Xur's Pred App. Ka'Torag-na Bhu'ja (Lurking Ghost)

[Xurphorus]

Byond ID: Xurphorus

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Xur''Ghost''Dergens

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Ka'Torag-na Bhu'ja (Lurking Ghost)

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?
I've grown up watching the predator movies, Watched how whitelisted players handle themselves, and have found myself lucky to be apart of the events that have taken place in the past. I am very aware of what should and should not be done. I'm familiar.

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):

Born nameless, it was a difficult life growing up in the harsh society of the Yuatja. His makers were a loveless pair, seeking for their spawns to earn their names instead of being given one at birth. The details of how Ka'Torag-na Bhu'ja earned his name only defines the meaning behind it. He seemed an outcast amongst society, surviving along the outskirts of a world where the strongest and most skilled may be called powerful. He kept to the shadows, only hunting under the cover of night where his prey may only hear a whisper before succumbing to his spear, those who live to witness his feats may whimper and only describe a phantom lurking in the darkness, or a spirit looking for a place to belong amongst the living, but these are only rumors of course. The time came where he was ready for the trials, he trained endlessly to perfect his skill, he honed his mind and body for the obstacles that may come his way. He was determined to become a famed hunter, a respected leader, a rite to a name.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)? I intend to play my predator much how I play my CM character, a born leader. I will respect my Clan elders and follow their ways as a youngling/unblooded should, but I intend to raise up the ranks.

Why should we whitelist you? I'm a known player, I'm somewhat opinionated, but I'm respectful. I wont cause any trouble as a predator unless trouble finds me.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?None that I can think of at this moment.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? N/A

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Yes, I'm aware.

[zskninoh]

+1, Always see Xur around. He's a pretty solid all around player, and I swear the BEST MP ever,

[Feweh]

Xur, I'm really disappointed in your application. To be honest it's pretty awful and looks like minimal effort was put into it compared to the other strong ones currently up.
Everyone knows your a competent player and respects your lead in-game. However given how picky Predator applications are now I'm not sure your presence in-game and in the community is going to be enough. It would be unfair of me to give you a +1 just solely based on you being a competent player while others are putting out strong applications.

Anyways, best of luck.

[Xurphorus]

Yeaaaa, I know I'm still working on it. Trying to make a story from scratch is hard especially when its supposed to be brief. Any tips?

[forwardslashN]

Yeaaaa, I know I'm still working on it. Trying to make a story from scratch is hard especially when its supposed to be brief. Any tips?

I don't think I'm in a position of giving story tips, but I would really like to see more about how you plan to play the role. You're a good player a long time community member, but I honestly have no idea what you would do as a pred. Maybe give a brief summary of how you would go about a typical round?

[Azmodan412]

I don't think I'm in a position of giving story tips, but I would really like to see more about how you plan to play the role. You're a good player a long time community member, but I honestly have no idea what you would do as a pred. Maybe give a brief summary of how you would go about a typical round?

Okay, when I hit a mental block when writing a story from scratch is to work backwards. What resolution to a story do you want? Do you want a 'TBC' (To Be Continued) ending, or a realization of such. Once you decide the ending, how does the character reach the ending. Once you figure out how your character reaches the resolution, the words just flow out.

[Tristan63]

+1
Just a recommendation I don't think you should use a spear, use the WAR GLAIVE!!

Good app overall, alittle short but still better than most.

[NoShamNoWow]

+1 The story is not the best but Xur is the most competent person I've ever seen on CM in my opinion, I don't see why he shouldn't be given a chance.

[ParadoxSpace]

He may be a good marine, but I'm wary about him being a good pred. I'm withholding my vote for now, somewhat leaning towards +1.

[Ms.Degrasse]

An amazing player in any role. Nice member of this community too.
Had interesting interactions with him, and I confirm him as a good roleplayer regarding not just his role, but also his character.

+1

[apophis775]

I'm hesitant, because the "how do you plan to play" section is a bit... sparse. It's a very important section for us, so I'd prefer more information in it.

[coroneljones]

Looks good from what I see
Xur is a great player

+1

[Adjective]

Neutral. Application is sparse and although Xur is a good player, he didn't really impress much with his application lacking important details and consisting of little more than a short paragraph of background information.

[Xurphorus]

I was trying to edit it but I didn't know about app lock after you finish it D;. Give me a break its my very first pred app, I took the word brief very literal.

[Ms.Degrasse]

... I took the word brief very literal.

The "brief" created a difficulty on writing applications, as it's subjected to player's interpretation.
What would be a too long or too short text that wouldn't fit this parameter?

Anyway, I will give him a +1.
Not simply because of the predator's app, but also because of his human character's dossier - and the way he acts on the game - that reflects much more what this player is capable of (http://cm-ss13.com/viewtopic.php?f=91&t=4392).

[LocalizedDownpour]

I was trying to edit it but I didn't know about app lock after you finish it D;. Give me a break its my very first pred app, I took the word brief very literal.

Xur I think whats more important is less of the backstory and more of everything else.

I'd consider brief to be 3-5 sentences, easily no more then a paragraph. Honestly I hope you get it as you're a very competant player and I don't think you need a light novel of a backstory to be considered, though I feel like going into fine detail on the other categories is crucial. Just my two cents, take my criticism as you wish, I want you to get approved and I feel this would help.

[Xurphorus]

Thank you for the advice, even if I do get do get denied it sucks you would have to wait a while to try again. Here's to hoping the Admin gods approve me.

[Feweh]

Need feedback on this again from the predator community.

Even if already posted.

[forwardslashN]

-1
I like Xur as a player, but this application is not sufficient in my eyes to qualify for the role.

[Xurphorus]

I have an edited version, but I wont be able to post it cause of the lock, when I did make the app I forgot about the time limit before it locks disabling the edit.

[SagaSword]

-1
I like Xur as a player, but this application is not sufficient in my eyes to qualify for the role.

I have to agree with Noize.
you are a good player but the lore is not the best.

[SovietKitty]

+1

Mostly due to my experiences with Xur, and I trust him to behave responsibly and act as a round enhancing tool instead of a bully abusing a new toy, and I think that makes up for the application.

[Feweh]

Denied.
General consensus from everyone is an inadequate application.
Good player in-game, disappointing APP.