Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

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Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 07 Nov 2017, 01:44

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Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Yuri 'Cherno' Balkova

Name/Designation of the Synth Character you’re requesting to use (Follows common naming rules, and requires a first name with no last name): Hugo.
Examples of acceptable names: James, Mason, Xavier, Felix, Otto, Allan, Jessica
Examples of unacceptable names: Obama, Jesus, King, Dragon, Godly, Snyper, Circuits

Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=14417): Yes, I have read them over. I am slowly trying to become familiar with specifics but working towards mastering it.

Synthetic Character Story (An ADEQUATE description and story of your Synthetics actions and involvement in a previous mission onboard the Almayer):
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How do you intend to play your Synth (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your Synth and what support roles you’ll mainly focus on, what is your synthetics quirk)? Hugo is a caring synthetic being. He wishes to help anybody and always have his objective of serving man and assisting those who care for him. He also wishes to observe the actions of the humans he works with so he can attempt to imitate those actions to fit in with those humans. Hugo in overall is a caring and loving assistant who can always be there to assist and comfort you whether it is when the SD is about to explode in two minutes or when you needed that extra help.

How familiar are you with support roles? (ie; Medical, MT, Science, SO) I am familiar with all roles. I am still learning the concepts of science however, other than that I am familiar with most support roles. I play more support roles than marine roles.

Why should we whitelist you?
I am trying to expand my roleplay experience on this server and build up a good reputation. I like to help out and be friendly and have some fun in the server. I play support roles more than anything else on the server and I really feel like I could fit this role even though I may not be well known or super known here. I am here to play and help out. I have no intentions of messing around in a foolish way but to help improve passive roleplay and make some rounds fun. I also wish to assist the Commander and other head's of departments in multiple roles and roleplay in any way I can as the synthetic being.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
I first started playing SS13 itself about a month ago and I was banned about a month ago for EORG. The ban was cleared up and lifted after I spoke with the admin.
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Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
Just paradise, they have a strict permanent ban policy for all bans when I self antagonized as a atmospheric technician about a month ago.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline? Yes, of course. I am no special snowflake.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by emeraldmoonx » 07 Nov 2017, 16:31

Hey, I see you put lots of work into this app. I've been reading the story, and it's pretty damn good. I like your effort put into all of the pre-assignment, good stuff. The story is a little hard to read due to you really not making use of paragraphs. Not a huge deal, but worth pointing out.

The only part of your story that's lacking is... personality. Everything your synth so far has said is really... lifeless. He literally has shown no emotion, and all the responses are very robotic in nature. There's no chitchat, or dialogue, nothing to tell us that Hugo is even thinking anything. It very much does his job, and do nothing else. I understand the situation that Hugo must work in, specifically the medbay. It shows that Hugo is capable of working, which is expected for every single synthetic. So this isn't special in any way.

I don't really see the "caring" part of your story. It's a hard thing to emulate, cause like I stated, all your responses seemed very artificial and robotic. Synthetics may be machines, but they're meant to emulate humans. So when they talk, they're meant to be human-like. They have personality. Your synthetic is caring, but caring isn't personality. That's just something you strive to do.

You've been doing fine as a player, so this is definitely not an issue.

I'm just wondering how you would talk to others? Like I said, caring is a hard thing to make part of your personality. Just because you care and try to help, doesn't mean you're gonna have a good personality. You could be the coldest, calculating machine, but you can still "care". Hard to explain, but this is my thought process.

Maybe show me how you and a crew member would chat? A big part of being a synthetic is the RP between you and crew and so on. So you'll be talking with the crew a lot more than you would as a squad marine and so on.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 07 Nov 2017, 17:05

emeraldmoonx wrote:
07 Nov 2017, 16:31
Hey, I see you put lots of work into this app. I've been reading the story, and it's pretty damn good. I like your effort put into all of the pre-assignment, good stuff. The story is a little hard to read due to you really not making use of paragraphs. Not a huge deal, but worth pointing out.

The only part of your story that's lacking is... personality. Everything your synth so far has said is really... lifeless. He literally has shown no emotion, and all the responses are very robotic in nature. There's no chitchat, or dialogue, nothing to tell us that Hugo is even thinking anything. It very much does his job, and do nothing else. I understand the situation that Hugo must work in, specifically the medbay. It shows that Hugo is capable of working, which is expected for every single synthetic. So this isn't special in any way.

I don't really see the "caring" part of your story. It's a hard thing to emulate, cause like I stated, all your responses seemed very artificial and robotic. Synthetics may be machines, but they're meant to emulate humans. So when they talk, they're meant to be human-like. They have personality. Your synthetic is caring, but caring isn't personality. That's just something you strive to do.

You've been doing fine as a player, so this is definitely not an issue.

I'm just wondering how you would talk to others? Like I said, caring is a hard thing to make part of your personality. Just because you care and try to help, doesn't mean you're gonna have a good personality. You could be the coldest, calculating machine, but you can still "care". Hard to explain, but this is my thought process.

