Predator Application :nok'va n'ita (alone but stronger) (probally gotta be trash)

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 06 Dec 2017, 15:29

Byond ID:leonidzurnadzhi

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):Leonid Zurnadzhi (simple isn't it?)

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): nok'va n'ita

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Of course i am. If i gotta hunt i always gotta check Predator Code Of Honor First.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):He always was alone from he's birthday, for he's free time he taking rest and eating, when he sees a worth prey he gets determined, and he takes it down maybe or not soon he gets it, he always serious but also a bit nice, he's also a bit afraid every-day he hunts prey after he become young, he always carefull with prey's, he everyday thinking, about what he doing to do, he never gotta attack without a reason, he also figured out, even no matter how alonely he becomes, he becomes stronger, what he wil investigate today, nobody knows.

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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)? : Well i first of all finding the furry prey and make a dinner of it, then if i find surviours i gotta analyse them first, then if need i gotta take them down, if they gotta act hostile to me, i really want to make very special rounds of everybody i find, if i find aliens i first of all don't attack em, if they attack me, i attack them.
I wil make duels if someone calling me, and more other things that gotta make my gameplay much easiler

Why should we whitelist you? : well i'm very long watching other's predators in game and in forum, much of them make me confused, but much of them make me interested, so i decide to become predator,
if i even get denied, welp i try my best that's all but i always gotta try to RP all times and if need I gotta fight so that's all.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? : *gets vietnam flashback" umm well to be honest yeah one time when i do russian game with other marine, marine lose and then he shot himself with revolver and then, i decide to shot myself too, and that's how i get seems banned, to be honest when admin tell me when he about to ban me, i just quit the game, i was really sorry about that, and a bit confused about this, i'm very sorry that won't happen again! I hope.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? : Well yeah honest i'm been banned from many servers others was stupid reasons and others was serious reasons but most of them is perma-bans and yeah i'm un-lucky guy don't judge me why i banned on them, any way i have fun there, but i hope i get unperma-banned from there some-day.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? : No they must always follow Predator Code Of Honor! And the rules.

Shyguychizzy · Post by **Shyguychizzy** » 06 Dec 2017, 15:34

I'll thoroughly review at a later note. Though just a brief skim through it, I have no idea who you are and seems a bit blandish but nicely portrayed, and a bit few posts. I shall remain neutral for time being until I fully review it as is.

Trench007 · Post by **Trench007** » 06 Dec 2017, 15:55

I'm noticing a lot of spelling and grammatical mistakes. The fact that you have next to no forum activity, doesn't help your case. If I'm going to be honest, I think you should build up your activity and also revise your next application more. There's little polish or depth from this application, so I would like you to look at the approved applications when you decide in the future to make another one.

The quality of this application compared to others just doesn't match, so I'm going to give you a -1.

TheMusician321 · Post by **TheMusician321** » 07 Dec 2017, 05:14

Backstory had a uh, unique presentation, you've got a ton of spelling and grammar mistakes as well but so did Simon and he got accepted.

Plus you've literally got like, five forum posts, I also have never ever seen you in game but that's probably a time zone thing.

All in all I gotta -1, get a bit known around the server, post some more on the forums so we know how you're like OOCly and get better at grammar and english as pred is a high RP role and is pretty stressful.

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 07 Dec 2017, 09:05

Shyguychizzy wrote: ↑
06 Dec 2017, 15:34
I'll thoroughly review at a later note. Though just a brief skim through it, I have no idea who you are and seems a bit blandish but nicely portrayed, and a bit few posts. I shall remain neutral for time being until I fully review it as is.

well to be honest i was watching other's predator's and i thinking of it what a backstory i should make well if i get denied well i don't care, i gotta try my best again in next 3 mouths maybe my predator application is some stupid or dumb, but i wasted on it 2 hours, to be honest i don't think i could make and is my 2 attempt, that's why i put (gotta be trash) in the tittle because, i think i won't make it but i try, well about backstory i made it on quick because it was night time and i was watching other predator how he was on ship, or how that called secret base, then i think something of preview like my predator starts on the old ship of predators, then about cooking, i seen predator who gets surviour to he's base, and feed him up with some uhhh, soup or how it called, and i think of it, and decide to add it in my backstory, so i think that's all, i hope i don't get denied, we all know we all don't want to get denied, anyway that's all i have to say.

