to SS13 and didnt know good RP

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes i do and that is why i will carefully choose my pray while following the Code and rules.
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Re: Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Boltersam » 08 Mar 2017, 02:20

This is your first post, the story reads rather horribly, you assume cloaking works on Xenos, your play style is bland, and the reason to whitelist you exemplifies why you won't be white listed.

Few people are whitelisted to be Predator because it's an incredibly powerful role that can tip the balance of a game. You've done nothing to prove you'll use the role responsibly.

Edit: Still your first post, the story reads worse, if possible, Clan ELDERS are easily defeated by a Crusher, while your characters father takes two on at once, and your reason to whitelist is completely unconnected with the story. You've displayed no ability to RP at all.
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Re: Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Rspikes10 » 08 Mar 2017, 02:29

thanks for your response i will try and correct it

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Re: Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Casany » 08 Mar 2017, 07:37

-1 for all the reasons bolter stated. This bring your first post well, it doesn't do good to help you. You have to be known in the community before you apply for pred, because if you're not you're gonna be denied fairly quickly

Also, from what I can tell English is not your first language. Communication is very important, and if you lack a good grasp of the main language used here then you'll have a bad time no matter the role you're playing
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Re: Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Rspikes10 » 08 Mar 2017, 16:05

Boltersam wrote:This is your first post, the story reads rather horribly, you assume cloaking works on Xenos, your play style is bland, and the reason to whitelist you exemplifies why you won't be white listed.

Few people are whitelisted to be Predator because it's an incredibly powerful role that can tip the balance of a game. You've done nothing to prove you'll use the role responsibly.

Edit: Still your first post, the story reads worse, if possible, Clan ELDERS are easily defeated by a Crusher, while your characters father takes two on at once, and your reason to whitelist is completely unconnected with the story. You've displayed no ability to RP at all.
the two little ones were not crushers they were runners I think I also forgot to put little red creatures instead of creatures sorry

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Re: Lar'ja Tarei'hsan (Dark Scorpion)

Post by Feweh » 08 Mar 2017, 16:21

Denied.

Joined solely for Predator whitelisting.

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