Nraacha-dte N'jauka (No End) Pred app.

[TheMusician321]

Byond ID:TheMusician321

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here):Ed 'Wafflecone' Martin

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): M-di B-pide (No End)

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes I have read the code of honor.

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):

(FEWEH EDIT: Former name was M-di B-pide)

M-di B-pide, a young unblooded hunter began his story, not as the M-di B-pide as you know him, but as S'yuithe B-pide,Pathetic End, a nickname bestowed upon him by his fellow unblooded, prejudiced by his peers as being the weakest amongst his clan, he is ridiculed, taunted and beaten by the stronger unblooded, his days are filled with misery and pain, not in the usual way as their training puts them through, but in the way of being rejected, whenever his group of unblooded are put through a physical training session involving teams, he is always picked last, Weak, they call him, Pathetic, they say, his elders often joke about simply throwing him out of the airlock as clearly, with a body so physically weak and frail, that barely manages to outclass the average ooman, how can they expect him to hunt and bring honor to his clan?

Even with all this ridicule, he tries. Year by year, month by month, day by day, he never gives up, he ignores the taunting clicks and clatter of his brethren, if he can even call them that, would they even accept him? No, he thinks to himself, but he doesn't need their acceptance, he accepts himself, he is who he is and there is nothing that can change that, he may not have arms that break d'lex, he may not have the agility to avoid the r'ka effortlessly, but however, he has one thing that his peers do not.

Determination.

Even when his peers collapse from exhaustion or lack of motivation, even if his wounds are grevious and mortal, who stands up? He does, M-di B-pide does not know surrender, he does not know defeat, come hell or high water, when his peers look upon a task, shake their heads and say "I cannot do that", he will stand up to the challenge and he will not fail, he does not know failure, for him, failing is only finding out one way to not succeed at his task, he will look at that task, and he will conquer it, one way or another, At jedhin he excels, when most would crumble and fall from their wounds, from the cracking of their bones, from the aching of their muscles, he stands victorious, covered in bruises and welts, a finger or two broken, he does not know defeat, he does not know surrender, in his eyes burns the fury, the rage and anger from being ridiculed, in that, he takes solace.

He turns that anger and fury into a raging storm of determination, slashing and jabbing with his ki'cti-pa, a fury of blows that overwhelm the strong, exhaust the agile, and break the unbreakable.

He is not S'yuithe B-pide, he roars as his challenger falls to the floor in defeat, his life ebbing away and draining onto the masonry below, he is M-di B-pide, for as there was no end to his torment, there will be no end to the torment he will inflict upon his foes, to build his trophy pile bigger to show his peers that he does not need strength to slay his R'ka, he does not need agility to decimate his foes, he strives to be better every day, even as his muscles ache and his bones crack, even as his skin is covered in burns from acid, he will never lie down, he will fight, or he will make sure those he fights dies with him.



How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?
I intend to play my predator more rply, as I really REALLY enjoy RPing with predators as it's a break from the monotonous days of shooting at whatever moves in the darkness, as for combat, since my predator isn't incredibly strong I would avoid direct combat and instead try to lure out the worthy prey by taunting and getting them cocky, have them chase me into the dark when they suddenly realize that they are alone, with a strange alien monster roaring at them from the darkness, I would try to RP my kills as best I can, as I've said before, I really enjoy pred RPing and I would love to be on the other end, I suppose I would go more of a stealthy killer, instead of charging swarms of xenos or swarms of marines I would lure them out, taunt and terrify them as best I can, try to have an honorable duel and simply have fun.

Why should we whitelist you?

I feel like that I'm a known player, at least during low pop and even though I have rather strong opinions on certain things, I try my best to be respectful and just to ensure that everyone around me has a fun time, in that way, I want to spice the round up, get my prey to have fun instead of instantly getting meme'd by a pred, I would like to have moments of RP instead of moments of tense and furious clicking, I want to spice the round up instead of murderboning hordes of young runners and baldie marines, I simply want to have fun and ensure the people around me have fun too, as one person having fun may be great, but it's always better to have two, I'm aware of my rather dubious collection of notes as CM was my very first server on SS13 and at the time I was still pretty new to the whole shebang.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
I don't believe I've been banned from CM in the last month, I might be wrong though.
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
At the moment, I am not banned from any other servers.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?

Yes I understand anyone can have their whitelist removed as I was there when the fiasco with one of the elder preds occured.

[Imperator_Titan]

his elders often joke about simply throwing him out of the airlock as clearly,

Before I even begin, I really cannot resist the urge.
https://youtu.be/TGG3A2jmaTY?t=72

[TheMusician321]

Before I even begin, I really cannot resist the urge.
https://youtu.be/TGG3A2jmaTY?t=72

that's actually where I got it from, javik is bestik.

