Applying for Predator

[KaiserBlackwood]

Byond ID: KaiserBlackwood

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here): Andreas Hellstrom

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): N'jal

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes I am

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):

Intro

He was born in clan of He'tal, clan of Yautja that lives far from other clans, Honor here is as much important as in other clans, so no doubt he followed Elders orders, even if they were complicated. His father was famous hunter in his clan, but he died trying to hunt down the Alien Queen.
Elders treated him as any other young Yautja, severely and rightfully.

Hunt

His last Hunt under Elders watch went well and he has managed to hunt down an alien Hunter, he was proud of himself as he didn't used cloak and caster, only his spear. Still, he is nervous about his future Hunts.
That nervousity comes from his father's death. But he will fight it over and become the one that Elders can be proud of.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?

He will fight with honor, saving life for the ones who fought alongside him, however, if danger of becoming dead pile of meat comes too close, he would escape and come back for revenge.

Why should we whitelist you?

I love RP, it is the way to become someone different than you are, and Predator is way to feel how it to be ultimate hunter, that knows his game better than anyone.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?

Can't remember, but it was something about suicide, escalation of things9shot guy for disobeying) and maybe that's all.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?

No I am not

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes I understand

[taketheshot56]

Okay, overall this isnt the best app.

First things first this is your third post on the forums ever. Predators are usually well known players.

Two, your background story should be WAY longer, take a look at other apps for some idea.

Three, your play style seems very bland and unoriginal "Fight for honour" "Run away if in danger" Try to get a unique twist on things.

Overall -1, I highly suggest you be more active both in game and on the forum, Ive never seen you IG.

[TheMusician321]

Yeah I'm gonna have to -1 this, take a look at the accepted apps and come back in 3 months, the story was super super short and uninteresting, whitelist reason was bland, forum activity is close to non-existant, I've seen you in game though but I haven't really seen you roleplay much.

[Avalanchee]

Everything is said above. Short and uninteresting story, 3 forum posts and meh whitelist reason..

Definetly read some accepted pred apps and watch preds ig as an observer

-1

[caleeb101]

Also gonna say no. Not sure if you realised how difficult a role predator is to get but it's something even some of the most known/old players in the community struggle to get. No offence, but a guy with 3 forum posts total and a barely known IG game getting the role would be an insult to all of the previous accepted applicants.

-1

[Sambalu]

This app appears to have very little effort put into it, overall. It's only your third forum posts, and the story is just bad. It's boring, short, and has many mistakes in it. The reason you should be whitelisted is also not convincing at all. Your playstyle is extremely generic and vague. "fighting for honor" is basically what every predator does. We want to know specifically how you would play. I haven't seen you in-game either.
Overall, a -1

[KaiserBlackwood]

Fuck you all, thanks for understanding and -3, fuck you

[taketheshot56]

Fuck you all, thanks for understanding and -3, fuck you

Wow your words cut me deeply.

[KaiserBlackwood]

Thanks, I did my best (no). I will come back in 3 months.

[x31stOverlord]

Try to take the primary points of the down votes. Not the downvotes themselves.

Forum Activity and Story seems to be the primary cause for pause here. So. Take a look at the whitelisted apps, read through the stories. Read pred comics or the lore, use all available tools to craft a story that works and shows your knowledge and desire to get the Whitelist. Give us something to reach for so we can give more accurate thoughts on the app.

Less content means less feedback. People are less willing to back apps that show ltitle content and effort. Whilst I've seen you in game I will take note to observe you more closely when I can to supply feedback more accurately when you next apply.

Don't be disheartened just try again! We won't hold this against you in future.

[KaiserBlackwood]

Pass me that shotgun, I need to get ideas from their heads...

Anyway, I am working on new story and ideas, i will come back with something that will be (I hope) very interesting, or atleast not that boring.

[NGGJamie]

Denied

Application is far, far too short. Backstory contains very little detail. Try looking at accepted applications/lore and try again in 3 months. Keep in mind this is one of the hardest whitelists to obtain, possibly in the entire SS13 community.