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 07 Dec 2017, 09:09

welp i understand your choice, but i have been 1 mouth on this server, don't know how did you not see me, but that's okay if you vote 1- because i write it, where it was night time how i saying, but thanks for your choice i wil maybe next time work harder on my backstory

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 07 Dec 2017, 09:10

Well, if i had time i can fix the grammar, but it was night time so i post it on it, pretty much that's all what can i say, but thanks for vote that makes me realizied that some people don't like my backstory and that's okay.

Ghostdex · Post by **Ghostdex** » 07 Dec 2017, 11:51

Alright so, I noticed a lot of grammar issues which made reading the story difficult. The thing is, in your story the predator grabbed a moneky from a xeno, called said monkey prey and seemed like it didn't regard the xeno as prey at all. You posted this at night and blamed some grammar problems on that, you should have held off on posting this and read over it more.

You have very little forum activity, but you have a fair amount of activity in game but I don't exactly notice you. You should be on CM for longer than a month before making an application to a pretty hard whitelist.

Overall, this application isn't up to par, read some accepted apps next time. -1 from me

shyshadow · Post by **shyshadow** » 07 Dec 2017, 12:59

All the reasons have already been stated for this application to be unfavorable to be accepted. But quite honestly my biggest problem is your English etiquette, regardless of being able to properly roleplay being able to use at least minimum grammar matters.

Being able to communicate properly is a key asset to roleplay. The proper use of words and the flow needed to not sound moronic is essential. Even if the backstory is original, I don't want someone that can't be understood properly to be part of the high standard that is the Predator whitelist. Typically they're the pinical of what proper roleplay can be.

Honestly you NEED to improve your English skills before I can take anything considerably into consideration.
-1

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 07 Dec 2017, 14:03

well okay i try to solve those ploblems, but seems my nobody likes my application, *sigh* well i really don't know, what should i do with those ploblems, but i fix em in future, and as i can see a lot of 1- welp i understand that i don't get approved, well i don't know i guess is gotta be denied......well maybe the backstory was the worst, or maybe the name, or maybe the chapters was suck, or maybe they don't make sense, or is it because i don't know english? Who knows.

TehSpoderman · Post by **TehSpoderman** » 07 Dec 2017, 15:37

Leonidzurnadzhi wrote: ↑
07 Dec 2017, 14:03
well okay i try to solve those ploblems, but seems my nobody likes my application, *sigh* well i really don't know, what should i do with those ploblems, but i fix em in future, and as i can see a lot of 1- welp i understand that i don't get approved, well i don't know i guess is gotta be denied......well maybe the backstory was the worst, or maybe the name, or maybe the chapters was suck, or maybe they don't make sense, or is it because i don't know english? Who knows.

From what I am seeing from these comments, its a combination of all of the above.

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 10 Dec 2017, 08:02

*sigh* why i always suck at this, what's the matter with me?

TheMusician321 · Post by **TheMusician321** » 10 Dec 2017, 09:56

I had an interaction with them in dchat and just from that i'm dropping my -1 here, he was super salty, aggressive and was generally being a dick about the whole thing calling it non-sense story, I don't think you'd be a good fit for pred along the many grammar mistakes in your pred app.

Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 10 Dec 2017, 09:58

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Leonidzurnadzhi · Post by **Leonidzurnadzhi** » 10 Dec 2017, 10:33

