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dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by Boltersam » 25 Apr 2016, 04:54

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Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Nathan Cutter, mostly play Alien. Occasionally doctor.

Name of the character you want whitelisted (As in, the name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Dhi'rauta bhu'ja

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor (viewtopic.php?f=57&t=2693)?: Yup! Read it several times!

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background): Dhi is one of the last surviving members of an ancient clan simply because he was not there when the clan fleet was destroyed. During his first hunt, his hunting partner was killed via honourable death, sacrificing herself when they were overwhelmed by the amount of Serpents. Dhi survived the blast by the skin of his teeth, and was given the mark of Dead Survivor. A punishment reserved for those unblooded who survived because of another's sacrifice. The Dead Survivor was then given a small hunting ship and standard Blooded gear. Dead Survivors could only return to the clan fleet when refueling was needed, and spent their lifetimes simply hunting, their hunting partners dead, they could not go on major clan hunts.

Later, Dhi returned to refuel and found that the clan fleet had been destroyed. He took the supplies he needed and left, never to return. (full information in the side story.)

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?: I intend to try to keep the two forces, Alien and Marine, at a stalemate. Whether for good or bad, I feel like that's what I should do. Collecting trophies from notable combatants from each side is a secondary objective.

Why should we whitelist you?: Going to be honest, I might make rounds more interesting and/or difficult, but I can't guarantee it'll always be fun for everybody. You'll also have another person that can snoop out bugs with the predators.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?: Nope.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?: It's sad, but for once I have to put something on this section of the app other than "No."

I'm currently banned from Citadel, as a result of a late-night group grief. Not one of my best moments. You can ask several people, and they'll tell you that I wouldn't do this to any server that I actually respect, like CM and Archangel.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?: No point in making this application if I didn't.


So, I made a few side stories over the weeks that the predator applications were down. They're all pretty long, read them at your own risk. I didn't want to just leave them forgotten.

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1. There were several people who I showed my draft to who said that having a male predator would lessen my.....I can't even remember now. Something about either seeming sexist or lessening my standing.
Dhi is just a guy. Don't read too much into it.

2. I only used Yautja language for items once, because I think it would be a bit of a pain to have to continually look back for the meanings.

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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by forwardslashN » 28 Apr 2016, 02:08

Since this has gotten no replies, I read through everything, including the extra stories.

In terms of lore, I'm not sure why the death of a hunting partner is such a big deal; typically, Yautja hunt alone, and when one dies their recording of the Hunt is transferred to their ship. Maybe that can be explained by a specific clan custom, I don't know. Now, if Dhi'rauta Bhu'ja was pronounced a coward who failed in the Hunt (which he did), he would really need to take his own life. The Dead Survivor status can also be tossed into a specific clan custom, but giving him the opportunity to Hunt again, alone or otherwise, seems like something the Yautja would not do. He failed, and his repentance should be death. And as a minor point, predator ships can cloak, and it's a little bit of a stretch to say that a USCM fleet would randomly find and destroy an entire Clan fleet. Stealth in space is pretty silly to begin with, so that's not a huge issue or anything.

In terms of the application itself, you're definitely an active member of the community, so I know who you are. But I do wish you put a little more in terms of how you intend to play a predator and the following question. Aside from keeping the balance and all that jazz, I think predators should make rounds interesting--it's always nice to see how you intend to do that.

You definitely put effort into this, but I'm going with neutral for right now.
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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by LordeKilly » 28 Apr 2016, 12:42

Yeah, alongside with //N's comments, I liked the story, definitely effort was put in despite the few errors. I liked it overall, and I've seen what you can do on here and on absolution. +1 matey.
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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by Boltersam » 28 Apr 2016, 18:18

\N wrote:Since this has gotten no replies, I read through everything, including the extra stories.

In terms of lore, I'm not sure why the death of a hunting partner is such a big deal; typically, Yautja hunt alone, and when one dies their recording of the Hunt is transferred to their ship. Maybe that can be explained by a specific clan custom, I don't know. Now, if Dhi'rauta Bhu'ja was pronounced a coward who failed in the Hunt (which he did), he would really need to take his own life. The Dead Survivor status can also be tossed into a specific clan custom, but giving him the opportunity to Hunt again, alone or otherwise, seems like something the Yautja would not do. He failed, and his repentance should be death. And as a minor point, predator ships can cloak, and it's a little bit of a stretch to say that a USCM fleet would randomly find and destroy an entire Clan fleet. Stealth in space is pretty silly to begin with, so that's not a huge issue or anything.

In terms of the application itself, you're definitely an active member of the community, so I know who you are. But I do wish you put a little more in terms of how you intend to play a predator and the following question. Aside from keeping the balance and all that jazz, I think predators should make rounds interesting--it's always nice to see how you intend to do that.