[Boltersam]

The story isn't all that good. Before I get down to the root of how it's not even plausible that your Predator survived to become blooded, I'll highlight your overuse of Predator language, the story didn't tell us much other than your Predator is weak and doesn't like failure. He was a runt. That's it. The story certainly isn't winning any prizes, despite your boasted skill at writing.

Your Predator would not have survived to become Blooded because if he's "Barely managing to outclass the average Ooman", the Serpent hunt required to become Blooded would have killed him. Hell, his clan might've killed him, disowned him, or any manner of things because of how shameful someone only being about to barely outclass an AVERAGE human. He'd have difficulty even walking around in his armour, holding his weapons, carrying trophies, or jumping around as most Predators do. He would not have been able to hunt and would have died or been forced into a more civic role. His clan would have kept him from the sight of others, locked up and out of the way so their shame would never be known.

Your "How you want to play your predator", started off good. You'd avoid direct combat. But then you fell into a trap many others do. You said you'd just try to scare people after successfully drawing them out, and duel them. I don't think I need to say anything further on this section.

You may be a known player, but your app is in no way up to the standard required.

[TheMusician321]

The story isn't all that good. Before I get down to the root of how it's not even plausible that your Predator survived to become blooded, I'll highlight your overuse of Predator language, the story didn't tell us much other than your Predator is weak and doesn't like failure. He was a runt. That's it. The story certainly isn't winning any prizes, despite your boasted skill at writing.

Your Predator would not have survived to become Blooded because if he's "Barely managing to outclass the average Ooman", the Serpent hunt required to become Blooded would have killed him. Hell, his clan might've killed him, disowned him, or any manner of things because of how shameful someone only being about to barely outclass an AVERAGE human. He'd have difficulty even walking around in his armour, holding his weapons, carrying trophies, or jumping around as most Predators do. He would not have been able to hunt and would have died or been forced into a more civic role. His clan would have kept him from the sight of others, locked up and out of the way so their shame would never be known.

Your "How you want to play your predator", started off good. You'd avoid direct combat. But then you fell into a trap many others do. You said you'd just try to scare people after successfully drawing them out, and duel them. I don't think I need to say anything further on this section.

You may be a known player, but your app is in no way up to the standard required.

I meant in that, through his determination he had overcame his initial challenges and became stronger, eventually hitting more of the middle of strength and agility, rather than hitting the top and breaking through, as for the how to play thing, I just placed down what I thought i'd do, as for the boasting, it was mostly a joke as the last gold I got in writing was a few years ago, by now I've pretty much lost touch.

[Kerek]

I've seen you a few times in game, but I've never had a decent interaction with you from what I remember.

You backstory was sub par and a sort of reuse of material that other predators have already done. "Subpar predator that was dislikes by his clan made a redemption." Sort of thing I feel like I've read a lot.

Your playstyle was summed up by Bolter.

Heavily leaning -1, sorry.

[Feweh]

Your Predator name is fucking awful and I will allow you to change it.

[TheMusician321]

How does Nraacha-dte N'jauka sound? I admit i've never been really good with names, or writing in general, I just happened to have better grammar and english than my peers.

[Feweh]

How does Nraacha-dte N'jauka sound? I admit i've never been really good with names, or writing in general, I just happened to have better grammar and english than my peers.

Done

[Feweh]

Further feedback is required on this application.

[Kavlo]

Neutral leaning towards +1

I like Musician in OOC and IC the only thing letting this app down is the backstory and play-style which to be honest I never really saw as a big problem when it comes to being a predator, since the backstory is really just for behind the scenes and sometimes RP and the thing about the play-style is there is so many predators white-listed at this point it is not easy to come up with an original play-style but I still have to go with neutral due to the fact that the background is still a big part of the predator white-list and if you revisited the white-list later on with a better background you'd probably get accepted.

[TheMusician321]

Neutral leaning towards +1

I like Musician in OOC and IC the only thing letting this app down is the backstory and play-style which to be honest I never really saw as a big problem when it comes to being a predator, since the backstory is really just for behind the scenes and sometimes RP and the thing about the play-style is there is so many predators white-listed at this point it is not easy to come up with an original play-style but I still have to go with neutral due to the fact that the background is still a big part of the predator white-list and if you revisited the white-list later on with a better background you'd probably get accepted.

Thanks, I'm working on a better background and a more original playstyle for next time.

[Feweh]

This is denied, you arent ready for Predator yet.