............okay leonid calm down, take deep breaths nothing will happen of that shitpost right? *takes deep breathes* well i don't know what happens to my application but to be honest is trash, yeah. Is trash i know nobody loves it even i don't even see 1+ for trying what the fuck is wrong with this world? I even don't care about that post over up there, i just see people don't want me here then i don't want to be here, that's it, *sigh* i quit............. yes tons of don't like it. yes tons of it dislike it. YES TONS OF IT HATE IT. AND YES I WON'T GET BE ACCEPTED. Is just let me talk you with this, I hate making characters you know this is my first time and this is another try of me do predator and again same responds, and again same results, you people even have a soul? Like you reading it like this and you thinking, what a cunt is this bustard is it, and then you posting 1- because i'm like "1- because your backstory sucks get lost you fucking prick-ass shit" well like this i think every post of it think of it, but if fucking start dislike like you because i don't like anything even if the backstory was cool i stil hate it, you gotta like it huh? HUH? bullshit HELL NO, i was currently watching predator and talking to people what i thinking of posting it and then some prick comes here from the game and shitpost it over my application, BECAUSE I SAID IN GAME YEAH HELL NO WHY NOT? YEAH why not? and tons of you right now reading this and thinking what is this prick talking about, welp i'm saying, That. okay look let's see the point, application on predator needs to read tons of wiki, WHAT THE FUCK I HAVE TO READ ALL THE FUCKING WIKI, I'm RIGHT NOW SITTING AND CHAIR AND FUCKING READ 1000000 HOURS OF NON-SENSE THAT DOSN'T EXIST AND IS NEED IT BECOMES I WANT TO BECOME PLAYEBALE CHARACTER? well okay wiki is okay BUT ABOUT BACKSTORY HOW I MUST PUT IT FUCKING BACKSTORY IN MY CHARACTER BETTER REMOVE THAT PART AND FORGET IT AND BURN IT DOWN and here we go we have good application, without a fucking story. And look tons of 1+ but seems now you know who i am and you know what Themusician321 I ain't care what you said, i ain't care about 1-, i ain't care about backstory, I JUST WRITE IT BY MYSELF, I HOPE THAT PRICK DON'T EVEN GET APPLIED BY PREDATOR IF SO HE'S fucking SHITPOST person oh and forget that prick put Two 1- yeah get out of here and get lost and let's see about he's shitposting posts oh look he got 1 2 3, hmm 3 denied requests on predator i see welp welp well done *sarcastic claping* Sucks to be you, by the way i'm well angry let me start text here, i don't know what happens after i post this but that's what i thinking of all shit for predator

Redikalzip · Post by **Redikalzip** » 10 Dec 2017, 10:53

After your "salty" post on Musican post above I can say only one. -1.
Yes, we don't know who are you and what you can do in RP role. Being predator hard and needs expirence in game. Maybe you know about traditions, tech or other thing, but It's not all for that application.

Gramma isn't /main/ problem in your post. You're salty.
We don't needs a .. predator who just want pew pew pew and grief things, plus your text style isn't good for my reading. Hard and noninteresting.

As Feweh said once: Preds whitelist is harder whitelist in SS13. /And you must be more popular in SS13/. I never seen you in game, really. I don't know who are you IN-GAME. It's means you need be more active.

So, minus 1 because: Salt. Story. Aggresive.

Heckenshutze · Post by **Heckenshutze** » 10 Dec 2017, 11:24

Not going to make wood of the fallen tree, but I can give you some advice:

First of all, never do this app if you're not known in the forums and in the game. -1

Tharinoma · Post by **Tharinoma** » 10 Dec 2017, 11:56

Hello leonidzurnadzhi,

I'm sorry, but your english skills aren't up to the standard I believe is required to be a predator, -1.