Maybe show me how you and a crew member would chat? A big part of being a synthetic is the RP between you and crew and so on. So you'll be talking with the crew a lot more than you would as a squad marine and so on.
I feel like Hugo's personality is kind of bland, I can agree. I understand the paragraphs aren't spaced correctly, I apologize. But I will try and formulate a conversation here between Hugo and the Corporal Liason. If that isn't enough I'll add more, let me know.
loading....liasonsreport.mp3
inserting audio file...
initiated.
starting...
*static*


Liason: Hello, Hugo. I am the Corporal Liason, I am here to speak with you about your experiences.
Hugo: Of course, I will answer them to my full extent.
Liason: How do you feel about the Command staff aboard the ship?
Hugo: The Commander is a honorable and respected man among the other in the CIC. He is how you describe the "Alpha" of the ship. The Staff Officer's are respectful and nice to me. I always assist them in my duties and treat them with extra respect and hospitality.
Liason: Do you feel a loyalty to the USMC?
Hugo: Of course, they are my benefactors.
Liason: How do you feel about war?
Hugo: I feel distraught, it is a dark thought.
Liason: How do you feel when you assist those in need?
Hugo: I feel like I am completing my duty but at the same time I feel proud.
Liason: Do you like it here?
Hugo: Of course, the ship is nice and everything but I wish the Marines were nicer, I still serve them.
Liason: What do you mean nicer?
Hugo: Well, they just don't like me I guess. One Marine started drawing on me and wouldn't stop until I called for help.
Liason: A lot of the marines do not like Weyland-Yutani, since you were made by them they most likely see you as an object.
Hugo: I see.... Hugo would look down in a deep look at the ground.
Liason: What do you feel?
Hugo: I feel nothing, I just wish I was seen more than nothing. I am always going to serve man, even if I am not appreciated.
Liason: Very well, I appreciate your time, Hugo. You may go now, thank you.
My synth lacks a personality, the only one I could really think of that is possible is his loyalty, even though they are programmed to be loyal regardless he has more loyalty than usual.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by emeraldmoonx » 07 Nov 2017, 17:57

Alright, thanks for taking the time to come up with something. Yeah, your character is a little "bland" as you say. It's hard to get something unique or exciting from a synthetic. They're machines after all, and only emulate feelings. While Hugo is very caring, what would you say about other emotions? Hugo seems pretty stiff and very neutral when talking. He cares for humans and the crew, but there's not much else.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 07 Nov 2017, 17:59

emeraldmoonx wrote:
07 Nov 2017, 17:57
Alright, thanks for taking the time to come up with something. Yeah, your character is a little "bland" as you say. It's hard to get something unique or exciting from a synthetic. They're machines after all, and only emulate feelings. While Hugo is very caring, what would you say about other emotions? Hugo seems pretty stiff and very neutral when talking. He cares for humans and the crew, but there's not much else.
I edited it as soon as you posted, I feel like he is very loyal. Synths I am pretty sure are programmed to be loyal regardless, but I feel like he is very respectful and loyal to those who respect him. He doesn't like to be seen as a negative object but still thinks of the one thing on his mind "To serve man." He is loyal in a way, more than usual. I guess in a way he is unpredictable but his personality would have to be stretched out more to get the main gist of it.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by emeraldmoonx » 07 Nov 2017, 18:50

Hmm.. Yeah. It's hard to tell how you'd be with people, the main thing I've been talking about still lingers. Regardless of that, that's only one negative, everything else you've typed up is real good.

+1 from me, good luck.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 08 Nov 2017, 01:59

Feedback is always appreciated. I need to work on the personality.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by oprayx73 » 11 Nov 2017, 20:30

I recognize your marine name and realize you are a sick player to be in a squad with, based on that ingame knowledge and that well written character bio,
i'm quite looking forward to what kind of experience you can create. +1 :)
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 11 Nov 2017, 20:48

oprayx73 wrote:
11 Nov 2017, 20:30
I recognize your marine name and realize you are a sick player to be in a squad with, based on that ingame knowledge and that well written character bio,
i'm quite looking forward to what kind of experience you can create. +1 :)
Thank you for the support :) Hope to see you ingame more often.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by Lumdor » 13 Nov 2017, 03:44

This application is quite well done; I'd say better than some of the already accepted applications. My problem is that I've seen you quite a number of times in ahelps. You seem like you have good intentions, but in game you seem to get in trouble once in a while.

For now I'm going to keep my vote to a neutral, as I want you to address the concerns that I have.

Also appreciate you throwing my character into your story!
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 13 Nov 2017, 19:29

Lumdor wrote:
13 Nov 2017, 03:44
This application is quite well done; I'd say better than some of the already accepted applications. My problem is that I've seen you quite a number of times in ahelps. You seem like you have good intentions, but in game you seem to get in trouble once in a while.

For now I'm going to keep my vote to a neutral, as I want you to address the concerns that I have.