You definitely put effort into this, but I'm going with neutral for right now.
Many of this, is Dhi's clan customs. I didn't want the standard clan, so I went with some unique rules.

The clan was much more social than others, and often hosted large scale dangerous hunts, which is why they have a buddy system, a way of taking down a beast a sole hunter could not, yet still be able to have a large amount of glory for both members. The buddy system is also the system for partnerships, which is why the loss of your hunting partner has a large effect.

Technically, the serpents are all dead. However, only one hunter survived. This can happen due to the lethality of xenomorphs, and Dead Survivors are uncommon, if not rare, and the majority are from failed young blood hunts, as an experienced hunting pair is a powerful foe.

As for the cloak, I do not think even Yautja systems can keep it up indefinitely. The USCM experimental fleet had caught the Clan while preparing to re-cloak. Coincidences like these happen, while seemingly ridiculous, they are possible.

Yes. I suppose I should have, but I can't guarantee I can make rounds more interesting all of the time. No one can. Aside from all that jazz, I'd be searching for suitable champions among each side, though with marines it's trickier to tell. All in all, thank you for the feedback and highlighting points needing clarification!

Edit: also tell me if you want to see more side stories! I have a few cooking!

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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by forwardslashN » 30 Apr 2016, 01:01

Boltersam wrote:
Many of this, is Dhi's clan customs. I didn't want the standard clan, so I went with some unique rules.

The clan was much more social than others, and often hosted large scale dangerous hunts, which is why they have a buddy system, a way of taking down a beast a sole hunter could not, yet still be able to have a large amount of glory for both members. The buddy system is also the system for partnerships, which is why the loss of your hunting partner has a large effect.

Technically, the serpents are all dead. However, only one hunter survived. This can happen due to the lethality of xenomorphs, and Dead Survivors are uncommon, if not rare, and the majority are from failed young blood hunts, as an experienced hunting pair is a powerful foe.

As for the cloak, I do not think even Yautja systems can keep it up indefinitely. The USCM experimental fleet had caught the Clan while preparing to re-cloak. Coincidences like these happen, while seemingly ridiculous, they are possible.

Yes. I suppose I should have, but I can't guarantee I can make rounds more interesting all of the time. No one can. Aside from all that jazz, I'd be searching for suitable champions among each side, though with marines it's trickier to tell. All in all, thank you for the feedback and highlighting points needing clarification!

Edit: also tell me if you want to see more side stories! I have a few cooking!

I'll work backward. I wouldn't mind more stories, I'll probably check 'em out eventually, so feel free.

It might be unlikely but WY stole the stealth technology from the predators fairly early on, so it is possible the cloaking field simply failed to work or what have you. Which is kind of ironic, really, considering how the Yautja are so protective of their tech. It really doesn't bother me one way or the other, and I only brought it up for the sake of feedback. And I think I am starting to understand what you mean about the Dead Survivor status. I may have misunderstood the intent at the first reading. I read it again, and I believe I get it now. Dhi didn't really fail the Hunt so much as he survived the Hunt because of his partner's sacrifice, which was seen as a special type of dishonor in the clan. I can dig that.

Have a +1, good sir.
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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by Boltersam » 30 Apr 2016, 06:45

\N wrote:
I'll work backward. I wouldn't mind more stories, I'll probably check 'em out eventually, so feel free.

It might be unlikely but WY stole the stealth technology from the predators fairly early on, so it is possible the cloaking field simply failed to work or what have you. Which is kind of ironic, really, considering how the Yautja are so protective of their tech. It really doesn't bother me one way or the other, and I only brought it up for the sake of feedback. And I think I am starting to understand what you mean about the Dead Survivor status. I may have misunderstood the intent at the first reading. I read it again, and I believe I get it now. Dhi didn't really fail the Hunt so much as he survived the Hunt because of his partner's sacrifice, which was seen as a special type of dishonor in the clan. I can dig that.

Have a +1, good sir.
Thank you! Expect another side story in a week or so!

Also, some clarification on when I will be trying to force a stalemate, I will be hindering large-scale attacks, such as Nexus or Hive raids. On hive assaults, I can get away with just injuring the marine side. I'm not going to have to kill someone that I don't have to. (Of course, people with high kill counts are excepted, due to them being worthy prey.)

However, on Nexus assaults, aliens will not be stopped by pain. I'll be thinning their numbers, otherwise they'll keep healing and coming back.

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Post by Feweh » 13 May 2016, 01:18

+1
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Re: dhi'rauta bhu'ja (Cunning Ghost)

Post by TR-BlackDragon » 29 May 2016, 23:53

Hmmm sure why not


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