TehSpoderman · Post by **TehSpoderman** » 10 Dec 2017, 13:57

Leonidzurnadzhi wrote: ↑
10 Dec 2017, 10:33
............okay leonid calm down, take deep breaths nothing will happen of that shitpost right? *takes deep breathes* well i don't know what happens to my application but to be honest is trash, yeah. Is trash i know nobody loves it even i don't even see 1+ for trying what the fuck is wrong with this world? I even don't care about that post over up there, i just see people don't want me here then i don't want to be here, that's it, *sigh* i quit............. yes tons of don't like it. yes tons of it dislike it. YES TONS OF IT HATE IT. AND YES I WON'T GET BE ACCEPTED. Is just let me talk you with this, I hate making characters you know this is my first time and this is another try of me do predator and again same responds, and again same results, you people even have a soul? Like you reading it like this and you thinking, what a cunt is this bustard is it, and then you posting 1- because i'm like "1- because your backstory sucks get lost you fucking prick-ass shit" well like this i think every post of it think of it, but if fucking start dislike like you because i don't like anything even if the backstory was cool i stil hate it, you gotta like it huh? HUH? bullshit HELL NO, i was currently watching predator and talking to people what i thinking of posting it and then some prick comes here from the game and shitpost it over my application, BECAUSE I SAID IN GAME YEAH HELL NO WHY NOT? YEAH why not? and tons of you right now reading this and thinking what is this prick talking about, welp i'm saying, That. okay look let's see the point, application on predator needs to read tons of wiki, WHAT THE FUCK I HAVE TO READ ALL THE FUCKING WIKI, I'm RIGHT NOW SITTING AND CHAIR AND FUCKING READ 1000000 HOURS OF NON-SENSE THAT DOSN'T EXIST AND IS NEED IT BECOMES I WANT TO BECOME PLAYEBALE CHARACTER? well okay wiki is okay BUT ABOUT BACKSTORY HOW I MUST PUT IT FUCKING BACKSTORY IN MY CHARACTER BETTER REMOVE THAT PART AND FORGET IT AND BURN IT DOWN and here we go we have good application, without a fucking story. And look tons of 1+ but seems now you know who i am and you know what Themusician321 I ain't care what you said, i ain't care about 1-, i ain't care about backstory, I JUST WRITE IT BY MYSELF, I HOPE THAT PRICK DON'T EVEN GET APPLIED BY PREDATOR IF SO HE'S fucking SHITPOST person oh and forget that prick put Two 1- yeah get out of here and get lost and let's see about he's shitposting posts oh look he got 1 2 3, hmm 3 denied requests on predator i see welp welp well done *sarcastic claping* Sucks to be you, by the way i'm well angry let me start text here, i don't know what happens after i post this but that's what i thinking of all shit for predator

Yeeeeaaaahhhh.... -1.

shyshadow · Post by **shyshadow** » 10 Dec 2017, 17:44

Walks into the room with two ice cream cones, stopping dead in is tracks. Stunned by the shocking post of a foolish attitude
Breathing in then exhaling, speaking in a lowly voice, "What the fuck?"
That is basically my reaction is all of....well all of the above. As much as I don't want to use my time to point out how much wrong is in those comments. I'd like to point out especially pissed I got when asked some silly question. Or in layman's terms, "Why do I have to put effort into making an application?" And that to me is just so wrong. It's like no, just no. I feel like you want us just to pity you, which doesn't work.

Seriously, grow the fuck up. There's a reason we have applications, to separate the good, the bad, and the ugly. And you sir fall under "the ugly" so please just accept the info and don't monologue about how bad you think your application is.

Rustarus · Post by **Rustarus** » 11 Dec 2017, 17:57

Look bud, I really hope this is a troll post. Because if it's not, and the way you are acting, I think you have more of a problem mentally than with the post itself. That being said, look at how other apps have handled criticism, then look at yours. Improve english, and grow up, then try again.

Shyguychizzy · Post by **Shyguychizzy** » 12 Dec 2017, 22:11

Gonna have to agree with what many people stated in the comments. After reading it personally it seems bland I mean I admit quite a bit more detailed then others but still the sounding quite not an eye catcher. True it is suppose to be a brief description on the application part but the story didn't seem much new. Your reaction as well was quite something over a few comments from reading and over viewing them as well. There will be harsh comments whether good or bad among this sort of application as this whitelist isn't your ordinary as the role is truly above regular standards of role play and for the role itself not regular thing...it is serious/important role entrusted to those for the game. These applications help us deceiver and see how you are as a player. Many aren't aware but not only the application that is judged...it as well is their character, and judgement. I myself do not know you as well, however give it time perhaps play bit more marine to be known. For time being from over viewing I'll be giving you -1.

NescauComToddy · Post by **NescauComToddy** » 13 Dec 2017, 01:21

Jesus Christ.

I am always lenient in applications, and always try to be as positive as possible with the applicants, providing support to them whenever possible. But this is beyond my limits.

I'm honestly confused if this is a shitpost or not. I believe that your problem is not in the application itself, but in your mental condition. If this really is genuine, you urgently need to change your concepts, because having such temperament in your personal life will end up fucking you in many ways. Both in your social life and professional life.

Consider this not only as a critic, but also as a life advice.

Post by **Feweh** » 13 Dec 2017, 02:45

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