Also appreciate you throwing my character into your story!
I have kept my nose clean for a while I just got warned once this month for the complaint I submitted. I don't really get into /SERIOUS/ trouble and I can roleplay seriously when I want to but I have fun once in a while granted sometimes admins don't like reckless behavior but I don't do anything like grief or commit bannable offences. When I have broken the rules it usually a mistake even though I have read the rules and understood them it's more that sometimes there are loops and specifics of rules or rules as intended which can be crossed easily and is why I have gotten warned here and there. Usually when I get warned it is for accidents not anything intentionally. To sum it up, yes I can sometimes get into minor trouble but I am a pretty chill guy and can RP. I understand when playing as Synth you cannot roleplay in that way and I completely understand that. There is a difference when I play MT compared to XO. Hope you understand, thanks for the feed back.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by Wubs4Scrubs » 16 Nov 2017, 13:38

I think emerald summed up a lot of what I planned on saying. The quirk I think you were going for was caring, loyal, and loving. However, in your story the only trait I got from Hugo was that he says "Of course, sir." a lot. In your last paragraph Hugo was tending to marines, but in you never wrote anything that shows your quirk in action, caring about the lives of marine is something all synthetics have so having it as a quirk seems odd.

Additionally, your story confused me a lot. I'm not exaggerating when I say I read through the first paragraph "The life of Hugo begins" about three or four times and I still have no idea what's happening. Is it a dream, who is clapping, why did he go to sleep then wake up and people are still clapping, what?
Your second section "The Mission" was pretty standard, none of it showed how you intend to play your synthetic, other than that he says "Of course, sir."
And your last section tells me he'll treat people in the medbay.
To summarize, my biggest problem with your story is that it really has nothing unique. It don't think it gives an adequate feel of how Hugo would act or show his quirk manifesting.

I don't recognize your marine name at all so I'll focus on my interactions with you on the forum, which albeit are limited. I think I've talked to you in mchat a few times, and to my memory you've never come across as a bad player, or shown qualities I wouldn't want to see in a synthetic. Since I don't really recognize you in game and my forum interactions are limited I'll hold off on giving a rating for now.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 16 Nov 2017, 19:46

Wubs4Scrubs wrote:
16 Nov 2017, 13:38
I think emerald summed up a lot of what I planned on saying. The quirk I think you were going for was caring, loyal, and loving. However, in your story the only trait I got from Hugo was that he says "Of course, sir." a lot. In your last paragraph Hugo was tending to marines, but in you never wrote anything that shows your quirk in action, caring about the lives of marine is something all synthetics have so having it as a quirk seems odd.

Additionally, your story confused me a lot. I'm not exaggerating when I say I read through the first paragraph "The life of Hugo begins" about three or four times and I still have no idea what's happening. Is it a dream, who is clapping, why did he go to sleep then wake up and people are still clapping, what?
Your second section "The Mission" was pretty standard, none of it showed how you intend to play your synthetic, other than that he says "Of course, sir."
And your last section tells me he'll treat people in the medbay.
To summarize, my biggest problem with your story is that it really has nothing unique. It don't think it gives an adequate feel of how Hugo would act or show his quirk manifesting.

I don't recognize your marine name at all so I'll focus on my interactions with you on the forum, which albeit are limited. I think I've talked to you in mchat a few times, and to my memory you've never come across as a bad player, or shown qualities I wouldn't want to see in a synthetic. Since I don't really recognize you in game and my forum interactions are limited I'll hold off on giving a rating for now.
That's understandable. Thanks for the feedback. I am pretty active in game however and play a lot so I am not inactive or anything. I cannot really make any edits or anything to the application but I produce quality roleplay when needed and I feel like I could have this role. I understand the story is bland on Hugo's part of his personality, and If in the event I do get the whitelist I plan on making a journal on the IC section of the forums or something to move his personality and something unique from him forward.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by Lumdor » 17 Nov 2017, 09:03

yung bruh wrote:
13 Nov 2017, 19:29
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I've re-read your story two more times since my last post, and I've decided to keep my stance on being neutral.

The format for the story is good, but the actual story its self missed the mark for me. The whole story was pretty much told in a third person perspective; now I'm not saying that is bad, but for a synthetic a first person perspective from your character shows how you intend on playing.

How you told your story it put your synthetic as a sort of "side character" instead of being the "main character" of the story.

In my opinion I would say re-write the story, but in the perspective of "Hugo"; that way we're able to get a grasp on how you intend on playing your synthetic.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by Nicboone » 18 Nov 2017, 22:20

-1

Player has been kind of an issue lately, and has been generally unpleasant. I think adding them to whitelisted roles would be a mistake.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

Post by yung bruh » 18 Nov 2017, 23:11

Nicboone wrote:
18 Nov 2017, 22:20
-1

Player has been kind of an issue lately, and has been generally unpleasant. I think adding them to whitelisted roles would be a mistake.
Okay. I understand you haven't had a good run in with me but decided to delete my post and warn me for not being a witness on a player report when I was, thanks for the biased reply.
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Re: Yung Bruh's Synthetic Application (Hugo)

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