gahn'tha-cte halkrath (ruthless shadow)

[Mark Wilson]

Byond ID: Tactical 445

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Mark Wilson

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use.  This must match your in-game predator name): gahn'tha-cte halkrath

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes...yes I am

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predator's background):

gahn'tha-cte halkrath was always into a good fight. As a child, he would watch the older un-blooded train and fantasize about hunting a serpent for the first time. It wasn't long before he was training as an unblooded himself, he was nothing special, but he put up some good fights here and there. gahn'tha-cte halkrath was nervous of failure during his first hunt against the hard meat. Fear did not stop him from collecting his first xenomorph skull though. It took a lot to finally take the beast down, but his hard work paid off and he was finally marked as blooded.  Most of his fellow un-blooded were successful in their hunts as well, but he found his own pride in his hunt. It was special to him.

After gaining the title “blooded” he participated in many hunts in his clan and was soon recognized as a skilled warrior among his people .  gahn'tha-cte halkrath was nothing compared to the skilled elites and clan leaders though, they had collected the skulls of queen serpents and had even cleared out entire hives of hard meat. He respected his elite clan members, but as anyone would he hoped to one day be successful in such challenging hunts.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator.  This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)? My predator will focus on stealth, using his cloaking ability to stalk and hunt worthy prey, he will attempt to strike them when they are alone or in a good position, if possible he will try and isolate or cut them off. This pred will hunt hard and soft meat, but it is more honorable to hunt the more powerful of the two. He finds joy in a challenge so he tries to find prey capable of wounding or even killing him.

Why should we whitelist you?

I don’t want to be a predator to slaughter a ton of people for fun. I want to spice up the games and make rounds for xenomorphs and marines more enjoyable. Plus I have a good amount of experience in every other role. I have spent entire rounds observing predators to get a good idea of how they work. I'm pretty familiar with the Yautja lore (including how they become clan leaders, elites, and law enforcers.) Overall, I believe I can be a good addition to some quality RP predator rounds.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? Not in the last month, no.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? I got IP banned on Yogstation for opening up a plasma tank in the med bay by mistake and it caught fire killing multiple people.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes, no one is exempt from this.

[northcote4]

First thing I'll comment on is your capitalisation. I find it strange that basically the only thing you don't mark properly is your predator's name, Gahn'tha-cte Halkrath. Feels like a spellchecker played a heavy part. Not that I have a problem with that, just a nit-picky observation.

Now, onto the app itself:

This isn't your very first post on the forums, which is always a plus. You've been reasonably active around the community for the time you've been a part of it, and that spells good things for me. I will admit I've never seen you in-game myself, but I'm not the most active of players.

The story itself is simple, basic. Like, incredibly so. I'll give you props for not going down the 'Only survivor of his hunt, elite-level warrior while unblooded' path, but I do find it to be rather lacklustre all over. Based on the background I get basically no information whatsoever about your predator, just that he's average in all respects. There's nothing wrong with a bit of flair in your storytelling. The same can be said of your playstyle: it's fairly identical to just about every other applicant. Though I guess in truth there's not a whole lot of room for deviation at times.


I want to see the best in every application, but I can't give this any more than a neutral vote. It takes an outstanding application to be whitelisted and this just screams average in all regards.

[Feweh]

Why is everyone a Halkrath

[northcote4]

Why is everyone a Halkrath

Because shadows are edgy.

There is currently only one accepted Halkrath however.

[shyshadow]

I'd like to add onto north's criticism, because he covered that it's very average and yes I agree with that very, very much. There's little to no genuine creativity when it came this actual application. It's as dry as beef jerky, there's very little actual development for your predator.
He isn't special in any respect he's cut, and paste he has no other reason to hunt other then for the typical honor or whatever. It's bland, I'm sorry but I feel if you want to play standard you have to show you are capable of the role through the backstory. The backstory has to be strong and exceptionally good however your application doesn't reach any of those expectations.

Another thing I'd like to add is your lack of predator lore, while you say you know a bit. Very little knowledge is presented within the application itself, I'm nit picking here but you referred to your predator as a Child? Your job as a applicant is to try and show off as much as you know, yet you refer to them as a Child? Even though it's pretty common to refer to them as a pup, that shouldn't be really difficult to know but whatever.
You also call a serpent a xenomorph instead of a serpent. Which strikes me as quite odd, but I digress. You clearly want this role, but you don't want it enough to put MAXIMUM effort.
I'm sure you can make this role, but not right now. -1.

[Mark Wilson]

All of your feed back is reasonable. I'm glad you could put some time into a reply.

[Mark Wilson]

I'd like to add onto north's criticism, because he covered that it's very average and yes I agree with that very, very much. There's little to no genuine creativity when it came this actual application. It's as dry as beef jerky, there's very little actual development for your predator.
He isn't special in any respect he's cut, and paste he has no other reason to hunt other then for the typical honor or whatever. It's bland, I'm sorry but I feel if you want to play standard you have to show you are capable of the role through the backstory. The backstory has to be strong and exceptionally good however your application doesn't reach any of those expectations.

Another thing I'd like to add is your lack of predator lore, while you say you know a bit. Very little knowledge is presented within the application itself, I'm nit picking here but you referred to your predator as a Child? Your job as a applicant is to try and show off as much as you know, yet you refer to them as a Child? Even though it's pretty common to refer to them as a pup, that shouldn't be really difficult to know but whatever.
You also call a serpent a xenomorph instead of a serpent. Which strikes me as quite odd, but I digress. You clearly want this role, but you don't want it enough to put MAXIMUM effort.
I'm sure you can make this role, but not right now. -1.

Well when you say "he isn't special" I was not going for the most powerful elite and awesome pred, he is just a normal
Predator with a normal life. He hunts because he enjoys his fights, but of course he hunts for honor as well

[Shyguychizzy]

Yeah......Halkrath currently in a short sorta is of my clan which is the only Halkrath clan. ( viewtopic.php?f=125&t=7878 ), for time being I'll be neutral and fully look at this app as a whole at an another time. I won't be that sort which is like -1 because its meh clan name though a very good tip for you or anyone looking or preparing an app is to look at those approved prior making their character just as a caution in the event they wind up accidentally taking another clan without knowing.

[Feweh]

More feedback required

[Feweh]

Denied